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-Hawk-
11-05-2008, 03:54 PM
School didn't leave me much time or will to animate. Anyways, after two months... I started my All Stars Collaboration 2 Entry.

Preview : http://www.swfme.com/view/1279942

First part of it is golf. Please C&C, I really need it.

Mesmay
11-05-2008, 04:08 PM
Theres a lot of things to say on this.


1. Theres a tuft of grass which appears but is then gone by the next frame.
2. The speed when the club hit the ball wasnt high enough.
3. The sky is too rich in colour.
4. The grass is too rich in colour.
5. The club wasnt that great. You might want to redo it.
6. The whole body would rotate as he swung, but only the arms and head moved.
7. At first I thought he was wearing a mask. So make that more clear next time.
8. It was kinda too short for a collab piece. I know it was only a small part but if golf ends after that then its really not worth putting in. You would need to put something before or after.

-Hawk-
11-05-2008, 04:12 PM
It's just a small part of it, yes. There will be some shape tweens over there. Basically, the ball shape tweens from a sport to another so I have all of them. Anyways... you'll see. :P I'll add the grass to all the frames, I forgot to insert. The swing on the legs was very slight, I'll make it better next time, move the legs more.

-Hawk-
11-06-2008, 12:30 PM
Comments please ? A welcome back ? >_> ah...

Rabstar
11-06-2008, 12:31 PM
The club, looks like a spear..
WELCOME BACK! ^^

dawG
11-17-2008, 12:19 PM
The anim was horrible.

The club looked like a spear, and the wasn't any easing, the drawing itself was kinda bad too.
Maybe like change everything, then it could work out.

-Hawk-
11-17-2008, 12:50 PM
Duh... if you're trying to prove something... I don't know... You just wrote a comment of anger here... Replacing everything is not a good thing to do. And don't say I'm not taking comments. I've been here for a lot of time and I know the difference between a good and a bad review. Yours is not good to follow, as you probably know personally. The fact that the club looked like a spear was also said by Saha... that is because of the point it's seen from, which is from ahead of it (not laterally as everybody normally sees it). So I could say you telling me that didn't help me much.

Also... you revived an old thread once again. I'm not trolling, I'm just observing that you've broken lots of rules since you came here. Take care with that anti-social behavior of yours. >_>

dawG
11-17-2008, 12:54 PM
u suck .

-Hawk-
11-17-2008, 01:40 PM
That's a hopeless man's response. Now, unless you have something good to comment get out of this thread. Since you revived it I might as well just get some more comments even though this is a quite short, unfinished animation.

Jousteh
11-17-2008, 02:23 PM
Hawk, don't mind him, he's a nub who acts like a pro just because he got a one good comments on his animation though the animation was stiff as hell.

-Hawk-
11-17-2008, 03:05 PM
Why thank you Jousteh. :) Some animation advice for me? I'm sure yours would be useful. :)

dawG
11-17-2008, 03:13 PM
Jousteh please stop that cry talk.
Hawk, it wasn't my idea to be harsh or anything.

The animation are stiff, and you need to add easing n' stuff.
Then it maybe will turn out better.

Jousteh
11-18-2008, 07:04 AM
Jousteh please stop that cry talk.
Hawk, it wasn't my idea to be harsh or anything.

The animation are stiff, and you need to add easing n' stuff.
Then it maybe will turn out better.

Cry talk? You're stupid. I'm just telling the truth about you.

Umm... Add me on MSN Hawk, mar-chello@hotmail.com , and I could help you.

dawG
11-18-2008, 07:38 AM
Im done arguing with you.

-Hawk-
11-18-2008, 10:41 AM
@ Frigid : Ok. :)
@ Jousteh : Added you. Also... by helping me you mean helping me with animation or... hehe

dawG
11-18-2008, 11:17 AM
Good Hawk, now let's make peace.
I'm sorry for the things i've done, I was just in a shit mood that day.

-Hawk-
11-18-2008, 11:21 AM
Good Hawk, now let's make peace.
I'm sorry for the things i've done, I was just in a shit mood that day.

We kind of have already, don't make a big deal out of it, I'm not avenger.

More comments anyone? I want to know if it's smooth. Is it?

unique
11-18-2008, 11:25 AM
Less bitching, more positive comments.
The animation was sort of bad imo, I'll c&c later on when i can be ****ed.

Jousteh
11-18-2008, 01:23 PM
Hawk, probably with whole animating shit, like mentor or something.

-Hawk-
11-18-2008, 01:36 PM
O, that would be nice, even though I don't have much time to animate nowadays with exams coming I could still use some advice. I added you, accept the invitation as soon as you're on MSN. Also, I use Yahoo.