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01-31-2013, 04:50 PM
As I promised, I have make the part II of the story.

This story also tells why Medusa attacked order.
If you want to know who is Seartan, read the prologue at:
(I changed the link of the prologue)

Part II:

20 years later from the Conquering...

Seartan, now a strong middle-aged man in his 40s, have made a nation.
He was the leader of the tribe named his own, the Speartons...
While Gerant, his brother, have made a new nation, called the Great Knights.
Both of them are very close, but they don't see what's happening at Inamorta Plains.....

In Inarmota plains, the Order Empire gets ready for battling the Speartons.
They aware, that Speartons aren't afraid of anything, so they have amassed a large force to overtake them.
And now the're moving towards the Spearton tribe......

Seartan, unaware of this attack, surprised at the ambush sprang by Order Empire.
He quickly grab his spear, and his shield, and races for the battle.
However, when he reaches the battlefield, he relized that their army is annihilated.
Understand they must flee, Seartan quickly evacuate all his people to Great Knights Nation...

Attacked By Chaos

Seartan and his people have survived the Order Ambush.
However, when they reached the Great Knights Nation, they met a horrible sight...
There are bodies everywhere, and the flag of the nation was burning to the grounds....
However they met an old knight, heavily wounded, rallying on the trees.
Seartan quickly asked what happened there....

"Old knight, what happened out here??"(Seartan)
"Young boy, our nation has fallen, Chaos is coming from the wastelands of the North...."(Old Knight)
"What happened to your leader? My little brother??"(Seartan)
"He....*coughs up blood* was dead.......*the knight died*"(Old Knight)

Seartan, unable to handle the truth, slams his shield to the ground, creating a huge noise.
Suddenly, a group of Crawlers attacked the survivors, which started to panic.
Seartan quickly rallied his survivors to Inamorta Plains, wanting for a revenge.
A revenge, that only can be accomplished by joining Order.....

The 2nd Alliance

Seartan, quickly rushes to Order for allying with them.
However, he realized that Order was fighting a Giant in the No Man's Land.
He quickly rally his troops to meet the Order leader.....

Seartan arrived at the scene, asking for help.
However, he realized, that other tribes were there too.
He understand now, that Chaos must be eliminated if peace want to be achieved.
And with all the nations leader agreeing for the Alliance, the 2nd Alliance of Inarmota has begun.....

At night,Seartan was walking around the encampment while an old guy, invited him to his tent.
After they arrived, the old guy show himself as The Prophet, warning him that Chaos must be destroyed.
The Prophet also tells him, that Medusa, was afraid to be killed, since there is a prophecy about her death.

"The queen of gorgons, will not die in the hands of man in this land, but she will die, because of a stranger from the Other Sea."

The Prophet, also tells him, that the Great Giant who attacked his village 26 years ago was Medusa's favourite pet.
Medusa ordered him to find the Chosen One, the one who can kill her.
And so the Great Giant succeeded destroying the villages, but couldn't find the Chosen One...
Instead, he was killed by the Alliance 20 years ago.
Medusa was enraged when she heard the Giant's death, and so, she rallied her army to conquer Order.

"And I feel, boy, that you're the Chosen One....."
Then, The Prophet vanished, and Seartan wake up on his bed, reclaiming the dream.....

The Final Truth

Order Empire, have succeeded destroying Medusa's castles, which the only one remained is her final stand, the Capitol.
However, as they reached the gates, a loud cry was heard....
A thousand men, all of the Juggerknights, charged at their army furiously.
Order, unable to cope with the surprise, retreated back.
However, Seartan and his troops remained, and the Speartons and Juggerknights furiously clashing with each other.
Order realized that, and their spirit of fighting came back.
They quickly support their Speartons, and wage the war back to them....

But then, a large roar was heard.
A large, bulk single Juggerknight came out of the regiments, and start slashing at the Speartons.
The Speartons, unable to cope with his strength, keep their distance from him.
Seartan knows, that he only man capable fighting the Juggerknight was himself.
And so, he charged at the Juggerknight, and a furious duel happened...
Seartan, wearing his dragon hides armor, knowing his armor was much lighter than him, quickly evade and block his attacks...
And after the Juggerknight strength is fading, Seartan stab him on the neck.
The juggerknights, realized that their leader was dead, fleeing from the battle.
However, Seartan realize a feeling of dejavu to his enemy, and open the Juggerknight's helm....

"Hello, big brother..."(Gerant)
"I-I-Impossible! B-B-But, you're dead!"(Seartan)
"That's a false story brother, for the truth I'm defecting to Chaos."(Gerant)
"I seek power to my blades, and the only way I could do it is by joining Chaos."(Gerant)
"However, maybe I could repent myself, by telling you how to beat Medusa's stone sight."(Gerant)
"Medusa stone sight, will not work on reflections, and so, use your shield to see her face"(Gerant)
"Good bye brother, I will send your regards to our father and mother..."(Gerant)
"Rest in Peace, brother......"(Seartan)

Suddenly, the Chaos castle crumbled, and Medusa comes out of the rubbles.
Seartan, remembering his brother's advice, quickly uses his shield to face medusa.
Then suddenly, all units beside him turned to stones, with only himself remained...

"So, you're the only one who survived eh?" (Medusa)
"You corrupted my brother!" (Seartan)
"He's the one who wanted it, you fool!" (Medusa)
"I will end this right here and now, for my brother and for peace in Inarmota." (Seartan)
"You seems don't understand, that I can't be killed by men from this lands..." (Medusa)
"Luckily, I'm not from this land." (Seartan)

Seartan throws his spear, and it hit Medusa's heart.
Suddenly, a rough shriek was heard, and Medusa vanished to dust.
Seartan, knowing that this is the end, shouted a shout of triumph and anguish for his brother.
Turning to look on Medusa's ash, he replied.

"You're a real bastard, corrupted my brother, and killed many people. But any other than that, Rest in Peace"

And so, the Order Empire returned to the land, and peace was restored in Inarmota...

THE END......

01-31-2013, 05:35 PM
Awesome story, Triss! :D

01-31-2013, 05:55 PM

01-31-2013, 06:52 PM
Thanks, btw if I get approvement of 3 people, I will make a bonus chapter.
It will be called Part 1.5, and tells the Seartan's life during the 20 years span.

Anyone approve of the bonus chapter?

01-31-2013, 06:57 PM

01-31-2013, 07:15 PM

01-31-2013, 07:53 PM
Me, definitely. I made a story, really good, but for some reason it said I couldn't post it??? Then I clicked OK and tried to copy paste it to another post but it got deleted!!! I'm so mad right now.

01-31-2013, 08:07 PM
I was about to write my story in my journal first and then post it.
*reads story*

01-31-2013, 08:07 PM
E.P.I.C! Sequel required!!!

01-31-2013, 10:08 PM
Thx for appreciating my work guys.
I'm gonna think the story, probably finished by tomorrow.

In the mean time, please give feedback about this story.
(In case of bad grammar, or punctuation, kinda something like that)

02-01-2013, 07:49 AM
Agreed with sequel. If you may, legendary writer :p
And I also predicted that both Searton and Gerant will fight...

02-01-2013, 02:09 PM
Good writing skills u got.Maybe try the Writers lounge :D (http://forums.stickpage.com/forumdisplay.php?69-Writers-Lounge)

02-01-2013, 04:01 PM
you know, this makes me believe this will topple failing at failings story, dominate my story, and make others fear to make a story under the factor of losing


02-01-2013, 05:19 PM
I looked at the title for a few minutes, trying to find out why you spelled "Searton" (Thought it was suppose to be Spearton!) wrong, then I actually read the thread :p

02-01-2013, 08:42 PM
I have created the story, ENJOY!

Part 1.5:

10 years after the Conquering.....

Seartan, in his 30s, have made a small tribe.
While Gerant, his brother, have already made a nation.
Seartan felt nostalgic for his homeland, and so, he calls Gerant to go together with him.
And so, the blacksmith brothers joined hands and leave to the Other Sea, to the Aravan Continent.

As both of them arrives to the beach, they quickly packed up their thing to leave for their village.
Their village, which has been raided to grounds, turned out to be a big, bustling city.
The brothers are astounded from what they seen.
And for the first time of their life, they shed a pure tears of joy.
Tears of joy, for their sacrifice, have ressurected the village.

However, after staying for a week, they have heard of rumours.
A rumour, of a black dragon living on the cave in the other side of the mountain.
There have been many warriors enter the cave, but none have returned.
The brothers, intrigued to check the caves, quickly met the city leader, Lord Torren.

"So, you both dared to face the almighty dragon?" (Torren)
"We are, your Highness." (Gerant+Seartan)
"Very well then, I wish you good luck." (Torren)
"And what do you wish for reward?" (Torren)
"We are challengers, my good Sir, we don't need any rewards" (Gerant+Seartan)
"Any good deed needs a reward, I will think of the reward when you returned" (Torren)

After they have the regards of Lord Torren, they quickly went to the local smith.
The local smith, remembered the brothers, quickly greeted them

"The duo of disaster! How can this humble servant help?" (Smith)
"We like to craft weapons and armor here, and we need the metal Azurite." (Seartan)
"Alas, the metal can only be achieved through the black forest of Yoterhamm." (Smith)
"Which it's legendary beast, the Unicorn, lives there." (Smith)
"The we shall cut through that beast and reclaim his horn for our glory!" (Gerant)

The brothers set the path to the forest of Yoterhamm quickly.
And when they get there, they found deposits of Azurite.
They quickly mined the Azurite, when they found a shining light through the bushes in front of them.
The brothers, interested to the light, quickly cut the bushes, and found the forest beast, the Unicorn.

The brothers then argue together, to attack and kill the unicorn, or just leave quietly.
Gerant says, that killing the beast will bring them great fame.
But Seartan says, that leaving the beast alone was fine.
Gerant, ignoring his brothers advice, quickly slice the Unicorn with his axe.
The Unicorn, surprised by the attack, unable the move when Gerant's axe goes through her neck.
The beast have died, and Gerant quickly claim his reward, the Unicorn Horn.
Seartan, angry to his brother, quickly pull him out of the forest to prevent him defiling it any further.

When they arrived at the local smith, the smith was surprised.
He thought the brother will die by the Unicorn, but instead, they kill the Unicorn and claim it's horn.
The 3 of them quickly start to craft weapons from the Azurite mined by the brothers.
In 3 days, new weapons have been crafted.
And in another 3 days, new armor have been crafted.
And so, the brothers quickly left the village to fight the dragon.

When they have arrived at the mouth of the cave, they feel adrenaline coming through their body.
They never seen such strong aura, and they determined to found out what's in the cave.
But suddenly, a large roar was heard inside of the cave.
The dragon comes out, and quickly swept his claws to the brothers.
Luckily, the Azurite armor is able to deflect the attack, and the brothers quickly move forward to face the enemy.
The dragon, impressed by their toughness quickly attacked more furiously.
The brothers, now more confident then ever, deflect his attacks and slice the dragon's body.
The dragon, now started to be afraid, quickly starting to flap his wings.

The brothers realized what's happening, and quickly take their bows.
Gerant shot an arrow to one of his eyes, blinding him on one side.
But the dragon quickly raise his wing and fly away.
Seartan, the older brother, quickly aim for the dragon's neck.
And with one movement of the arrow, it jabs the neck of the dragon.
The dragon quickly flutter in the sky, then falls on the earth with a great thud.
The brothers, understand their victory, quickly cut the dragon's body.
Seartan, knowing dragon hides are strong, quickly collect all his hides.
While Gerant, the younger brother, loot the dragon's remaining eye, his poisonous fang, his heart, and his tail.
Then, they cut the head of the dragon to prove themselves.

Torren, impressed by the brothers, quickly spoke:

"Today, we embrace the day, where the dragon are dead" (Torren)
"And it's all because of the two brothers, Seartan and Gerant!" (Torren)

*The crowd cheers
"And for their reward, I give them my daughter!" (Torren)

*Then, a blonde beauty appears.
"Her name was Rosa, choose one of you to marry her!" (Torren)
"You should marry her, brother! (Gerant)
"I think the one who should marry her is you, Gerant. (Seartan)
"Don't worry, I already have a wive in the other continent." (Gerant)
"Besides, you're the one who kills the dragon, not me." (Gerant)

And so, Seartan marries Rosa, and the celebration was continued) for 7 days and 7 nights.
And in 2 years later, Rosa gave birth to a baby, named Francesco.

Unfortunately, Gerant want to returns home, and Seartan feels that his tribe need him.
And when Francesco was 6 month old, Seartan and Gerant leaves the other continent, vowing to get back.
Yet Fate says Gerant will die, and Seartan will die, before his son reached 14 years old.....
But that's another story.....

End of Part 1.5

Part III, Seartan's death will be on next 3 days :p

P.S:Frost, the one for the story competition is Part II
P.S.S:Everyone, I thank you for your feedback, and I want you to rate my stories

Part I(see it in http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?50471-Stick-Empires-Story-Competition!/page6)
Part II(see it in http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?50670-The-Legendary-Warrior-Seartan%28Story-Entry%29)
Part 1.5(see it in here.)

Please review it in 0-10 rating
Hope you enjoy my stories!;)

02-01-2013, 08:46 PM

02-01-2013, 11:54 PM
i really think you should make a book and publish it

02-01-2013, 11:58 PM
I had no comment. An epic work. You're an SE fighter AND an aspiring writer. COOL! Teach me how to write stories on SE?

02-02-2013, 12:01 AM

You should be a writer

02-02-2013, 04:10 AM
The plot was great. 10/10
The layout was nice. I love the 1-sentence-1-line thing. Short sentence like that makes it easy to read.10/1(100/10)
The character was... good. But there seems to be a lack of outer description(More like story-telling?). Still, 9/10

02-02-2013, 04:12 AM

You should be a writer

he should have 10 billion pounds for every book he published if everyone thinks that

02-02-2013, 06:30 AM
The plot was great. 10/10
The layout was nice. I love the 1-sentence-1-line thing. Short sentence like that makes it easy to read.10/1(100/10)
The character was... good. But there seems to be a lack of outer description(More like story-telling?). Still, 9/10
Since you wanted it, I shall give description of the characters:

Seartan:The main protagonist, leader of spearton tribe,btoher of Gerant, a top blacksmith of Rinnen village
Gerant:The secondary protagonist and the secondary antagonist, brother of Seartan, top blacksmith of Rinnen village.
Medusa:The main antagonist, make Gerant defect to Chaos.
Great Giant:The main antagonist, kills Seartan father.
Spencer Lock:Top blacksmith, killed by Great Giant.
Aravan Tarim:Mother of Gerant and Seartan, died during childbirth.
Torren:Lord of the ressurected village
Rosa:Torren's daughter and Seartan's wife.
Fransesco:Seartan's son.

If you still need infos, read the prologue in http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?50471-Stick-Empires-Story-Competition!/page6
Also I'm writing the final chapter, Seartan's death.

02-02-2013, 06:35 AM
i think you have won this book war. i will prepare the improved version of the text trophy that i will make for said winner

(note, anything colored in the trophy is part of the trophy)