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bubbles
04-15-2010, 09:40 AM
http://www.truploader.com/uploads/315218bubbles'bestpivot.gif (http://www.upload.trportfolio.net)
I spent my time on this one and really want CC. Honest, true, CC. Don't say things like "your really good for a beginner" I want you to nit-pick every flaw in the animation to the max level, I want you to say what you think even if you think it will hurt my feelings I can take it. Imagine your CC'ing poppet or jutsu, that's the level I want.

EDIT: I'll put the piv. in so you can look at the frames.
http://pivotup.com/files/6u84bgxt.piv
(uuum... ignore the title of the animation, I don't know what possesed me to call it that)

Gyohdonz
04-15-2010, 11:08 AM
Damnit.

I've spent the last ten minutes watching this over and over.

Not one flaw.

bubbles
04-15-2010, 11:19 AM
Damnit.

I've spent the last ten minutes watching this over and over.

Not one flaw.Wow, no-ones ever said that before :) Thank you.

poppetje3D
04-15-2010, 12:27 PM
I dont see a flaw eighter , but I only see on one frame that the feet got under the horizon.
But why should i look at that , thats one of those minor bs C&C crap that you must ignore.

I love it.

bubbles
04-15-2010, 01:08 PM
I dont see a flaw eighter , but I only see on one frame that the feet got under the horizon.
But why should i look at that , thats one of those minor bs C&C crap that you must ignore.

I love it.
Why thank you :3
And to think, the first time we ever met eachother it ended up in a fight. If I remember correctly it was in the beginners thread, haaaaah sweet nostalgia. And just to show how far I've come since then I'd like to make a contrast..
http://img225.imageshack.us/img225/6994/ufailagain.gifhttp://img402.imageshack.us/img402/5029/pinkhairguy.gifhttp://www.truploader.com/uploads/328695mightyadventurepart2.gif (http://www.upload.trportfolio.net)
http://www.truploader.com/uploads/547027bubbles'bestpivot.gif (http://www.upload.trportfolio.net)
*Sniff* sniff* I LOVE YOU GUYS!!!!

Oblivion EX
04-15-2010, 01:09 PM
I dont see a flaw eighter , but I only see on one frame that the feet got under the horizon.
But why should i look at that , thats one of those minor bs C&C crap that you must ignore.

I love it.

Agreed, but I do notice a tiny nearly negligible bit of shakyness between the first and second steps. at least it looks that way, but it might be the other foot overlapping it.

zawmbee
04-15-2010, 01:10 PM
While there is no flaw the arms are incredibly stiff and the motion is actually quite off. I don't know if that's the style you intended on - the cartoony style. If so, that's fine.

binky
04-15-2010, 01:33 PM
http://www.truploader.com/uploads/315218bubbles'bestpivot.gif (http://www.upload.trportfolio.net)
I spent my time on this one and really want CC. Honest, true, CC. Don't say things like "your really good for a beginner" I want you to nit-pick every flaw in the animation to the max level, I want you to say what you think even if you think it will hurt my feelings I can take it. Imagine your CC'ing poppet or jutsu, that's the level I want.

EDIT: I'll put the piv. in so you can look at the frames.
http://pivotup.com/files/6u84bgxt.piv
(uuum... ignore the title of the animation, I don't know what possesed me to call it that)

tis goooooooooooooooood!!!

Arch-Angel
04-15-2010, 01:39 PM
Change your in step easing (taking a step, bringing back from a step), the arms look very odd, and the upper body leans forward why? A walk is supposed to have high's and lows.

Imagine this. Draw a circle, and put a horizontal line on the top of the head. Don't move the line. When you start your step, your head goes over the line, when you are about to place your lifted foot on the ground (taking a step), the head goes under the line. Your animation consists of the head going straight down until the stick figure stands straight again.

bubbles
04-15-2010, 01:50 PM
Change your in step easing (taking a step, bringing back from a step), the arms look very odd, and the upper body leans forward why? A walk is supposed to have high's and lows.

Imagine this. Draw a circle, and put a horizontal line on the top of the head. Don't move the line. When you start your step, your head goes over the line, when you are about to place your lifted foot on the ground (taking a step), the head goes under the line. Your animation consists of the head going straight down until the stick figure stands straight again.Yes I see what you mean, thank you.
EDIT: Oh and oblivion EX, yes I know what your talking about don't worry it's just the feet overlapping.
Zawmbee: yes that's the kind of style I was looking for.
binky: :3

poppetje3D
04-15-2010, 01:53 PM
Why thank you :3
And to think, the first time we ever met eachother it ended up in a fight. If I remember correctly it was in the beginners thread,
Can't remember. >.>

bubbles
04-15-2010, 01:56 PM
Can't remember. >.>I triple posted and you said something along the lines of "shut up noob or feel my wraith" and I said "your threatening me over the internet? weak." Or so I think.

Kieran.
04-15-2010, 02:04 PM
Shut up noob or feel my wrath!

Nice animation though :P Although the transition from walking to stopping was fairly weird IMO.

bubbles
04-15-2010, 02:05 PM
Shut up noob or feel my wrath!

Nice animation though :P Although the transition from walking to stopping was fairly weird IMO.What do you mean by wierd? I need an explanation!

Sumfink
04-15-2010, 02:19 PM
http://img225.imageshack.us/img225/6994/ufailagain.gifhttp://img402.imageshack.us/img402/5029/pinkhairguy.gifhttp://www.truploader.com/uploads/328695mightyadventurepart2.gif (http://www.upload.trportfolio.net)
http://www.truploader.com/uploads/547027bubbles'bestpivot.gif (http://www.upload.trportfolio.net)

Wasn't the one on the top right like 3 days ago?

And I'm very, very impressed. I see no flaws.

bubbles
04-15-2010, 02:22 PM
Wasn't the one on the top right like 3 days ago?

And I'm very, very impressed. I see no flaws.1) no it's from like a year ago. >.>
2)thanx

Kloud
04-16-2010, 10:19 AM
The walk is flawless. That was awesome. And now that I think of it, yes the arms are stiff. Look at the first through fifth frame. If you see the back arm. it looks like you forgot about it. Make sure you use it. Every motion counts. Unless of course it's unessesary. LoL.

bubbles
04-16-2010, 11:26 AM
The walk is flawless. That was awesome. And now that I think of it, yes the arms are stiff. Look at the first through fifth frame. If you see the back arm. it looks like you forgot about it. Make sure you use it. Every motion counts. Unless of course it's unessesary. LoL.

I liked my swingy arms, bt I will take what you said into accaount. Thank you :)
(no reason to lol though >_>)