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Triss
05-04-2013, 10:35 AM
Journey of the Journal
"Hahahaha! What a beautiful day!"
Arvine smiled and danced happily in the meadows of happiness,
"Hahahaha! What a beautiful day!"
Still smiling and jumping happily, Arvine run around the meadow.
Itís such a happy day, but suddenly, Arvine felt something crept on his sides.
Turned his back to the uneasiness, Arvine spots a large cloud forming in the skies.
Mighty rumbles was heard, a continous sound of knocking was heard, when suddenly....

"OPEN UP YOU BASTARD!"
"Wh-what da?"

Stumbled down from the bed, Arvine looked up upon the door.
Continous knock was heard from it, and a few amounts of insults were heard.
Arvine opened the door, when a punch was unleashed on his face.

"Rise and shine you little brat!"

The punch promptly hit Arvine on the face, flunging him to other side of the room, and hitting the cabinet.
As Arvine wipes out his bruises, a large man was standing there, frowns all over his face.
Arvine recognized him as one of the most annoying person he met.

"Hey, brat! How do you do?"
"Zeus! You son-of-a....What the hell do you want with me?"
"I'll explain later, wake up first!"

Zeus comes close then helped Arvine stand on his feet again.
Before Arvine can speak a word, Zeus bear-hugged him.
For Zeus it was just a normal hug, but for Arvine, he felt like a squished potato.
After a while, Zeus released his grip, causing Arvine to collapse on to the floor.
Getting back his breath, Arvine quickly spoke up...

"From what I learn, everything you have done brings trouble. Now, what is the trouble in the menu?"
"Great! It seems you understand a lot about me, however, it will be focused later. First, take a look."

Zeus opens up a parchment, then a large map with runes was shown.
The runes itself was written in a language that was unfamiliar, and it seems to be a long-lost language.
Arvine, impressed how such a hulking brute could find such delicate map.

The map shows the Tower of Varde in the south east section, a large mountain on the North-Eastern side.
It also shows a mass of hulking forest in the middle, and a large cave on the North-Western side.
The runes was shown on the eastern side of the mountain, and a large crack was found.
Arvine looks upon the map with amazement.

"Zeus, what is this map?"
"It's the map of the Lord Gerant, a long-lost warrior from long ago."
"Gerant? You mean the one who write this book?"

Arvine opened up his bag, and upon his hand, was a journal book.
Zeus eyes bulge open.

"WHERE DO YOU GET THAT?"

Zeus, grabbing that book, realized of it's title, "Gerant's Journal"
He quickly opens up the book, searching through it's page.
At last, he found the answer he looking for.
In the book, there is a code that explains everything.
Zeus quickly read the code, and found the meaning of the map.

"It appears some sort of artifact was hidden there, a forgotten weapon", said Zeus aloud.
"Well well well, what will we do?", Arvine said it sarcastically, knowing Zeus will do one thing.
"Let us grab the treasure! I will grab that thing for my glory!", said Zeus frantically.
"Let us grab the treasure! I will grab that thing for my glory!", said Arvine sarcastically.

Arvine looked upon Zeus and what he saw, was a man with cover on his glory and greed.
He only chuckled and know where this will go.

"Well then Zeus, you seemed to up to something."
"Come on Arvine, it'll be fun! Imagine wielding that weapon."
"No THANK YOU!"

Arvine crashes upon his window, escaping while he still can.
But Zeus still have an ace on his sleeve.

"Men, grab "im!"

Before Arvine could react the men below the window grab him and and knock his head with a club.
As an act of a normal human, Arvine fainted.

Twilight Door

After several moments, Arvine woke up in a forest.
It was in the afternoon, and the sun almost going down.
Beside him, lay Zeus with his companions.
Leaning on the fire, they are looking at Arvine
Zeus was grinning, and quickly spoke up.

"So, do you have a nice dream Arvine?"
"Dream yourself, my head aches like a moth around the lantern. Where are we?"

The forest around Arvine was full of trees, thick like a man's eye brow.
The mountain was right by their side, and the pathway to the crack was clear.
The sun has gone down, and the moon was steadily rising.

"Zeus, why don't you enter the crack?"
"Like I can. The crack's too small. The runes that it will get bigger when moonlight strikes it.
"I see.....Well, I guess that doesn't do much go-"

Before Arvine can finish his sentence, a large baying of hounds was heard.
Wolves crept up to the fireplaces, their fangs shone in the twilight.
Zeus, unexpected to this attack, quickly called his men.

"Men,WHIRL ME Darkness's Bane!"

The men throws away the weapon to Zeus, and quickly races to his aid.

But suddenly, three large wolves seize the men legs, and drag them to the forest.
The men screamed and toiled, but the wolves keep holding them to the darkness.
Zeus, hears their scream, quickly rushes to their aid.
But Arvine, realizes that they're already dead, quickly seize Zeus's arm.

"Let me go! My men needs help!"
"It's too late Zeus, they're already dead. But we can't take their sacrifice vain. Let's go!"

Arvine and Zeus quickly races upon the pathway, occasionaly fending off the wolves.
Suddenly, the cracks flung wide open, and Arvine notices that.
He quickly grabbed Zeus by the arm, and quickly takes him inside the crack.
The moonlight has passed, and the cracks sealed again right off.

Inside the Mountain

Inside the cracks, Zeus wept terribly, and cried his tears out.
He roared till the cave shook, and stamp the ground like an elephant.

"Zeus, let's go, you're wounded right now. Let me heal you", Arvine said as he readied his spell.
"NO! We must go on. I will led the way Arvine. I will lead the way.....",said Zeus painfully.

Arvine looked upon Zeus once again, feeling pity on him.
What he saw was a man with full of wounds from the wolves, but not just phsyical, but mental too.
He followed as Zeus led the way to the chamber.

As two of them entered the chamber, they saw a large axe, brandished with golden handles.
The metal to make the axe seems to glow in the dark, and on the tip, lay a diamond gem.
The two wondered the weapon, struck into the cold stone, it's gleam are never-ending.
But before Zeus attempted to grab the axe, a large shadow came between him.
He knock away Zeus with a weapon, and stood there silently, looking at both of them.

"My name is Rafael Leonardo, the Charger of the Abyss, reveal yourself!"

As he said that, he tosses away his cloak, standing boldly in front of the two.
He appears with a large scythe on his back, a large halberd on his right hand, and a spear on his left.
His face was looking at Zeus suspiciously, and looked at Arvine unsurely.
Arvine quickly speaks up.

"Who are you? Are you a Forsaken?"

As Arvine said that, he readied his staff.
The man in front of him quickly spoke up.

"I don't know what are you talking, but listen to this. Leave this place alone, and never come back!"

But suddenly, Zeus sprang up on the floor, his eyes are burning with rage.
He felt the cold bitter of hatred to death flowing from him.

"My name is Zeus, and I'm here to take that axe! Begone!"

Suddenly, Rafael lashes out his halberd, and slashes Zeus.
But he only strike a thin air, as Arvine pulled back Zeus right in time.

"Zeus, let me handle this guy, I wanted to know more about him."

Arvine lays Zeus down to the ground, and confront the challenger.

The Friendly Guardian
"Who are you, little brat?"
"My name is Arvine, and I'm here to help my friend to find the weapon. Why do you guard this?"
"I can't speak that. But listen, we shouldn't have to do this. You could just turn back."
"Sorry, but a friend is a friend. I can't leave him alone.
"So be it."

As Rafael said that, he moves forward and strike Arvine with his spear.
Arvine swiftly dodged it, but before he could regained his stance, a swift of halberd was given.
Raising his staff, Arvine blocked the blow, but flung to the other side of the chamber.
Arvine quickly raised a water shield around him, and cast upon Rafael a large blast of fire.
Rafael, knowing that technique long ago, simply releases a small amount of force from his halberd.

Arvine, realized that this wouldn't end quickly, charge up his Dragon's Soul, the Frost Dragon's soul.
Bur Rafael, seems to be unimpressed, chuckled at his ability.

"Is that it? I can do much better than that."

Rafael quickly charge up his own halberd and spear, and quickly it glows in the dark.
He banged both the weapons, unleashed a wave of force that flung through Arvine.
Arvine quickly raises uses his ability to rise a shield of ice of protect him.

The shield withstand the first blow, but Rafael expected more.
He unleashes the second blow, and the shield was shattered pieces.
Arvine, flunged again by the blow, quickly gets up.
He charged up his Fire Dragon's Soul, and casts pillars of flame that rises to the ground.
Rafael dodged side by side, and slashes at Arvine with his daggers.
Arvine quickly cast up his water prison, and fall back for a moment.

Arvine, still determined to beat him, shoots up his lightning arrows.
Rafael just dodged him, and with one stroke of his scythe, he draws blood from Arvine's chest.
A large wound it is, hanging from the left soldier to the right side of the waist.

Arvine merged with a different Dragon's Soul, the Dark Dragon's Soul.
Arvine then released a large amount of cry of terror, that smite Rafael.
Unable to hold any longer, Rafael runs away to the shadow.
Arvine, feeling like he won, shouted a cry, however after his fusion ended, Rafael smiled.
He entered the room again, looking at Arvine, patching up his wounds.

Arvine cast himself his water shield again, trying to stop the wound from bleeding.
Rafael look him with a great pity and respect for a kid like that.
He quickly spoken up again.

"Arvine, you seem exhausted, how about you turn back? I like your courage, but it's useless."
"Like I said, I will not back down! I will help my friend!"

Rafael, sees the determination of his opponent, smiled at his courage.
He remembered up his courage when he face up the assassins.
He remembered, when he bathes upon the blood of the sinful.

"Well said Arvine! You have earned my respect! I will show my ultimate form!"

Ultimate and Ultima

As he said that, Rafael pull out his halberd and scythe again.
Suddenly, and immense force was forced out of him, and his weapons are glowing.
He hold both of his weapons, pushing their tips toward each other.
The amount of friction was so high, and suddenly, a large explosion was unleashed.
Arvine and Zeus was blown away outside the chamber room, and they stood up again.
What they saw was one of the sight they will remember a long time.

Inside the chamber, Rafael has held a two headed weapon, the top is a scythe, the end is a halberd.
Rafael, smiled at Arvine, knowing that he hold the upper hand.
Before Arvine could say anything, Rafael was behind him, and has given him a another cut.
However, before he realized, he was electrocuted to the point of passing out.
Arvine fell down to the ground, holding up his breath against Rafael.

"Arvine, my weapon has been charged fully. If wound wouldn't stop you, electricity will."

Arvine upon hearing the word of Rafael, quickly woke up again.
He spoke out loud in a defiant tone:

"IF ELECTRICITY IS YOUR CALL, THEN ELEMENTS ARE MY CALL!"

Arvine's body glows up in return to of his strength, and his wound are healed.
He has released his Ultima.

Revenge is Sweet

"I-Impossible! I have smitten you!"

Rafael are unable to believe his eye. Arvine has rose again from his wounds.
Arvine smirked, when Rafael stood there, unable to respond.
With a quick response, Arvine spoke back.
"You shouldn't awake the Sleeping Giant."

Before Rafael could say "Ouch", Arvine was behind his back, cutting him with his Light Sword.
Rafael tries to retaliate, but when the weapon strikes Arvine, his hands feels heavy.
He tried to hold firm the sword, and casted upon himself another charge.
Swift as a wind, Rafael unleashes another blow to Arvine.

However, Arvine doesn't falter.
With his hand cannon, he blasted up the weapon Rafael hold.
Charged by the energy from Arvine's blast, the weapon electrocuted his own master.
Rafael dropped his weapon, fall back a moment, and stood by against his enemey.
He couldn't believe he have a hard time against the helpless kid from before.

The Accursed Truth

Rafael and Arvine stood both together, looking at each other.
The conclusion seems to come fast, as Rafael has dropped his weapon, and Arvine has released his Ultima.
But all of a sudden, a mighty rumble was heard was heard from the depth of the cave.
The chamber shook and shake, Arvine doesn't know what happens, but Rafael does.
He quickly looked upon Zeus, and found him grabbing the Axe.
Zeus has released the seal on the axe.

"You fool! What have you done!", said Rafael.
"What, what have I done?", replied Zeus.

Another mighty rumble was heard, and the chamber shook.
We need to go, this cave is gonna crumble, follow me!

Zeus and Arvine followed behind trails of Rafael.
The cave still shook and stir, and stones are falling.
Rafael quickly explains what happened.

"Long ago, Lord Gerant have successfully defeated a beast called Mavern here, the fallen beast.
However, Lord Gerant was injured heavily on the process, and the weapon he used are left behind.
Unknown to Gerant, Mavern has place a fragment of his soul in his weapon, the axe, allowing him to stay alive.
With this being done, I understand that I must place a seal on the axe he left upon.
If someone break upon the seal of the axe, and remove it from the stone, Mavern will woke up again.
And with his power, he will try his best to find that axe, to allow his soul to live again in the world.
You, an idiot, have woken him up, and making him to get that axe on the process. He will chase us now."

Zeus realized that the axe was cursed, shows shame and regret for breaking the seal.
Rafael, on the other hand, have shown them on the end of the road.
In front of them, there was a long bridge, leading to a roadway at the end.
Rafael quickly moved upon the bridge.

"We need to get on the bridge to City of the Krim, where they can seal this axe. I heard about the techniques."

However, a mighty rumble was heard from behind. A huge beast, 10 Feet at size, are behind them.
He wield a large handed sword on his right hand, and in his other hand, a large claw was placed.
His breath was foul and smells, and his feet was like a large machinery.
He quickly gave chase to the bridge, faster than the trio.

Arvine, Rafael, and Zeus keep running, but they soon to be caught up.
Zeus, realized they cannot escape, determined to his plan.
He stopped and turned his back toward the body of Marven, raging towards them
Arvine and Rafael stood where they stand, puzzled by Zeus's act.

"Zeus, what are you doing? We need to go!"
"Shut your fucking mouth kiddo, I will fight this thing."
"Wha-you're nuts or what? We need to go!"
"Shut up."

As Zeus said that, he grabs Arvine and thrown him on the other end of the bridge.
Then he gave the axe to Rafael, and whispered something to his ear.
Rafael quickly go to the other end of the bridge, holding up the axe.
As he reaches the end, he grabs Arvine and make the run for it.

Arvine looked up on where Zeus stands.
The beast was promptly facing Zeus, his fangs and sword are raised.
But before they struck down, Arvine heard a voice from Zeus:

"I HOPE YOU LIKE BEING IN HELL WITH ME, BITCH!"

As he said that he cut of the bridges rope, falling down the abyss with the beast beside him.
As the bridge keep falling down, Arvine hears a whisper.....

A faint whisper, seeming through inside his head, a small voice that said:

"Tell their families, I'm sorry."

Before Arvine recognize that voice, he felt his wound are getting bigger.
He feel the world is fading away.....

Lost Friend, New Friend

Waking up 3 days later, Arvine woke up in a bed.
Rafael was beside his bed, watching him as he woke up.
Smiling at him, he rose up and go outside the room.
Arvine intercepted him.

"What happens? Where is Zeus? Where is the Axe?"
"Calm down kiddo, let me explain everything. It's all started in...."

After a several story, Arvine remembered all the event.
Zeus has fallen from the bridge, the Axe has been successfully sealed, and currently they're in City of Krim.
Arvine, knowing his friend is dead, wept in a sorrow.

"Your friend.....he's a good man, although he's greedy that he broke the seal, and bring himself to doom."
"Yeah, he's greedy. But please don't insult him. He's my friend."

Rafael looked up on the downcast Arvine.
His normal face was full of despair, and his normally bright soul are gone.
He doesn't remember anything about the child mage who fought him.
Rafael stood up, and suddenly hand up a letter.

"When he whispered to me to run away, he give me this letter, read it on your will."
Rafael handed up a small piece of paper, within a small envelope.
Rafael also returned the book, it seems that Zeus has given him too.

"For now, I wanted to see you former friend's kingdom, seems interesting."

As he said that, he left the room, leaving Arvine alone.

Arvine grabbing the paper, read it throughfully.
Arvine smiled at his friend's last word, and got up of the bed.
He races up and get his staff, and went upon the docks.
He found Rafael sitting on the ship.

"Hey Rafael! Hey! I will go with you!"
"Ehhhh, sure, why not? Let's go!"

As the ship sailed away, Arvine show Rafael what he got from the letter.

"So, 3 addresses, a small golden necklace, and a wrapped paper."
"Not just any paper Rafael, not just any paper."

He withdraws the wrapping, and in the pictures stood a woman, smiling.
Arvine looked up on Rafael, and spoke a whispering reply:

"Well, I guess we have to found her."



Thanks for reading!


Lethal2 give me this one:



Special Guests: Zeus, Aiman, Frost for the camping and someone you shouldn't know.
This will be the last time I'll use multiple characters, but I don't think that it's not allowed to make stories with multiple characters but cheers guys! Have fun and have a great time!

The Beginning

It was 7:34AM morning, Raf woke up on his bed, yawning as long as he can while stretching. His newly purchased puppy ran through his head and licked his face, Rafael lifted his puppy and placed him on his bed. Raf stood up to check out his calendar, it was November though, but he don't know what day is it until he reached the front calendar, he noticed that it was November 29, and he also noticed that Christmas is on the way, and it seems like Raf is really excited for it, is he? Well yes, everybody is always excited for Christmas, and it's Jesus' birthday, and we should celebrate during Christmas to show that we support him.

Raf walked into his bathroom and undressed himself, he stepped in the shower room and turned the shower into balance, he really hates hot and cold, and actually he only likes balance. He got a shampoo and scrubbed his hair, he washed it away with the medium shower, he then took the soap he has just besides the shampoo and rubbed his body, he then quickly turned on the shampoo and washed his body, he proceeded to take the towel and covered his body, he heard his dog barking just outside the bathroom, Raf then went upstairs and changed his outfit into a normal-looking guy. He combed his hair and filled it with wax gels to make it stand straightly, and it's perfectly spiky.

Suddenly a knock was heard downstairs, "coming!", yelled Raf. He then quickly went downstairs and approached the beautiful wooden door he has. He opened it with the doorknob and caught 3 guys that were also nice-looking.

"Oh it's the three of you! Zeus, Aiman and lastly Frost!"

"Haha, don't you remember each of us promised that we're going to a camp site? I left from Atauromin just 9 hours ago and reached this land, seems cool though." asked Zeus.

"Oh... wait... oh shit! I forgot that, where's your car? It's good that I have my appearance ready!' replied Raf.

"Good good, well it's Aiman's car right there in the road, and we're ready!" said Zeus as he points his finger to the car.

"You brought any foods for the camp? Hehe." asked Raf.

"Yeah, why not? Our food consists of a lot, can't mention them since they're about five thousand. Nah just kidding. Alright follow me and we'll drive our ass in an awesome campsite." answered Zeus.

Raf was really excited, he locked his door that guides him through outside so no one's going to steal something inside it. Zeus ran and sat in the front seat of the car, the car is basically a blue van with blazing fire design in the cover. Zeus then proceeded to start the engine of the car itself, Aiman, Frost and Raf joined, but except for Aiman being in the front seat, Frost and Raf being in the back seat.

Zeus drived through the road and they're about 950 miles until they reach the campsite they had promised each other. [/i]Fuck, I'm way to excited for this shit![/i], whispered Raf, the others laughed and agreed to him. Frost were bringing a backpack that includes his weapons: frost bow and its arrows.

The Wizard

It was a few minutes later... there was about 50 miles more before they reach the campsite. It was silent, no one was outside from the car, no villages or buildings, the land was filled with trees. Not much a forest though. Raf was playing a game in his iPhone while Frost, Aiman and Zeus kept their mood serious. Suddenly a rock hit the right door of the car, the campers (Frost, Aiman, Zeus and Raf) were shocked, Zeus stopped and unlocked the door to check out what's happening, suddenly 3 glowing arrows hit the ground, the arrows were infront of Zeus, he was shocked though. He basically don't have the time to battle the guy who was tricking them. Raf, Aiman, and Frost left the car to see what's happening too. Suddenly an unknown intruder teleported infront of the campers. And he was a wiry kid.

"What the actual fuck?" said Zeus

"Are all of you are recruited Forsaken... or not?" asked the kid.

"Yeah you actual ass-kid. What we're going to do with this shitty Forsaken thingy? I was just traveling with my friends then you fucky kid just threw a huge stone at Aiman's ultra-expensive van you fucking shit ass crap you fuck up guy!" answered Zeus.

"Calm down Zeus, i--" replied Raf

"Then prepare to die!" replied the kid.

Suddenly the kid casted 3 arrows from the sky that was glowing with white lightnings, suddenly the arrows aimed the top of the car, which made Aiman and Zeus go crazy and mad.

"Ffffff.... what the fuck is wrong with you kid!" said Zeus angrily.

"Guys go hide somewhere, I'll take this kid to hell." replied Raf.

The campers except Raf left and hid in the trees, Raf stood up steadily while the kid do it too. Rafael himself summoned his mighty scythe and inserted almost 50% of his energy which consumed his powers a lot. The scythe then unleashed the mighty glows of the lightning, which means it's going to cause an explosion once smashed in the ground, the kid started to smile, though he seems serious.

The kid suddenly punched the ground with his fist and formed a huge blast from the ground which is a: fire. The blast covered Raf and caused a huge explosion. Raf flew away and hit his back from a bole of a tree. The kid stood up properly. This eleven-ish kid is much more stronger than me. How come!, thought Raf as he stand up.

Raf then inserted another large amount of energies from his body to his scythe. It was about 90%, which consumed much more of his energy, Raf then ran while the kid stands steadily, Raf was 5 miles away from the kid. The eleven-ish kid then formed a cage made out of water which trapped Raf, Rafael himself tried to escape but the kid suddenly teleported inside of it and made a huge upper-cut at Raf's mouth. The cage then melted, Raf flew away and again smashed his back in a trunk of a tree.

"Come on Raf! You can do this shit, he destroyed Aiman's fucking car! If you kill him, I'll pay you a shitload of bucks, like $500 bucks!" whispered Zeus.

"Zeus shut up, you're so loquacious!" replied Aiman.

Frost and Raf

Raf stood up as he unsummon his scythe, suddenly someone aimed the kid in the back, which made him fall on the ground. Raf scanned the surroundings to see who did that. Although it was Frost who actually aimed the kid. Frost himself ran and jumped at the back of the kid, which made Frost jump higher. Frost and Raf met and conjoined together, the kid stood up as he remove the arrow at his back.

"You evil Forsakens! I'll bring all of you to the lake of fire in Hell! I am Arvine Callahan and I bring no mercy to the mighty Forsakens! You are all boorish!" yelled the kid

Arvine was having a severe wound at his back due to the arrow that was aimed at him, although he is dauntless. The kid himself threw the arrow as far as he can. Suddenly he casted a shield made out of blue water, the shield surrounded him, what the campers did not noticed is that the shield basically heals the wounds of Arvine.

"Damn it, Frost why are you so beneficial? Haha. Glad you helped me, if that didn't happened. I'm screwed." said Raf.

"Yeah, I'm helpful. Haha." replied Frost

Arvine twisted his neck, the shield made out of water depleted and stopped moving. The kid walked, Raf, Frost and Zeus was shocked on how he survived in that sharp razor, and as I stated before, the campers don't know what does the shield do to him.

Frost reloaded his bow with a total of 2 arrows, Raf summoned his scythe while Zeus watches seriously and carefully, Arvine started running while picking up his meric staff from his back, Frost started shooting as fast as he can although each arrow missed him. Raf threw his scythe but was dodged by the meric staff of Arvine.

Both fighters splitted in two location, Raf for the west to restore his scythe again, and Frost for the east to aim the kid. Zeus wanted to join the war but he can't since he left his crown at his kingdom and that really sucks for him. Arvine planned on which guy he should attack.

Raf picked up a stone and threw it at Arvine's but it didn't hurt the kid. Arvine looked back and caught Raf picking another stone. Rafael started running while the kid chases him non-stop. Frost ascended up in a tree to scan the best position on hitting Arvine.

The kid was faster than Raf in running, although Frost's bow is ready, reloaded with one single arrow, he's hair was sweating, suddenly Raf slipped himself and fell on the ground, Zeus grinned to force himself not to laugh out loud, Arvine jumped back at Raf's and started punching him at the face, Frost removed his hand and aimed the kid. Although it missed! [/i]"Not again!"[/i], thought Frost as he descend down to unload himself and find another perfect spot.

The Black Cat

The sun was almost gone; Arvine started chasing Frost to stop him from running, Raf was just there lying down with sanguinary face, Frost and the kid was in a far place, chasing each other and fighting each other. Zeus slowly run to approach Rafael, the king started lifting up Raf at his back and quickly run back at the hidden place where Zeus hides.

"Goddamn it, that guy is damn strong! What happened to your face!" said Zeus.

"Just leave me here, hide somewhere and I'll try to stop this kid, why the fuck did you even said we're a Forsaken? Forsaken is his rival and Forsaken is a tribe! Don't ask me on how did I know about that! Start running Zeus or we'll get screwed up!" replied Raf

Raf stood up slowly and started running as fast as he can, suddenly an arrow was caught in Raf's eyes, but it missed, the arrow was from Frost but he didn't noticed that Frost is down with his weapon took from Arvine, the kid in a far distance rapidly reload and aim his bow, suddenly an arrow stabbed Raf's shoulder, then another hit him in the knee, Raf can't stand nor attack since he's weakening.

Zeus started running to pull back Raf, but the king was hit too with an arrow at the stomach, Arvine healed himself with a shield made out of water for the wounds he got by the three. The three didn't noticed that Aiman's gone, Aiman left but we don't know what he is doing, but his car was staying in the forest. The three were down, Arvine ran quickly infront of Raf to end him.

"It seems like all of you are too weak, it's time to end all of you... Forsakens!"

"No wait we're not th-"

Suddenly a bullet hit Arvine at the back stomach which spilled some blood, another bullet hit him in the shoulder with much more bloods which made him fall just infront of Raf's torso. The three caught Aiman, but someone was with him. Who is he?

Arvine stood up, spitting some bloods then healing himself with another water shield which cured him again. The kid walked near at Aiman, he don't know the other guy, we'll know the name of the other fighter later.

Raf removed both the arrows from his shoulder and knee while spitting some bloods as he stand up, but he can't walk very well due to his painful knee though.

"You just shot me with a bullet 'aight?"said Arvine sarcastically while fixing his hair

"I'm Aiman, you're hurting my friends, now it's time to end your day!" replied Aiman, giving the middle-finger sign

"I'm Blake Caterna or The Black Cat and Aiman's my friend. Oh and aren't you way too young to brawl someone ey?" replied Blake who was in serious face.

Suddenly Aiman ran without even telling it to Blake, The Black Cat ran too, Triss chased Aiman first since he thought that he is much stronger than Blake, the kid always slay the stronger one first before the weaker one.

Blake then picked up his pistol and hiding behind a tree. Raf, Zeus and Frost was in serious trouble, they were just crawling, except for Zeus,to hide somewhere due to their severe wounds on their skins.

Aiman suddenly formed a long sword with the manipulation of fire, Arvine stopped with a grin, suddenly a bullet aimed the kid's legs which completely spilled some thick bloods. Aiman unsummoned his long sword, he ran and did a quick jab at the kid's, Aiman then formed a shield with the manipulation of the legendary earth element, he then bashed it as strong as he can at Arvine's face, then lastly he did a huge punch in the face

"STOP!" yelled Raf "He's only a kid! Why are we going to kill him t-t-to death!"

"HE'S TRYING TO KILL US!" Aiman yelled back.

Aiman looked at the kid again, which he don't know if he should let him live or let him down. Aiman dropped his shield, The other campers, including Blake just stared. The kid was in the ground lying with bloods covering his legs and face. Aiman walked backwards turning back to approach the other campers, Zeus was just staring at the kid to see if Arvine's going to do something.

The Sacrificial of Zeus

Suddenly the kid stood up with Blake, Raf and Frost not noticing it. Arvine stood up as strong as he can, but no time was wasted, the kid casted three pack of lightning arrows in the sky to aim it at Aiman, Zeus ran to protect him.

"AIMAN, BEHIND YOU!"

Aiman heard the shout, he looked back seeing Zeus running, he looked up and noticed a sparkling arrows, Aiman then started to run, but Zeus instead protected him by defending Aiman with his body, the arrows hit Zeus, one in the chest, one in the stomach and the other in the shoulder. Aiman then looked back again while running, he caught Zeus with arrows on its body.

"NOOO! ZEUS!" yelled Aiman as he run as fast as possible.

Blake caught what happened, he aimed another bullet at the kid, this time, two bullets in the shoulder and in the elbow, the kid fell down without breathing, Zeus fell down with his eyes opened and his mouth spitting bloods, Raf was shocked, his eyes was staring at Zeus, Frost, who was doing the same, the others too. Aiman ran back to catch up with Zeus.

The kid was just lying there, dead and not breathing. Blake followed Aiman, Raf and Frost don't know what to do but to stare with tears in their eyes flowing through the nose and through the mouth.

"Zeus... why?" asked Aiman with tears on his eyes too.

"I d-don't know... our camping... our promises... I-I t-tried protecting y-you..." replied Zeus.

"Zeus, don't leave. We'll bring you in a hospital!" replied Aiman.

"I-I can't, I'm a different p-person. Injects can't c-cure me. My w-wounds should be cured in..... my homeland...." Zeus replied, and was his last sentence to say. His eyes closed slowly, and he was now in peace.[b]

Aiman hugged him, sobbing, Blake was watching him, Raf and Frost too. The day was, indeed, a sad day. Losing a great friend is not good at all. A great friend, should always be protected against others...

[b]The End

The next day... Zeus was brought to Atauromin, and rumor has it that Zeus' retiring being a fighter, instead, he'll always stay in his kingdom, others said Zeus is dead, and the others said Zeus will be cured. Which one? It's impossible to answer it.

Arvine was brought to the hospital with bandages all over his body, not almost all his whole body. Raf, was also in the hospital, resting. Frost also is resting. Except for Aiman, watching them to protect them in harmful things that will happen. The Black Cat himself, Blake, was gone. Doing his duties in his home.

Suddenly Arvine woke up, completely lost of half of his knowledge though. He noticed he was in a hospital, he caught the three campers that was just besides him, he also caught Aiman, watching them as long as he can, he then continued sleeping to take a rest. The others were sleeping, too. Losing a great friend is the worst thing to happen. So take care of your friend, and your day will be happy. The End.

another credits gaaaahh, so just a note, guys please vote for the plot/design/story, don't vote the one that has the longest story, votes should be done by the goodness of the plot, goodness of the story and such. Yeah, oh Nuranox is awesome. we have fun a night ago. yeah, he's cool. good luck to you Triss, may the best writer wins!



Arvine's Link:http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?51261-wRHG-Arvine-the-Dragon-Mage/page17
Rafael's Link:http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?53125-wRHG-Rafael-quot-The-Charger-quot-Leonardo

Well, it is done.
Enjoy reading the battle.
May the Pen be with you.

kingkickass2013
05-04-2013, 11:38 AM
Zeus's real death will be revealed after the second boss fight, it will put you all in quite a "twist?"

Zeus will be remembered by his clan members, he was ever so gener..... he was so gratfu...... he was such a nic...... HE WAS ZEUS.

Triss
05-05-2013, 04:22 AM
Triss, your story was long. But never mind about that. Hehe. Anyways good luck to both of us!

I see you will win Triss with those plot. it was NICE. haha
Nah, you probably win this game.
You got 3 votes earlier than me.
You also put up more effort to this battle.
This might become my loss.

(But seriously, who is zanbyull and WizardKnight? They just came up from nowhere)

T King
05-05-2013, 04:41 AM
Nah, you probably win this game.
You got 3 votes earlier than me.
You also put up more effort to this battle.
This might become my loss.

(But seriously, who is zanbyull and WizardKnight? They just came up from nowhere)

He/she didnt include my name O_O.... he/she probably knows me >.> stalker

Triss
05-05-2013, 05:15 AM
I'm already dead.
Uhm, you're the one who gave this pastebin to me.
I only did what you asked.

kingkickass2013
05-05-2013, 05:32 AM
Listen lets be honest you both have good stories, the only thing I can find wrong with your stories are these.

How you got Zeus who is dead now.

For Lethal2: FUCKEDY FUCK FUCK SHIT BALLS, Zeus does not speak like that. Also mortal medical techniques work with the immortals, however they are so used to the healings of their priests and mages that its incredibly painful to use mortal medication and surgery (they still feel stuff even when knocked out)

For Triss: Zeus had a grudge on Arvine since he stole his gold, whenever he would get the chance he would remind Arvine to give him his gold back (Your character stole 10000 dollars worth of gold and silver bars, of course Zeus is going to have a grudge, think of Zeus like a really angry loan shark). Unless that ax was something that was worth 10000 or more, Zeus never would of went to Arvine. Though you got the people right.


NOW FOR THE STORIES THEMSELVES

Lethal2: Your plot is well played yet some grammar errors were found, also putting the dialogue within a spoiler, not a good idea in my book.

Triss: Some grammar errors but that's all I found.

kingkickass2013
05-05-2013, 05:42 AM
Totally not going to vote (nah kidding, I'm voting for Triss, his story screams awesomeness. EVEN IF he got your character wrongish)

Wrongish is a word now, I want y'all to start using it.

kingkickass2013
05-05-2013, 05:52 AM
Sorry both my characters are already dead, so I stand laughing at your puny scythe HA HA HA HA HAAA. Listen we both agreed on canceling it, I am still losing against high school and possible going to end up taking the same year again, sad but true.

Triss
05-05-2013, 06:23 AM
I'm guessing that you're from America! lol. Just please, I beg you to tell me where you live, I won't rape you or kidnap you lol.
*SuspiciouslySpecificDenial

kingkickass2013
05-05-2013, 06:31 AM
You sir guessed correctly, that is all information given today. (P.S I own weaponry, I am an excellent shot with the bow and arrow and the crossbow, my record is 4 bulls eye's in a row. That is currently the house record. My father also owns a pistol but I never get to use it)

My current arsenal:

6 swords ranging from ninja to broad.

One wooden shield with a black pegasis painted in the middle and tribal symbols on the sides.

One bamboo stick that I covered with duct tape to make it stronger and more durable, effects were instant.

A sharpened combat knife.

A regular serrated kitchen knife that has proven itself worthy of mentioning.

A steel crossbow. (regular bolts, small sharp bolts, blunt heads which basically are regular bolts but without the tip they make a thunderous noise when they hit the target)

A compound bow and arrow. (Practice arrows only)

A stick with nails embedded inside of it and sticking out of it, I needed this in order to get a rat out from underneath the porch. I didn't kill it or harm it, but the nails made the stick look dangerous thus the rat fled the area.

A modified paint ball gun, I modified it so it is more accurate and powerful, however it now uses up 2 paintballs at a time instead of just 1.

EDIT forgot this one: An iron pickax that has been stained red due to the amount of dirt that has stained it without cleaning, its a bit rusty as well. Must of been a person who had this house before us must of used a pickax.

My arsenal.

Bladed Fire
05-05-2013, 07:19 AM
Wow Triss's story is so good, while Lethal2 is not bad too. Looks like I would upgrade myself in wRHG battle format, which will not be too boring like I did in my last battle with Rochedan.

Triss
05-05-2013, 07:24 AM
Lethal2, I see your brother(BlizzyGuy) is voting for you XP
Well, at least the score's are more stable now.

Triss
05-05-2013, 07:30 AM
After a while, I realized this isn't a battle of writings.
This is the battle for "Which one have the most loyal friends" battle.

Bladed Fire
05-05-2013, 07:32 AM
Lol. It's rare for me to vote a battle actually XD But Lethal you've improved so much, it's just not like the previous you. Anyways why Triss did your story is so attractive or something!

Bladed Fire
05-05-2013, 07:34 AM
Well, I will make my story interesting in my next battle which starts at 1st May or something. Btw, THEFORCE somehow says that he will quit... But still don't know yet.

Triss
05-05-2013, 07:37 AM
Lol. It's rare for me to vote a battle actually XD But Lethal you've improved so much, it's just not like the previous you. Anyways why Triss did your story is so attractive or something!
I don't know what do you mean.
But still, you're a loyal friend to choose me XP
Anyway, good luck with your battle.

Bladed Fire
05-05-2013, 07:39 AM
Yeah. now, vote for the battle which involves THEFORCE first.

_Ai_
05-05-2013, 07:57 AM
After a while, I realized this isn't a battle of writings.
This is the battle for "Which one have the most loyal friends" battle.

You are so mistaken.

It's like saying if I vote Triss, I'm not a friend to Lethal. Vice versa. In reality I'm just choosing the better writer.

With your statement, I'm going to abstain.

Triss
05-05-2013, 08:06 AM
You are so mistaken.

It's like saying if I vote Triss, I'm not a friend to Lethal. Vice versa. In reality I'm just choosing the better writer.

With your statement, I'm going to abstain.
You're correct, and I hate the fact about that.
Just choose what do you want.

Dafuq.
Well that escalated quickly.

Avalon
05-05-2013, 08:33 AM
Putting dialogues in spoilers. I don't like it.

Triss
05-05-2013, 09:07 AM
WTF? Who is Drake the Dragon?
Why do people from RHGs coming to wRHGs?
And why now?

Triss
05-05-2013, 09:31 AM
Guys stop talking about voting based on preference. At least comment on the story and say WHY it's better instead of circlejerking each other on who's improved and who's better because they are. CNC-ing on fights in a story...whether helpful or not is a good indicator that whoever voted for you, did so because they actually found it better, and not because they're your brother or friend or some shit.

I find it retarded that whoever battles Lethal will instantly get a -1 against you just because a speechless sibling can't be bothered to read a couple of words and make an actual judgement. It is as retarded as a pissing contest of popularity, that determines a result we are already aware of (http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?57054-StickPage-Lifetime-Achievement-Award-Qualifications-Poll). There is no rule against this but it is frowned upon and seen as bad form. Count your points and your blessings. But those mean nothing when you're talking about skill or the improvement thereof.
Hew I think this deserves to be a rant of quality, where people favour reputation rather CnCing their work.
You opened my eyes Hew, thanks for your revelation.

Guys, I appreciated votes you given upon me and Lethal2, as both battles are important to us.
But what we need isn't votes, is improvement that matters.
We strived as humans to become better each day.

So please, CnC our work. I would rather have a good CnC than a vote for me.

Avalon
05-05-2013, 10:43 AM
Triss - I notice a few grammar mistakes in the story, but I don't think it's really important. Nice plot, I like how you came up with the um, treasure thingy. But what I don't like is the fact that Zeus is dead. I prefer in Lethal's story where it is unknown what happened to him. It arise questions from the reader. Dunno, probably just me.

Lethal2 - Never seen multiple characters in one story. Not really that bad, actually. And as I mentioned before, I don't like dialogues placed in spoilers. Another reason I didn't vote for you because you made Arvine attack them because of mistaking them as a Forsaken, same as Azxc. I like how Triss can come up with another idea that doesn't involve Forsakens.

So uh, yeah. That's all I can say.

Triss
05-05-2013, 10:52 AM
Triss - I notice a few grammar mistakes in the story, but I don't think it's really important. Nice plot, I like how you came up with the um, treasure thingy. But what I don't like is the fact that Zeus is dead. I prefer in Lethal's story where it is unknown what happened to him. It arise questions from the reader. Dunno, probably just me.

Lethal2 - Never seen multiple characters in one story. Not really that bad, actually. And as I mentioned before, I don't like dialogues placed in spoilers. Another reason I didn't vote for you because you made Arvine attack them because of mistaking them as a Forsaken, same as Azxc. I like how Triss can come up with another idea that doesn't involve Forsakens.

So uh, yeah. That's all I can say.
Thank you for your CnC, it was greatly appreciated.
Also Zeus might've not dead, I just said he fall down to the abyss.
He could've survived the fall.

kingkickass2013
05-05-2013, 11:19 AM
Zeus's armor takes in ALL the attacks, so he can fall off the empire state building and as long as he lands on his feet he will survive. If he lands anywhere else he's a goner since his neck will break.

Avalon, Zeus is dead, theirs no avoiding it. Unless your character is a necromancer or great healer he ain't coming back.

Y'all already have 12 votes, WTF why were all of my fights like a freaking ghost town.

Chamel
05-05-2013, 11:55 AM
Wait... Who's Blake??

EDIT: NEVERMIND! It's SpeerMintty's gladiator, alright. No Stitches...?

Anyway:

1. (BOTH)
Both of you need to keep in mind of something very important. TENSES
I saw a lot of these mistakes in both of yours.
"Mighty rumbles was heard, a continous sound of knocking was heard, when suddenly..." (Triss)
"Mighty rumbles were heard along with the continuous sound of knocking, when suddenly..." Sounds much better and grammatically correct

"Zeus drived through the road and they're about 950 miles until they reach the campsite they had promised each other." (Lethal2)
"With Zeus driving along the road, they were about 950 miles away from the before-decided campsite." This sentence was kind of hard to fix, but the points still stands.

2. (LETHAL2)
Work on comma placement and get away from run-on sentences and comma splices. Just because you're young doesn't mean you can't handle it, we've all seen your work. Anyway: Avoid the overuse of commas in sentences.

"Raf stood up to check out his calendar, it was November though, but he don't know what day is it until he reached the front calendar, he noticed that it was November 29, and he also noticed that Christmas is on the way, and it seems like Raf is really excited for it, is he?"
"Raf stood up to check out his calendar. It was November but he had no idea what day is was until he actually checked. Today was the 29th, and he noticed that Christmas was coming up. It seemed like Raf was getting pretty excited about the approaching holiday." Should be something more like this. Space up your sentences but don't overload it with commas.

3. (LETHAL)
How bloods do you have? Because I only have one, thank you very much. Blood is both singular and plural (though it refers more to plural seeing you can't just have one blood). You seem to have a problem with adding an extra "s" to areas that don't need it. Try looking for this when revising, and it will make sentences sound so much better for the audience.

4. (TRISS)
Some sentences actually REQUIRE commas.
"Before Arvine could react the men below the window grab him and and knock his head with a club."
"Before Arvine could react, the men below the window grab him and knock his head with a club." There are several other instances in your work that show you need a little help with inserting comma's. Like I said for Lethal, look for those mistakes when revising.

5. (TRISS)
In some sentences you seem to be lacking a word or two.
"Well then Zeus, you seemed to [be] up to something."
"It was in the afternoon, and the sun [was] *almost going down.*"

*Replace with: "...beginning to set."

So there ya have it, my CnC.

kingkickass2013
05-05-2013, 12:26 PM
Guys stop talking about voting based on preference. At least comment on the story and say WHY it's better instead of circlejerking each other on who's improved and who's better because they are. CNC-ing on fights in a story...whether helpful or not is a good indicator that whoever voted for you, did so because they actually found it better, and not because they're your brother or friend or some shit.

I find it retarded that whoever battles Lethal will instantly get a -1 against you just because a speechless sibling can't be bothered to read a couple of words and make an actual judgement. It is as retarded as a pissing contest of popularity, that determines a result we are already aware of (http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?57054-StickPage-Lifetime-Achievement-Award-Qualifications-Poll). There is no rule against this but it is frowned upon and seen as bad form. Count your points and your blessings. But those mean nothing when you're talking about skill or the improvement thereof.



IS THIS WHY I HAVE SO MANY LOSSES! IF THIS IS THE REASON THEN YOU SIR HAVE OPENED MY EYES TO SEE A BUNCH OF JACKASSES. (Raging because this made me realize something)

Hey I've been doing some research, I noticed that EVERY person I fought has been here longer than I have and is well known around these parts. Triss the only reason we got a tie is because you said you rushed it and didn't believe in your story. If you had said you had full trust in your story and say you spent hours on it then you may have won.

kingkickass2013
05-05-2013, 08:10 PM
Okay, its just that. Your statement on voting got me thinking about my losses, so I went and did some research on all of my battles and noticed one thing alike, EVERYBODY was well known around here AND has been here longer. This makes me think *Kings thought bubble, What if they won because they were well known? WHAT IF THEIR IS SOME FOUL PLAY ON THE FIELD?*

I will stop posting my own complaints here and get back on topic.

ON TOPIC: Lethal2 I noticed something in your story that's been bugging me, this line in specifics: Rafael himself summoned his mighty scythe and inserted almost 50% of his energy which consumed his powers a lot.

You could of said something like: Rafael saw the threat was in sight, he quickly summoned his scythe. In a burst of black smoke the scythe appeared, Rafael's hands glowed brightly with his veins surging as though they were filled with electricity. In moments the scythe soon began sparking. However Rafael felt weary after doing so and noticed his eyelids were getting heavier.

See what I did there (higher powers in writing, please do make this sentence better), I added on to the sentence effects while at the same showing that he was charging the power and I still mentioned him feeling worn out afterwards.

Triss soon I will find something to CNC about your story.

Triss
05-06-2013, 12:43 AM
Oh dear god, please don't make a thread and rant about it like some other person I know.

Or face the consequences of your actions. (http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?59021-Winning-or-Losing-does-it-really-matter-(A-Rant-About-CnC))
I'm high and raging hormones at that time.
Little mistake happens.

BTW, ChamelNeon.
That's one, sexy-ass comment.

_Ai_
05-07-2013, 01:43 AM
Voting Triss. His vocab is superior, I like his choice of words.

Triss
05-07-2013, 09:16 AM
It's not a tie because Blizzy is your +1

Triss is fighting you at a +1 difficulty.
Makes me remember video games.
Also seems I'm kinda confused right now, for I can't describe my own character appearance.

Avalon
05-07-2013, 09:18 AM
Makes me remember video games.
Also seems I'm kinda confused right now, for I can't describe my own character appearance.

Why not? Just imagine if you meet him in real life, what does he look like, what is he wearing etc.

Triss
05-08-2013, 09:40 AM
There's seriously something wrong with you if your character design can't even get past the appearance stage
It passed, with a mark of C-, meaning LESS THAN CRAP.
yeah, I'm gonna edit it up and firing mah baby.

_Ai_
05-11-2013, 04:36 AM
Triss, is English your first language?

Triss
05-11-2013, 07:10 AM
Triss, is English your first language?
SE.CR.ET
Enjoy your day.

pluto_kun
05-11-2013, 01:24 PM
SE.CR.ET

My instinct tells me you are from Japan... maybe not >.>
Please don't be offended if I got it wrong D:

Triss
05-12-2013, 05:25 AM
My instinct tells me you are from Japan... maybe not >.>
Please don't be offended if I got it wrong D:
And how do you conclude that I'm from Japan?