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‹berschall
04-29-2009, 12:55 PM
Okay, I got that song, now I'm writing the lyrics. The problem's just that I'm not getting any further than the first verse, because I can't keep up with the pace of it for some reason. Also, I can't get anything close to a chorus, so if anyone's got ideas, keep 'em coming. If you think it's emo, go **** youself.


Silver Bullets strewn across a dead-end street.
Rough pain on my skin shows me that my heart still beats.
I feel alive as I stare at my blood
hitting the asphalt of this lonely road.

Everything here feels like the strangest dream;
the way that you see me's just consuming me.
Reality touches me with coldest steel,
a touch of perception that I can still feel.




So yeah, now I'm pretty much stuck.

Gavel
04-29-2009, 01:42 PM
Have you thought of a name for the song? Maybe that'll help

‹berschall
04-29-2009, 03:00 PM
Not really anything yet there either.

Wtf
04-29-2009, 03:06 PM
Silver Bullets strewn across a dead-end street.
Rough pain on my skin shows me that my heart still beats.
I feel alive as I stare at my blood
hitting the asphalt of this lonely road.

Everything here feels like the strangest dream;
the way that you see me's just consuming me.
Reality touches me with coldest steel,
a touch of perception that I can still feel.

Silver bullets like roses with thorns
I feel them growing inside me
at the same time that the pain too big to ignore
Blood all over, it won't just stop

I feel myself falling, dead again,
my heart is pumping venom trough my veins
Should I keep myself alive, should I die this instance
These thorns are turning me over
and I've been suffering ever since

I can't stop thinking about the long way to go
Still so much that I haven't done, so
I better start walking, get on my feet again,
Because noone is doing it for me
and I am going to do it for them.

Silver Bullets strewn across a dead-end street.
Rough pain on my skin shows me that my heart still beats.
Thorns inside, soul to give
Should I give up or just beat the street?

Beefy
05-01-2009, 09:28 AM
nice .

‹berschall
05-02-2009, 06:20 PM
Indeed, nice. I'm not gonna just take it as you wrote it, Wtf, but it's great inspiration. Thanks a lot.

Wtf
05-02-2009, 07:03 PM
Indeed, nice. I'm not gonna just take it as you wrote it, Wtf, but it's great inspiration. Thanks a lot.
Here to help .

Beefy
05-03-2009, 12:49 AM
one thing i'm unsure of is the theme of this song

‹berschall
05-03-2009, 11:56 AM
Depression, derealisation, depersonalisation.

Beefy
05-04-2009, 08:37 AM
great. I love it.