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Ashlander
04-29-2010, 03:28 AM
Unlike the others, this will NOT have anything to do with stickpage, aside from the charactors, and some inside jokes. I work, so ill update as often as i can. I'll be sure to write at least some every night.

Plot
Mostly secret for now. But most of it will take place on a cruise ship. Im using the main plot idea from a story i was writting in high school. I will refrain from saying too much as im a huge fan of suspence and suprise.

Anybody can join, since it has nothing to do with the other stories. I will need Main charactors, side charactors that will be primarily for moving bits of the story along. And of course 'named noobs' that get wasted.

Charactor list so far:

Main

Ashlander
22, 6'2, Dirty blonde hair, Grey-blue eyes
Medically discharged from the military. Has an odd fetish with Mustangs. Experienced with M16 based assault rifles, and an M9, also uses a combat knife. Overall shitty life, but remains ambitious.

Nish Niruthan
22, 6'2, Ink Black hair, Brown eyes
Known to friends as The Rhino. Primary interests include movies, pro wrestling, plunder and rape. Wields a Battle-Axe name Shiva and has been known for his unmatched skills in deception. Expert in deducing the identities of Wolves in Sheep's clothing. All-round badass.

Devour
6'1, extremely skilled in martial arts. Carries two of these knives (http://images.bidorbuy.co.za/user_images/763/1107763_BearClaw3.jpg) around, which is only a sane idea because of his ability to turn into a "ghost" for short periods of time... completely transparent but able to stand on solid ground, for around half a second or a second between each interval. He can go into this mode multiple times without having to rest, but it prevents him from passing through walls safely, as he wouldn't have much time to evade the contents inside the room without materializing with them inside his body, which would be painful...
He's kept his abilities a complete secret from everyone except those he trusted fully, to avoid being sent to government testing labs. Because of this, it's very hard to get him to trust you, and he acts with a fake casual atmosphere around everyone. Otherwise, he's a normal guy besides his ability to kill baddies without a second thought.

Scarecrow
Wears silver reflective sunglasses and a straw hat, and a black hooded jacket underneath a grey leather jacket (hood down). Dark hair. Uses a Magnum Research BFR (Biggest Finest Revolver - no i'm not kidding this is a real gun), a hunting rifle, and a 12 inch australian hunting knife. Fuelled by caffeine alone. Due to enormous amounts of caffeine in his blood, can run, jump, fight with extreme energy and speed, but can only keep this up for a short period time. Expert knife handler. Can fire his revolver extremely quickly in bursts, with accuraccy. Incapable of steady aim, but can aim and shoot in one movement with great speed and accuraccy (the longer he aims the less accurate he gets). Chews coffee beans constantly and spits as though it were tobacco, as a result has black teeth and saliva. Also has a beard (because he's on a boat and real men have beards on boats).

Cosmo
His parents abondoned him, they left him on the doorstep of a shoulin temple where he was raised in the 72 shoulin martial arts, until at the age of 19 he was kicked out for talking to much about how "the man is trying to bring us down", the tv was soon thrown out also. So for the past couple of years he has wandered the earth, seeking peace while selling some grass on the side. He claims no weapons except his hands, and whatever might happen to be around him.

ScatMan
6' 2", short brown hair and brown eyes. Carries a pump action shotgun. (http://i184.photobucket.com/albums/x190/shotgunblue/sawedoff.jpg) Also carries a baseball bat (http://www.baseballrampage.com/productphotos/BCN4_front_display.jpg). Speaks with a Brooklyn accent and sees himself as "a big deal". After years of training, ScatMan can run faster than most and has excellent free-running skills. Oh, and will fuck your shit up if you're slow.

MoD
Skinny bordering on Anorexic. Short spiky hair reminiscent of a faux hawk, coloured white with black tips. Six foot six or six foot five, broad muscular shoulders. Short tempered and quick to be somewhere. Very punctual, actually. Uhm, wears a vest and army cargo's with and old shoes he can find. Uses 'knuckle dusters' and a pistol.

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Side

Snowy

Bubbles
Innocent civilian who happens to run into the rest of the heroes, not really a fighter but will happily receive a weapon.
He recieved some training in firing a rifle but only as sport, he's never used it in an actual combat situation.

Sacred
Was born with a genetic disorder where his spine had grown spikes out of his back. After many surgeries and hopeless attempts of trying to fix this and afraid of making him paralyzed, the doctors had to leave him as is. He later found out that these spikes were detachable and are almost impossible to break (seeing as how they're enhanced bones and bones are one of the strongest things on Earth). They're also as sharp as blades so he uses them as weapons for defense. He has trained himself in the master of bone-sword fighting. He ran away from his town when he was classified as a freak. Has been on a search for a home for over a year now. Has lived on trash and low amounts of money from petty jobs. Doesn't like to talk about his past.

Sumfink
Wields a lamp. Also talks in the 3rd person.

Tortuga
Height: 6'3"
Weight: 210 lbs
Clothes: (all of the following appear very tattered and worn-out) Lightweight slim shoes, Baggy Sweatpants, Skin tight wight t-shirt, overlapped by a zip-up jacket.
Face: Black Shiny hair, straight and partially covers the eyes, Aviators which lie on top of piercing red eyes, A surgical mask is stitched into the skin and covers up the lower half of the face.
Weapon: A small M9(pistol) equipped with a lightweight flashlight and held in the left hand, and a long thin rapier which has a golden intricate color guard.
Note: Having a very lean build, he is rather quick and agile, moderate strength, more than would be expected, and is mastered in the art of swordplay.

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Enemies

Coldzero
A silent man. Always playing with a knife (I already told you about that ashlander) and carries a T16. A sharpshooter. But most of all. He hates everyone and wants to be always alone.

Alpha
Description: Usually taking the form of a young brown haired boy. Wields nothing except the power to smite people. With a hammer. =D

Ashlander
04-29-2010, 03:29 AM
The cruise



Part 1


MoD leans against the front fender of his Dodge Ram at the pier, impatiently puffing on a cigarette. He reaches into one of the various cargo pockets in his pants and pulls out his cellphone and looks at the time, 4:13PM. Everybody else is thirteen minutes late. The sound of footsteps walking through a puddle, and a familiar voice catch his attention as he's looking out across the water.

"You're early."

MoD walks around the front of his truck to see two tall figures approaching him. Normally he'd be slipping one of his brass knuckles on right about now, but he instantly recognized the straw hat on Scarecrows head. The other man could only be Devour, often thought to be quite strange because of his lack of social skills. Some people just dont have much to say to anyone. The two of them seem to be like brothers though, always by the others side, always have each others back.

"Actually, Im right on time. You guys are late." MoD replies in an irritated tone.
"Still the same MoD, eh? Pissed off at the world." Scarecrow responds with a little grin, hopping up onto the hood of the truck.
"Want some cock for that cocky smile of your's?"
"At least buy me dinner first."

After a few minutes of awkward silence the loud rumble of a V8 engine can be heard. Before they had a chance to look, a white '84 Mustang comes rumbling up around the Ram, and comes to a stop in a clear area directly in front of the truck. The drivers door, facing them, is opened and Ashlander steps out. Knowing they were behind scheduale, he waves the group over as he walks towards the back of the car. Nish Niruthan emerges from the passenger door, followed by Cosmo crawling out the door from the backseat. Ashlander pops the hatch, and lifts it just enough for the hydraulic lifts to actuate and raise it up, revealing a wide range of weapons. Everybody crowds around the back of the car.


"I just got off the phone with Scatman, he said he'll be here in about 5 minutes with our boat." Ashlander says grabbing his M4 out of the back, and attaching a red dot sight. He slings it over his right shoulder and picks up an M9 pistol, and a shotgun to give Scatman when he arrives. "The rest is up for grabs."

Cosmo picks up a .45 and pulls the slide back. "I never understood the need for this shit." His words muffled by the thumb-sized joint hanging out of his mouth. He tosses the gun back and turns around to see a giant glob of spit come flying into his face. "What... the... ****!"

Devour walks up to the trailer hitched to the back of MoD's Ram. "Is that... a camel?"
"Yeah, her name is Snowy. She's a good luck charm."
"Dude, you can't bring a camel on the boat."
"Dude, shut the fu-"

Ashlander butts in "He's right, the camel stays."

MoD slips one of his brass knuckles on and connects it with Ashlanders chin in one fluid movement. Ashlander stumbles back against Devour, who stands him back up. He clicks his jaw and spits a little blood.

"Fine, but she stays tied up on the boat. And if she shits ANYWHERE, we're feeding her to the sharks."

At that moment a small transport boat scrapes up against the side of pier. Ashlander walks up to the window. "Shit man, you sure you know how to drive this thing?" Scatman walks out of the cabin and steps onto the pier, and turns to look at the boat.

"By the way, I brought someone else too." Scatman says bouncing on his feet nervously.
"What?!"
"Don' worry man, he's clean.I've known him for years."

A clean-cut, fairly attractive man walks out of the cabin of the boat. Wearing sweatpants and an expencive looking zip up jacket, he steps onto the pier in front of Ashlander.

"Whats your name?"
"Im Tortuga. I work for the police department. I heard about your little operation here, I want in. I've never robbed a cruiseship before."

Ashlander
04-29-2010, 03:31 AM
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Ashlander
04-29-2010, 03:39 AM
-Reserved for updates - This should be good enough.

Devour
04-29-2010, 03:47 AM
Devour
6'1, extremely skilled in martial arts. Carries two of these knives (http://images.bidorbuy.co.za/user_images/763/1107763_BearClaw3.jpg) around, which is only a sane idea because of his ability to turn into a "ghost" for short periods of time... completely transparent but able to stand on solid ground, for around half a second or a second between each interval. He can go into this mode multiple times without having to rest, but it prevents him from passing through walls safely, as he wouldn't have much time to evade the contents inside the room without materializing with them inside his body, which would be painful...
He's kept his abilities a complete secret from everyone except those he trusted fully, to avoid being sent to government testing labs. Because of this, it's very hard to get him to trust you, and he acts with a fake casual atmosphere around everyone. Otherwise, he's a normal guy besides his ability to kill baddies without a second thought.

Scarecrow
04-29-2010, 03:47 AM
Scarecrow:
Wears silver reflective sunglasses and a straw hat, and a black hooded jacket underneath a grey leather jacket (hood down). Dark hair. Uses a Magnum Research BFR (Biggest Finest Revolver - no i'm not kidding this is a real gun), a hunting rifle, and a 12 inch australian hunting knife. Fuelled by caffeine alone. Due to enormous amounts of caffeine in his blood, can run, jump, fight with extreme energy and speed, but can only keep this up for a short period time. Expert knife handler. Can fire his revolver extremely quickly in bursts, with accuraccy. Incapable of steady aim, but can aim and shoot in one movement with great speed and accuraccy (the longer he aims the less accurate he gets). Chews coffee beans constantly and spits as though it were tobacco, as a result has black teeth and saliva. Also has a beard (because he's on a boat and real men have beards on boats).

Ashlander
04-29-2010, 03:50 AM
Do I PM you with the character details? Nobody else has posted here.
Eh I'll delete this if I have to PM you.
You dont have to PM me, i litterally just posted this lol.
EDIT: I'd like to keep it as 'realistic' as possible. So ill see what can do with that.

Both added.

Devour
04-29-2010, 04:07 AM
I could give a logical explanation of my "ghost powers."
Similar to my brain giving signals to my muscles to make them move, a genetic disorder could make my brain also emit extremely fast-vibrating signals, which go through my entire body and separate/vibrate the molecules enough so that they can be passed through harmlessly; vibrating so fast that it just sweeps around/through the object. While passing through a wall, the only mark left by that would be molecular-sized holes.

Cosmo
04-29-2010, 04:39 AM
His parents abondoned him, they left him on the doorstep of a shoulin temple where he was raised in the 72 shoulin martial arts, until at the age of 19 he was kicked out for talking to much about how "the man is trying to bring us down", the tv was soon thrown out also. So for the past couple of years he has wandered the earth, seeking peace while selling some grass on the side. He claims no weapons except his hands, and whatever might happen to be around him.

Not_Nish
04-29-2010, 06:56 AM
Ashlander, I didnt know we could give such lengthy, near-superhuman skills! In that case, add "He is greatest escape-artist in history, with charisma bordering on mind-control. His ability to deflect bullets/ blasts with his Battle axe makes him a feared warrior. He possesses the only bomb on the entire ship, capable of blowing up the whole vessel."

Devour
04-29-2010, 06:58 AM
Don't be silly. I balanced out my character by giving him only knives, but you give yourself the power to blow up the whole ship, mind control, and inability to be tied down, along with deflecting bullets and deadliness with the axe.
Silly person

Not_Nish
04-29-2010, 07:02 AM
Dude you can turn into a f*cking Ghost.

The bomb is not a proper weapon. It is a last resort as a suicidal alternative. Ashlander is not going to let me use it, so let it just be part of my arsenal.

Mind control is not the right term. Its BORDERING on Mind control. Its basically just loads of charm, it wont work on someone totally pissed off or on a dog for example. It's mostly just an extreme power of persuasiveness. I cant manipulate you into blowing your own brains out, but I can make you suspect someone else of trying to kill you and feed on the paranoia.

Devour
04-29-2010, 07:08 AM
I can turn into a ghost for about half a second, good sir. I'd be toast if somebody had a machine gun, and was a distance away. It's much less overpowered than your crazy ninja barbarian chrismatic escape-artisty bullet deflecting warrior killer man

It's all Ashlander's choice tho

Zero
04-29-2010, 07:50 AM
Can I be the enemy?

Devour
04-29-2010, 07:53 AM
Oh also, Snowy says that she is happy to join a side character.

ScatMan
04-29-2010, 09:17 AM
I can has main character?
ScatMan- 6' 2", short brown hair and brown eyes. Carries one of these. (http://i184.photobucket.com/albums/x190/shotgunblue/sawedoff.jpg) Also carries a baseball bat (http://www.baseballrampage.com/productphotos/BCN4_front_display.jpg). Speaks with a Brooklyn accent and sees himself as "a big deal". After years of training, ScatMan can run faster than most and has excellent free-running skills. Oh, and will fuck your shit up if you're slow.
(http://i184.photobucket.com/albums/x190/shotgunblue/sawedoff.jpg)

Not_Nish
04-29-2010, 09:22 AM
Taking Devour's points into consideration, I will forget about the Escape-artistry and the bomb. However I urge Ashlander to allow me to keep the Charm.

Ashlander
04-29-2010, 01:45 PM
Updated with everybody. And no bullet deflection, or escape artistry for you. =P

Im only gunna have 1 more main charactor, but im gunna see if MoD wants it. Doesnt mean side charactors wont become more involved as others die though.

bubbles
04-29-2010, 02:06 PM
Bubbles: innocent civilian who happens to run into the rest of the heroes, not really a fighter but will happily receive a weapon.
He recieved some training in firing a rifle but only as sport, he's never used it in an actual combat situation.

ScatMan
04-29-2010, 02:14 PM
I noticed a recurring typo, also.
Charactor
Godamnit man. It's ONE vowel off. Character.

Sacred
04-29-2010, 03:13 PM
I'll just join as a side character. Don't want to bring the mains down.

Sumfink
04-29-2010, 03:15 PM
I'll join as a side character, with a request for some epic lamp beatdown before I die. (Yes, I wield a lamp. I also talk in the 3rd person.)

Ashlander
04-29-2010, 03:16 PM
You'll probably be more involved later. Just think 7 right off the bat is enough. Make a bio and ill add you.
EDIT: @ Sacred.

Both added.

Tortuga
04-29-2010, 04:34 PM
Tortuga:

Height: 6'3"
Weight: 210 lbs
Clothes: (all of the following appear very tattered and worn-out) Lightweight slim shoes, Baggy Sweatpants, Skin tight wight t-shirt, overlapped by a zip-up jacket.
Face: Black Shiny hair, straight and partially covers the eyes, Aviators which lie on top of piercing red eyes, A surgical mask is stitched into the skin and covers up the lower half of the face.
Weapon: A small M9(pistol) equipped with a lightweight flashlight and held in the left hand, and a long thin rapier which has a golden intricate color guard.
Note: Having a very lean build, he is rather quick and agile, moderate strength, more than would be expected, and is mastered in the art of swordplay.

Ashlander
04-29-2010, 08:43 PM
Tortuga:

Height: 6'3"
Weight: 210 lbs
Clothes: (all of the following appear very tattered and worn-out) Lightweight slim shoes, Baggy Sweatpants, Skin tight wight t-shirt, overlapped by a zip-up jacket.
Face: Black Shiny hair, straight and partially covers the eyes, Aviators which lie on top of piercing red eyes, A surgical mask is stitched into the skin and covers up the lower half of the face.
Weapon: A small M9(pistol) equipped with a lightweight flashlight and held in the left hand, and a long thin rapier which has a golden intricate color guard.
Note: Having a very lean build, he is rather quick and agile, moderate strength, more than would be expected, and is mastered in the art of swordplay.
In. Still need more sides and named enemies!

Sumfink
04-29-2010, 08:55 PM
I propose residentevilrocks/comicmakerdude as a named enemy.

He'd show up in every major battle scene after he's already been killed, shouting "HEY EVERYONE, I'M RESIDENTEVILROCKS!!!1!"

Tortuga
04-29-2010, 09:09 PM
I propose Sumfink as a named enemy.

He'd show up in every major battle scene after he's already been killed, shouting "HEY EVERYONE, I'M Sumfink!!!1!"

AlphaCentaurus
04-29-2010, 09:16 PM
Since no one else wants to volunteer to be a named enemy, I will.

Name: Alpha
Description: Immortal, usually taking the form of a young brown haired boy. Wields nothing except the power to smite people. With a hammer. =D

Tortuga
04-29-2010, 09:22 PM
Since no one else wants to volunteer to be a named enemy, I will.

Name: Alpha
Description: Immortal, usually taking the form of a young brown haired boy. Wields nothing except the power to smite people. With a hammer. =D

The perfect candidate.

Sumfink
04-29-2010, 09:31 PM
Except for, y'know, the small matter of immortality.

AlphaCentaurus
04-29-2010, 09:37 PM
Hey, an evil villian has got to have SOME insane ability. I'm willing to let it pass with just the hammer smiting ability. ;)

Zero
04-29-2010, 09:39 PM
Do I need to put some details about my character?

Ashlander
04-29-2010, 10:30 PM
Hey, an evil villian has got to have SOME insane ability. I'm willing to let it pass with just the hammer smiting ability. ;)
Added minus immortality. =P

Do I need to put some details about my character?
You dont have to, but you can if you want. Just try to keep it reasonable lol.

EDIT: Ill be starting as soon as i get a bio from MoD. Pretty much already said he was in. Hopefully sometime tonight.

Sacred
04-29-2010, 10:43 PM
Oh you need an enemy Ash? I can be one if you want. I'll leave it up to you.

Ashlander
04-29-2010, 10:49 PM
I think you already had me put you down as a side character, i was just waiting for a bio. I need both so its up to you what you wanna be.

Sacred
04-29-2010, 10:50 PM
Well you only have one enemy companion. I think I will join you guys. And yes I knew I was a side character, I was asking if you wanted me to switch.

Ashlander
04-29-2010, 11:03 PM
Side it is then. Gunna give me a discription to work with here, or should i just make you a rabbit? =P

Sacred
04-29-2010, 11:38 PM
Can I be switched to a main actually? I don't mean to change at the last minute but I re-read the first post and want to be more involved.

Bio:
Was born with a genetic disorder where his spine had grown spikes out of his back. After many surgeries and hopeless attempts of trying to fix this and afraid of making him paralyzed, the doctors had to leave him as is. He later found out that these spikes were detachable and are almost impossible to break (seeing as how they're enhanced bones and bones are one of the strongest things on Earth). They're also as sharp as blades so he uses them as weapons for defense. He has trained himself in the master of bone-sword fighting. He ran away from his town when he was classified as a freak. Has been on a search for a home for over a year now. Has lived on trash and low amounts of money from petty jobs. Doesn't like to talk about his past.

Ashlander
04-29-2010, 11:52 PM
Added. But if they're detachable why doesnt he just leave them off? Or is he, and just using them as swords now.

Sacred
04-29-2010, 11:59 PM
He'd have a bunch of holes in his back and so would his spine. Leaving it open like that would kill him.

And am I staying as a side or becoming a main?

Ashlander
04-30-2010, 12:13 AM
Side for now, but you'll be more active later, dont worry.

Sacred
04-30-2010, 12:14 AM
Side for now, but you'll be more active later, dont worry.

Alright no problem. If you want you can make me a mysterious character at the beginning. But it's your story, so I'll trust in you with it.

Blasphemer
04-30-2010, 12:32 AM
Damn I thought I was in on this.


I'll suck your cock for main character.

Ashlander
04-30-2010, 12:34 AM
You got it already fool, i just VM'd you to get on msn as you were posting. But you'll suck my cock anyway right?

Anyway, gimme bio on msn so we can tweak it to the plans i got already.

EDIT: Finally starting part 1 now.

Zero
04-30-2010, 12:49 AM
Okay.

Coldzero
-A silent man. Always playing with a knife (I already told you about that ashlander) and carries a T16. A sharpshooter. But most of all. He hates everyone and wants to be always alone.

Blasphemer
04-30-2010, 12:52 AM
He hates everyone

Quit crimping on my style nigga

Zero
04-30-2010, 12:52 AM
Quit crimping on my style nigga
I ain't no Nigga! Besides, I know you love someone.

Ashlander
04-30-2010, 04:39 AM
FIRST UPDATE!

It's a little slow, just trying to get everything set up.

Zero
04-30-2010, 05:09 AM
scheduale
Sorry to bother but if you mind, You spelled Schedule wrong. Besides that, I like it. Hehe, Camel. ^_^

Not_Nish
04-30-2010, 05:21 AM
Nice Ashlander. Me likey.

ScatMan
04-30-2010, 07:35 AM
**** yeah I was driving a boat

Blasphemer
04-30-2010, 08:24 AM
Jesus christ this is ****ing excellent.

Scarecrow
04-30-2010, 09:20 AM
cool man

Ashlander
04-30-2010, 01:14 PM
Sorry to bother but if you mind, You spelled Schedule wrong. Besides that, I like it. Hehe, Camel. ^_^

Yeah, i also noticed a spot where i skipped a word too. Fixed them.

I stayed up till 6am just to get the first part done. 2nd probably wont be done till tommorow.

Zed
04-30-2010, 01:18 PM
I love that the literature section is getting active [again].

You're a good writer. I like reading your work.

Ashlander
04-30-2010, 01:34 PM
You sir, are just trying to get me to assassinate you so you can explode me. I WILL NOT HAVE IT.

Sacred
04-30-2010, 03:24 PM
Steal a cruise ship? Oh shit this is going to be good.

Devour
04-30-2010, 03:31 PM
Snowy would like to comment on your brilliance of making her a camel. However she secretly plans to run over there and kick you in the balls for it.