View Full Version : My firsts!

08-03-2009, 09:13 AM
My first easytoons.

http://www.truploader.com/uploads/081863Myfirsty.gif My first: A run and random particle jump.

http://www.truploader.com/uploads/452041thesecond.gif My second: A punch and then an explosion.

http://www.truploader.com/uploads/033451flff.gif My third: A blast off.

C&C plox.

Rate me?

08-03-2009, 10:00 AM
Try put the frame on 6 at animation properties under view

08-03-2009, 10:00 AM
In the first one the run was...over drawn. He floated in the air for MUCH to long.
The particles were different...maybe try having them break up into pieces, instead of keeping them all in little individual chunks that jsut get smaller.
There was some resizing in the second one, but pretty unnoticable. The punch was decent, but would be hard to follow up with another attack. Also the explosion lacked force. Try using less frames for the initial expansion, then dissapate the particles VERY slowly.
The blastoff really needs more force, maybe have him move faster or show more anticipation. Your particles are good, but they can be a lot better. Keep working on it, you could be pretty good!

Right now, I'd say med/high Beginner.

08-03-2009, 10:12 AM
Thanks for the crits!

DO I have to go to the shitty Beginners thread?

08-03-2009, 08:13 PM
Hey those are pretty good. Some advice i would have it to remove the line going down the mddle of the take of trail as it would give it more depth. I like the way you animate your particles too.. its different, but i like it :) The run was pretty smooth and there was little to no resizing - well done. The punch was a bit ordinary but im sure u can do better than that ;)

PS - We can bend the rules maybe once.... i know ur much better than almost all begginers but if these are your first they probably should have gone in the beginners section but u dont have to now... just post some new ones in the thread and u should be fine ;p

08-04-2009, 05:55 PM
awesome dude =)

08-04-2009, 06:00 PM
Third one was awsome. Use a bit more particles though, and make them take slightly longer to disipate. Its really good for a first.

08-05-2009, 08:44 AM
Cheers guys .

08-05-2009, 02:29 PM
you should make the sticks bigger... why so far away?

the darkest white
08-05-2009, 10:07 PM
Your particles, while a tad excessive, were awesome sauce.
But perhaps try speeding them up. Possibly use a thicker sticks? size 2 always works.

08-06-2009, 02:13 AM
You've got some talent on particles. Make 'em faster, and improve the movements, especially the run is weird.

08-06-2009, 02:35 AM
ok, thanks guys.

08-06-2009, 12:06 PM
dude, i lol'd because... my name is kieran 0.o
i was like wtf when i saw ur forum name.