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SaulMurphy
07-22-2014, 04:06 AM
This is the Civil War battle between ErrorBlender's Bl.An.C and Shadowkirby's Suicide Sisters. They are fighting in a zoo. How wild is that?? May the best writer win!

Bl.An.C:



“The zoo is in utter chaos, Cooper.” Alice stated over the com.

“Statement: I’m quite aware of that.” He replied, sounding very irritated. “Commentary: Not how I imagined myself dealing with stress.”

Bl.An.C. was in the air, his wingpack strained against the extra weight. He had a few people hold onto his hands as he swept over them earlier and saved them from an oncoming stampede of animals. He set them down on top of a nearby store. With scarcely little time to react, the zoo guards and animal specialists were in a panic as they tried to rally the recently freed creatures. A myriad of sounds filled the air, the noise drilling into Cooper’s head.

This isn’t really helping. Cooper sighed inwardly. The guards had already closed off the gates and had desperately run towards their stations for their dart guns. The android landed smoothly and approached the guardsmen, currently clamoring for their dart guns hung in the emergency box.

“Query: What happened?” He asked out of the blue. The guards took notice to the gladiator and answered him in the quickest way he could.

“One of the feeders accidentally fed himself to the lions. The gate was practically left open.” He replied breathlessly.

“Query: Then how did the rest get out?”

“Some nut activated the release.” The other guard muttered, loading his rifle with a dart. “Should work with the bigger beasts, yeah?” He asked the other guard.

A fervent nod was the other’s reply. He then turned to Bl.An.C.. “It seems you want to help. If you could find a way to rally the animals that would be great help.”

Before Cooper could agree the other guard interrupted. “No, I’d rather you find the culprit. They may still be here. The control panel is in the center building of the entire zoo. He couldn’t possibly escape yet.” He told the android and beckoned the other guard to follow. “I’m betting it was Sad Larry. The guy is nearing retirement and…”

The android allowed the duo of guardsmen hurry to their duty as he took flight once more. His flight led him directly towards the central structure of the zoo; a hexagonal cement structure with pillars erected on each side. Steel fences surrounded the building but is was easily accessible to Bl.An.C.. As he hovered above the building, he scoured the area for telltale signs of forced entry but nothing seemed to point to that conclusion. Everything was sound. The gates were locked and not a single fence rod was displaced. He then looked around only to see two conspicuous figures in the bright of day. They stuck out like sore thumbs in the animal frenzy.

Cooper’s optics zoomed in for a closer look. The duo was hiding in a small grove where two decently sized trees grew. Each girl had taken one tree to themselves and hid behind the trunk as the animals passed them by. He noticed the girl in the dark gothic gown first, her hair dyed purple and that she carried a pistol with a custom job. The other seemed to be more cheerful looking than the latter but they shared an aura of malice that Cooper couldn’t shake off. This one wore nothing but a leather bra underneath a leather jacket, blond hair in unequal pigtails, red skirt and striped leggings under ankle high boots.

“The Suicide Sisters.” Alice stated suddenly.

“Clarification: Who?” Bl.An.C.’s jade eye still affixed at the uncanny pair.

“They’re a duo of gladiators registered in the System.” Alice continued. “They’re a fairly recent addition to the roster. And they fight as a pair, never alone.”

“Musing: Interesting.” He wondered aloud. “Statement: Reminds me of two other pairs of duo I had fought.”

Alice recalls Lucario and Rhami, both of which were a duo themselves. Both were difficult opponents but this time, Cooper is more experienced in handling more than one opponent. This should be easier.

“Request: Details.” The android said to Alice.

Quickly, the woman back in the compound began to search for Eliza and Bella, the Suicide Sisters, over the wRHG database while Cooper approached his suspects.

-*-*-*-

“Hey, Eliza.” The blonde woman motioned towards the sky for her lover to see. “See that?”

The gothic girl shifted her attention from the animals around her to where Belle had pointed. Indeed, it was something of interest. The approaching figure was iron clad in some futuristic armor with green pulsating lines on specific parts of his person. It was hovering down towards them with jet black wings attached to its side. What drew Eliza to keep her attention to this figure was the lone jade eye that stared at them. She couldn’t tell if this was a friend or foe since there was no face to judge by. But Belle took care of the introductions.

“Hello!” Belle screeched as she sidestepped into view with her massive razorblade. “Nice—“ She twirled around, the blade sliced through the tree she was hiding and threw herself towards the android. “—to meet ya!”

As soon as the armored suit touched down, a quick swipe of the massive razor blade greeted him. Out of quick reaction, the suit was able to dodge but was taken by surprise from the succeeding attacks that didn’t seem to stop. Belle kept her strikes smooth, connecting each as if part of an elaborate dance. Eliza should see this; I merged her waltz into an awesome fight combo! She thought to herself gleefully. Another thought lingered in her head. She couldn’t decide which was better, that the fact that their main target was being digested with little effort on their part or that they had a new playmate for the day. It annoyed her that she couldn’t decide fully.

The other suicide sister, Eliza, was observing from the sidelines as she kept a watchful eye. She skirted the scene with Synkiss at the ready, irritated at what her ally had done. They didn’t need the extra attention at the moment but she felt the annoyed aura Belle was giving off. She was annoyed too but that shouldn’t mean they should go around and kill the next best thing. Then she noticed one other thing: My waltz. She mouthed.

The armor’s hands were glowing white and exploded into flashes as he dodged, Eliza noticed his movements were rigid and untrained but there were signs of experience. Boosts of jetpack flame aided his evasive surges but Belle left no room for him to strike back. The flashes of light quickly coalesced into something solid. They assumed the form of two gauntlets, each sparked alive with arcs of yellow energy.

Eliza’s eyes furrowed with worry. “Belle” She started as she brought her pistol up to target the armor. “Belle move!”
-*-*-*-
Bl.An.C. was getting increasingly frustrated at his current predicament. His opponent is astoundingly fast and by the looks of her unusual weapon, it would seem to be able to cut through anything. Then one of the sisters, Eliza, yells for her ally to move away. Perfect.

Belle’s movements slowed slightly, a moment of hesitation. Opportunity!

The android’s jetpack flared alive, its wings spread apart rapidly. The electrified iron fist struck hard but fast, knocking the wind out of Belle’s lungs. He readied his other hand, opening it to allow the tiny bolts of lightning to surge and bounce across his fingertips. He stepped forward to grab Belle’s face with his palm but a hail of bullets forced a stop in movement.

The android stepped back from the assault and raised his hand to shield himself from Eliza’s attacks. Inside the suit, Cooper grit his teeth. So close. The iron fists suddenly lit up red in Bl.An.C.’s internal HUD, it was taking heavy damage. The bullets. They aren’t normal.

The impediment gave Belle the extra seconds to recover. She recovers quick. Bl.An.C. noted. In a matter of moments, Belle was back on her bearings. She started with a downward slice but he dodged it with a sidestep, turned and threw a powerful hook at Belle. Immediately, as he turned his left hand glowed white and the gauntlet vanished. The razor wielding sister saw the incoming blow and raised her weapon high to meet with the empowered fist. Sparks flew from the encounter which hid the flash of another forming weapon from his left hand. The android let his arm slip on the face of the blade to allow his body to turn faster. The lights gathered to form into a cylindrical weapon that hummed powerfully as soon as it came into reality. The blast cannon was immediately directed at Eliza as Belle recoiled from the arcs of topaz bolts that gathered towards her from the iron fists’ impact.

“Statement: Kaboom.” The android said monotonously. Eliza’s eyes widened. A blast of invisible energy escaped the cannon and rippled through the air and struck Eliza square in the stomach. It felt like a battering ram had suddenly crashed into her and sent her soaring over a cart of hotdogs and straight up slammed onto some guard rails.

“Eliza!” Belle muttered from the shock. “How dare you, you piece of scrap!”

The blonde sister broke from her temporary paralysis and went into a rage. Bl.An.C. maintained his distance from Belle, her strikes were more vicious and she dared to come closer than usual. The android boosted himself backwards but Belle closed the distance in a mad dash. She jumped at the last second and twirled her body with the razor blade held out turning herself into a deadly top. Bl.An.C. raised his iron fist to meet the danger but was sliced through unchallenged by the razor. Belle connected the attack with a kick to his head during her spin and she landed gracefully on the ground. The android staggered back and his iron fist exploded. Within the suit, Cooper barred his teeth, muffling his screech of pain.

Diagnostics test: Left arm destabilizing. Armor has been penetrated. Cooper couldn’t believe it. The armor was cut straight through without much effort. He had to finish this and quickly.

“Not so good without your toy huh?” Belle smiled as she walked closer. “Time to die…or shut down. Whatever.”

She reminds me of John when he’s winning. Bl.An.C. thought. Too bad I have to project my anger onto a girl.

“Statement: Don’t be so full of yourself.” The android said.

Belle smirked. “Shut up, scrap metal.”

Belle struck again, her razorblade slicing up the ground where he dodged her attacks. One false move could mean a severed limb or his own decapitation. The android decided to fall back and attack from a distance. The wingpack flared alive and boosted him out of Belle’s melee range and proceeded to hail invisible mach speed energy blasts at Belle. The suicide sister quickly raised her weapon and turned it into a shield. From the corner of Belle’s eye, she spotted movement and she smiled.

“Observation: The suicide sister’s weapons are suspected to be magical. Eliza’s pistol’s rounds damage the suit considerably whilst Belle’s razorblade cuts through it like it was nothing. Fighting one is difficult; fighting both at the same time is suicidal.” He stated. Flashes of light covered his legs and left shoulder. “Conclusion: Assume the same problem as with the Olive Archer therefore assume the same solution.”

“What solution might that be?” Eliza asked. She was on top of one of the cages; it surprised him that Eliza recovered from the blast that was nearly point blank. Eliza’s pistol hummed and fired a blast of purple energy that screamed towards him. The explosion spooked a lot of animals, rousing them from their quiet hiding places and out into the open.

“Nice shot, Eli!” Belle exclaimed. “Shot him right out of the sky!”

“He hasn’t reached the ground.” Eliza said plainly. “He’s still there.”

The dust resulting cloud from the explosion had given the android the cover he had needed, though the sustained damage was nearly severe. “Statement: Surrender, Suicide Sisters.”

Eliza was about to speak when she was interrupted by her lover’s loud voice.

“Like hell we would!” She screamed in reply.

Numerous objects burst through the dust cloud, missiles screeched towards the duo and spherical drones unleashed their deadly red energy bolts.

Eliza’s eye widened. “So this is what you’re capable of.” She muttered and jumped off the cage’s top in time to dodge the missile’s impact. She rolled down to cement floor but clutched her stomach as she stopped. The blast cannon’s earlier impact still had its toll and it was painful when she moved to hastily. Belle immediately went to her side, shielding her eyes from another explosion just nearby.

“We’ve got to move, Eli.” She coaxed.

“Yeah. Be careful, I saw more than just missiles escape the cloud.” Eliza warned as she stood and fired Synkiss, detonating a missile earlier than when it should have. The ground between them suddenly exploded, cratered by an invisible force.

“It’s him!” Eliza said grimly. The android crashed down onto the floor, his movements a blur to Eliza and Belle.

Bl.An.C. surged forward, using the momentum granted by his impact. He balled his left hand into a fist and struck Eliza deep in the gut. Eliza took the brunt of the force, raised slightly by the attack itself. Belle immediately rushed to intervene but her stance was interrupted by a hail of red energy. She couldn’t move. Several spherical drones had encircled her, firing continuously around her, disabling and cornering her in a barrage of lasers.

“Eliza!” Belle screamed as she used her razorblade to deflect the drone’s attacks.

Eliza couldn’t breathe, she felt the very air in her lungs escape through her mouth but her grip on Synkiss never wavered. She took every attack from the android; she had the misfortune of having a ranged weapon up too close to a melee attacker but what she thought as a stupid idea felt like her only resort to surviving the android’s strikes. She charged Synkiss.

Oblivious to the hum of his opponent’s pistol, Bl.An.C. struck with his fist and then his blast cannon on the lowest possible setting. Each felt like a blow straight from a jackhammer and he couldn’t believe that Eliza was taking every bit of it and was still standing. As his next blow soared towards Eliza’s face, Belle’s foot connected with his. The drones quickly followed the pigtailed sister, energy trailing her like a deadly connect-the-dots game. The android staggered backwards and raised his head to see Eliza’s pistol pointed straight at him. The gun’s barrel exploded with a dangerous intensity that forcefully exerted a mild shockwave before the projectile even left. The purple energy roared towards Bl.An.C. and collided with his head in a violent explosion.

The android skipped on the cement floor like how a pebble would skip on a river’s surface. He flipped and turned until finally smashing into a couple of benches in the zoo’s quadrangle. Monkeys expressed their anger at the sudden intrusion of their territory by shouting and slamming their hands onto the floor while other threw their excrements.

Bl.An.C. steadied himself on what remained of the bench. His helmet was damaged; the jade eye no longer functioned but only part of the helmet whizzed back to reveal his head. Tufts of his silver brown hair fell to his face. His pale green eyes tired and pained. Half of his face still garnered the android’s visage but the rest were his own fleshy interior.

“Tactic…is ineffective.” He told himself. “They are unlike the archer and shifter. They…are more inseparable.” Groans of pain accompanied his sentences. Violent explosions echoed from where he was shot. He assumed the drones were being taken care of by Eliza’s sharpshooting or Belle’s skill with the blade. He flexed his left arm and opened his palm. The internal speakers from the HUD came alive and responded.

Left forearm stabilized. Ready for equipment teleportation. The mechanical voice allowed Cooper a sigh of relief but it ends there. Belle’s yell nearly stopped his heart from beating.

“Hey, scrapmetal!” She exclaimed. “We’re not done with you!”

“Shit.” He cursed.

Belle was running towards him and leapt forward. At the apex of her jump, she threw the razor blade at him. “Surprise!”

The blade spun towards him but Cooper was able to sidestep away from it in time. The blade cut through what remained of the bench and wedged itself upright onto the pavement. Belle landed gracefully just a few steps away from the android and made a dashed for her blade. The android faced her but met the dark purple energy of Eliza’s pistols first.

“Don’t you dare.” Eliza said, as she strolled closer clutching her gut.

Belle snatched her razor from the ground, whipped the blade in front of her as she turned towards the stunned android. Belle quickly swept her blade like a backhand from a tennis swing. Cooper managed to lean back enough to dodge but the strike opened a large wound on the chest of the suit. Belle used her momentum to cartwheel to the android’s side and towards the walking Eliza.

“You’ve looked better.” Belle commented as she moved Eliza’s skull hairclip back in place.

“Let’s finish this. We may be able to regenerate but this one’s consecutive blows to my stomach are making me want to vomit.” Eliza confided. She looked at Bl.An.C. once more and right brow was raised in curiosity. “So, you’re human.”

Cooper spat blood onto the floor and he nodded. He was trying to maintain balance with both feet spread apart and the arm holding the blast cannon sagged to his side.

“And all this time I thought I was fighting some drone. You got me all worked up.” Belle said, putting both her hands to her hips and sticking out her tongue but she changed almost immediately. “But at least this time, there’s blood involved.” A devilish smile replaced the childish one.

The android’s jade eye flickered on for a moment but it wasn’t the usual green. It flickered the icy blue. “Not now.” He muttered to himself.

“What? Scared to die?” Belle said.

“I’m afraid of things that I can’t control.” He told the sisters.

Belle scoffed. “What? Just shut up and accept your fate.”

Cooper raised his head and took a better look at his opponents. Their clothes were tattered and dirtied but otherwise, they looked clean. No wounds which meant they can regenerate. He swallowed hard. If he doesn’t finish this quick, the blast android might have too much fun in trying to kill these two. He can’t allow that. He has to defeat them now.

“I have.” Cooper’s eyes stared at them. “Just not right now!”

Cooper’s left hand flashed white and the wingpack blasted him forward in a spray of blue flames. He aimed for Belle.

Eliza didn’t want any of it and started her barrage at the incoming gladiator but her bullets did nothing to cease her darting enemy.

Cooper’s blast cannon collided with Belle’s Fetta. “Is that it?!” Belle exclaimed.

“No.”

The sound of humming wiped the smile off Belle’s face. The subsequent explosion sent Belle backwards but she held her ground. The android was flung in the opposite direction but he was charging back. Eliza kept firing, each at a second’s interval. Each bullet pulsated with purple energy but it merely bounced off as the android had been charging in with a shield right in front of him.

The energy shield glowed as it absorbed and deflected the energy from Eliza’s pistol. His right hand had been relinquished of his previous weapon now holds the iron fist. Arcs of electrical force and energy rippled and cracked around it.

“Belle!” Eliza yelled. “Get ready! He’s going to ram you!”

“Let him try!”

The android came back, quicker but expected. But what Eliza hadn’t thought of was the shield used in between herself and Belle. She had thought that the shield was the ramming weapon but she was mistaken. Eliza unleashed bullet after bullet but it merely bounced off the shield. “Belle!”

Belle threw a punch, using the massive razorblade as an oversized knuckle. Bl.An.C. had to get close to the blonde sister while he kept the other at bay with the shield. With little to move around he attempted a dodge, a small step to one side. Out of the corner of his eye, he saw the razor’s edge pass by, cutting right through the skin of his cheek and grazing through the side of his skull.

Cooper yelled as the wingpack burst forward and the glowing yellow gauntlet of electricity surged and slammed onto Belle’s stomach. A wave of crippling topaz energy forced its way all throughout the sister’s body. Belle’s eyes retreated into her head until only the whites were shown.

The android realized that Belle had fainted; her body kept standing by using his fist as support. All her limbs were limp, her head dangled down but her hand gripped Fetta tightly. Arcs of tiny sparks formed around her person and right then and there, Bl.An.C. realized that Eliza had stopped shooting.

“You…” Eliza stared at what seemed to be Belle’s lifeless body.

“She’s perfectly fine.” Cooper stated. “She’s merely out for the day.”

“Are you joking?” Eliza retorted. “You just attacked her with more electricity than what a human should be able to keep!”

“But you aren’t normal humans.” Cooper stated. “By the way you recover from my blows which should have incapacitated you for hours that only took you minutes? No. You’re not normal.”

“I suggest we wrap this up.” Eliza said. She raised Synkiss and began to charge it. “Let’s start by wrapping you in your own skin, my way.”

“Right.” Cooper sighed. “Look. In a fight of attrition, you’d win.”

Eliza glared at Cooper but he knew she was listening.

“Now, I just took out your sister.”

“Not my sister.” Eliza replied.

“Lover.” Cooper nodded. “I just took out your lover. Would you rather kill me now or help Belle?”

Eliza kept charging, she felt her rage seep into the gun’s power. The hum from Synkiss’ barrel was increasing. Soon the shield won’t matter; soon that man’s body would be like dust in the wind. And the wind would be Synkiss’ energy. “You’re in no position to bargain.”

“Oh?” Cooper raised his eyebrow. “I have every reason to.” The gauntlet began to charge, sparks jumped around it excitedly.

“You wouldn’t.” Eliza started.

“I would.” Cooper said grimly. “Let’s play it out. I kill Belle, you kill me. I die; you live without her forever and from the looks of things, forever seems a long time.”

Eliza didn’t move.

“I’m just out here, helping the guards find out who let out the animals.” His eyes analyzed Eliza who seemed to be cooperating. He has to end this on good terms, he doesn’t need enemies. The thought quelled his built up anger. He can’t have enemies anymore.

“We didn’t do it.” Eliza answered.

“You seemed you did.” Cooper replied. “Belle here just attacked me like she was guilty.” State facts, don’t intimidate or tell her off. No enemies.

“She’s…overexcited to fight.” Eliza said sheepishly. If the man is the police or some authority, saying we were out to kill someone would be detrimental. Eliza thought to herself. No need to heighten their popularity by being arrested.

“So shall we simply call this an RHG battle?” Cooper said, trying to finalize the entire event.

“A draw.” Eliza said. “We’ll call it a draw.”

“Fine then.” He nodded. Good.

“If you let down that shield,” Eliza started. “What’s your assurance I don’t kill you in spite of our deal?”

Cooper lowered his shields anyway and approached Eliza with Belle in his hands. “This.”

Eliza moved closer and motioned Bl.An.C. to put her on the ground. “I can’t carry her, she’s too heavy.”

“Where do you live?”

“No need. I can call for some help. You can leave us.” Eliza stared at Cooper with Synkiss’s trigger still gripped tight. “Why do you fight if you are afraid to die?”

The sudden question caught Cooper off guard. He looked at Eliza and took a few moments before speaking.

“I’m not afraid to die. I’m afraid of the problems I leave behind when I do.” Bl.An.C. said solemnly. “I did a lot of things in my lifetime and I need to fix them all.” Cooper then touched his face, the large gash where Fetta had sliced through. It stung a lot and he had to get medical attention quick. “Goodbye.”

The android then began to walk away as Eliza grabbed something from her pocket. A mobile RHG pad, a small rectangular touch screen device that acted as a gladiator pass, gladiator roster viewer and city guide in one. She skimmed the screen as she sat down beside the now groaning Belle. She flipped through pages of gladiators until she found what she was looking for: Bl.An.C.’s profile.

“It says he’s a seasoned fighter, winner of several and loser of few.” Eliza muttered. She played a few videos of his battles; one of them was against someone that could convert energy. She played another which was against the now champion of the first tournament; he lost that one. “I get the feeling that he didn’t want to finish the fight…”

“Where…is that fucker?” Belled grumbled as she attempted to stand but failed. She fell flat on her back again. The residual sparks still arced over her body.

“Hush, my love.” Eliza said soothingly. “He has left. He was a gladiator and we tied the battle.”

“Did you see your waltz?” Belle asked and smiled.

“A bit more practice, Belle.”

The Suicide Sisters:

Date: July 18th, 20XX
Time: 7:42 AM
Location: StickPage Spectacular Zoo

It was suppose to be a simple task: Kill the douchebag next door. Never expect to see it become this complicated. Standing in the middle of a savage stampede mixed of ravenous and hostile animals and terrified tourists has made it even more frustrating and difficult as it is. To top it all off, someone there is looking for something to destroy, and he has found his targets.

Within the confines of a public zoo, the undead duo, the Suicide Sisters, are met eye-to-eye with a mysterious, robotic foe. Though transfixed by this person's appearance, there's no doubt that he's not human, and he's heading straight towards them! Caught under the frenzy, the two are unable to escape. Trapped, Eliza pulls out Synkiss and aims at Bl.An.C., who is halfway through the crowd, and tries to get a clear shot.

“Analysis: Target #2 is aiming hastily. Suggestion: Hinder their sight of vision. Blind the threats temporarily and create evasive maneuvers to avoid line of sight.”

Right on the spot, a bright light formed around his forearms and, in a few seconds, it has become cylindrical-like barrels. Eliza charged up her weapon and fired at the android, but the fire collided by Bl.An.C.'s plasma shots, causing a volatile reaction in resulting the area between them violently explode. The smoke has clouded their vision momentarily before it clears, and the figure vanished.

“Shit, the hell's going on!?” Bella exclaimed in confusion.

“Who the hell was that? Why is he attacking us!?”

“I don't know, Belle. What I know is that we have to move quickly before he has the advantage!”

Before reacting, a large rhinoceros rampages through the zoo, bashing through anything that's standing in its way. Heading towards the Sisters, they frantically split, evading its path. Bella backs up to a nearby cage while Eliza tumbles across the shrubbery. A barrage of plasma bolts comes from behind, one hitting Eliza's spinal cord. She tumbles to the ground then turns to shoot, but Bl.An.C. got close enough to stomp on her arm. Bella pulls out Fetta and sprints towards the android, spinning to develop enough momentum to toss it like a boomerang. Bl.An.C. tilts his head up and sees the upcoming blade.

Warning: Lethal weapon approaching in approximately 35 mph.

Bl.An.C. hastily leans back as the blade sweeps past over him before lodging itself into the trunk of a nearby oak tree. While not looking, Bella charges at him then tackles, pushing him off of Eliza. Free, she stood up and aims at Bl.An.C., but was interrupted by a random tourist who happens to run into her. The both fell to the ground while being trampled by other frightened denizens. Turns out a large white elephant is rampaging across the zoo, carrying a large pole on its trunk. Its large feet crushes many bystanders without a second thought, splattering them like ketchup packs. The clumsy tourist frantically stumbles as he's getting up then hurries out of there, but was ambushed by a hungry lion. Bella is still latching on to Bl.An.C., punching his visor before being thrown off of him. Eliza points Synkiss at him and continuously fires shot after shot. Bl.An.C. generates a shield on his right arm and block as much as he can.

Bella pulls Fetta out of the trunk and attempts to lash at him from behind, but sensing her coming, he makes a quick, yet effective maneuver by evading her swing and latch onto her arm then pulling her in front of Eliza's range. She ceased firing and catches her before watching Bl.An.C. escape.

“Dammit, he's getting away!” Eliza pulls Bella along, but she tugged her arm.

“Bella, let's go!!” she exclaimed before gazing at the white elephant charging right at them. The two flee from the monstrous beast as its wrecking everything that's standing in its way. Bella and Eliza sprint tirelessly before deciding to split up for a moment to not only throw off the elephant, but to expand their search for the green-eyed android. After evading the frenzied pachyderm, Eliza is now at the Aviary, the zoo's largest confines of many exotic birds, while Bella is at the Safari Zone. Bella scoured across the desert-like terrain to find Bl.An.C. while keeping her distance. Every gate has been opened, and as she kept searching, she has came across many lifeless bodies of those who never saw it coming. Some have been eaten, while others have been trampled mercilessly, turning this tourist attraction into a living nightmare.

Bella wants to feel remorse for these people, but her rage is still boiling inside for the mysterious cyborg, and vows to beat his robotic ass for attacking them without warning.

“Alright, where the fuck are you!?” Bella yelled out, hoping the android will hear her.

No response has been occurred, but a noise emerge from the bushes. Believing to be Bl.An.C., she sprints towards it, screaming like a madman. The figure within the bushes starts to growl and suddenly pounces on her. Bella didn't get the chance to react, but right now, she is fighting against a hungry lioness who is stripping the flesh off of her arm. Screaming in pain, Bella struggles to pry open the beast's bloodthirsty jaws, but the more she squirms, the more its canines dig deep inside her. As a last minute effort, she pulls her legs under the lioness, then with all her might, she pushes the creature off of her, but leaving a chunk of her arm within its mouth. Bleeding profusely, she's losing consciousness, but maintains her position while waiting for her arm to heal completely. Trying really hard to hold in her agony, she focuses on the blood-smeared feline, as her anger increases substantially.

Back at the Aviary, Eliza examines the entire structure for Bl.An.C., but the only thing that's there are empty cages, and a plethora of exotic feathers left over from the escaped birds. She can still hear the terror going on outside of this facility; screams of hundreds of lives being torn to shreds by nature's most deadly predators. As she sets another foot, Eliza catches a noise coming towards her at a supersonic speed and with no hesitation, she runs for cover. Pairs of small missiles are locked onto her and are ready to destroy its target. Getting behind a column, the missiles obliterates the area around it. Bl.An.C. emerges from hiding and scans the place to make sure she's eliminated completely. Scanning with his infrared vision, he spots Eliza running for another place to hide. He then locks onto her then fires another pair of missiles. While running, she attempts to shoot down the upcoming rockets; striking one down, it has initiated a volatile reaction with nearby missiles, causing a massive explosion. She bought herself some time to hide behind a large, artificial tree.

“What do you want from us!?” Eliza shout out to Bl.An.C.

Response: Nothing much but to see you and your partner terminated.

“What kind of reason is that!? You've got a lot of nerve to cause trouble between me and Bella!”

Accusation: You are responsible with the death of an innocent man! Such act will not be tolerated!

“Who gave you the fucking rights to say what we can and can't do!? That asshole has been causing problems for us for the past week!! If the admins of this city won't do anything, then we have the right to do so!”

Disagreement: That is no excuse! That innocent bystander is no wRHG, and you are forbidden to murder anyone outside the confines of the wRHG regulations!

“Fuck the regulations!!!” Her exclamation gave off a small snarl, a sign of agitation.

Eliza is busy charging her Synkiss, but Bl.An.C's infrared vision has detected her gun's heat signature and looks like she's ready to fire. He switches out his Missile Pods for his Blast Cannon, aiming at the area Eliza is hiding.

Warning: I will not let you two walk away from this. If you wish to leave this zoo safely, you have to face me first!

“I don't think that would be a problem,” Eliza replied. “I would gladly kill you for some good nice sleep tonight!”

Mockery: That won't be a problem, either. I'll make sure you get a nice long rest right where you stand!

Once fully charged, Eliza emerges from hiding and, in a simultaneous moment, they both fired their volatile weapons. With Bl.An.C.'s Blast Cannons firing invisible blasts of mach 3 energy and Eliza's Synkiss charged shot colliding, it has ignited a massive and dangerous explosion within the Aviary, bringing the entire building to rubble. Its shockwave has expanded across the zoo, bringing down anything in its path until everything is engulfed in smoke.

Bella, meanwhile, has finished off the ferocious lioness; what remains of the beast is now only minced meat of its former self. Being ravaged and pounced on multiple times have Bella look like she went to Hell and back. Panting heavily with what little energy she contains, while feebly holding Fetta with little fingers she have left, she spat on the dry dirt and flipped the carcass off. The explosion at the Aviary caught Bella's ears and have her turn towards the direction of the sound. The explosion has morphed a small mushroom cloud while the shockwave is trampling over everything it comes across, especially where Bella is. Knocked back by its sheer amount of force, she scrambles upon the ground and tries to lift herself up, but with the constant debris of dust, smoke, and the force of wind makes it difficult to see.

As it still lingers, the clouds gradually fade as time went by. With what Bella could see, she runs towards what's left of the Aviary. Still hazy, the area is all but stone and ash, and leftover feathers that still persists within the air. Bella rush to find Eliza somewhere within the destructed building, but hearing sirens within the distance, she hastily digs through piles of broken concrete and shredded steel.

“Eli?! Eli!! Where are you!?”

Bella frantically dug deeper within the rubble, but nothing came about. Unnoticed to her, Bl.An.C. rises from a pile of stone and limps his way to Bella. With what little energy he has left, he brings out his Beam Blade and prepares to strike her down. She hears a looming hum from the blade and turns around. With haste, she dodges his vertical slash, slicing through the stone like butter. Bella tries to evade his pulsing hot blade, but seems like the more she backs away, the more Bl.An.C. gets closer despite the limping. Grabbing a stone, she tosses it at him, only to be sliced in half with ease. Bella stumbles backwards and grabs Fetta by the handle as she continuously blocks Bl.An.C.'s attacks. Each strike felt heavier than the last, and she doesn't know how long can she keep this up. She's losing energy and on the urge of unconsciousness, which gives the android the upper-hand by knocking Fetta off of her hands. Disarmed, she attempts to go after it, but Bl.An.C. stomps onto Bella's torso and holds her in place. His foot is like having a 50 lbs dumbbell lying on top of her chest, slowly crushing her ribcage inward. Using what little energy she can sustain, she futilely tries to push Bl.An.C.'s foot off of her.

Analysis: You no longer have enough energy to continue fighting. It's hopeless for you.

“F-ffuck you!!” she snarled. “Where's Eliza...!?”

Response: After the explosion, I wasn't able to identify her, but I am very certain that she's been “taken care of.”

“Y-you... you lie!!!” she barked ferociously.

Command: Shut it! Your screams agitates me. It's time to end this!

Lifting his Beam Blade up, he prepares to strike down upon Bella; it will not kill her, but it will cause a significant amount of pain and agony to her. As he's about to finish her, his Beam Blade was struck by a sudden blast, destroying it. Its explosion has knocked Bl.An.C. out of consciousness, plummeting to the rubble of the Aviary. Free, Bella feebly reclines up and finds Eliza alive and well; holding Synkiss in her hand, she's all worn and wounded from the volatile reaction with the cyborg. Bella falls back and rests, relieved that she's still in one piece. The sirens rapidly approach near the zoo, forcing Eliza to lift Bella up from the ground and carry her back to the resort.

It was suppose to be a simple task: Kill the douchebag next door. Next thing they knew, every animal was released for some reason, caused a stampede, attacked by an android, and nearly blew the entire area to kingdom come. But looking on the bright side, at least they can finally have their good night sleep, but to be completely sincere, that won't last long.

Boomerang
07-24-2014, 05:11 PM
I'd like to say good fight to the both of you guys, because I enjoyed reading both entries!

Errorblender: I enjoyed your attention to detail, and the fact that you gave both of the Suicide Sisters ample fighting time with your character. The ending, with the standoff, was probably my favorite part of the writing. I always like your writings, so this comes as no surprise that this entry is spectacular. One thing that I wish you would have done is added more of the zoo animals into the story rather than just make them a passing thought. I thought that doing that would have added more depth to the story. Really, that's the only gripe I have though.

Shadowkirby: The fact that you added the stampeding zoo animals as such a major portion of your story is what I loved about your entry. Making note of the dying tourists was a nice touch as well. I also just like the Suicide Sisters in general, so I certainly enjoyed the read. I would have liked if you didn't just jump right in the battle, because with Error I was able to ease into it. Again, that's really my only gripe.

I really, really liked both entries. However, I think I'll have to go with Errorblender on this one, simply because I liked the ending. It was a tough pick though, and I loved both entries (If I haven't said that enough already)

ErrorBlender
07-26-2014, 10:57 AM
Thanks for the CnC Boomerang, very much appreciated. :D I really wanted to add a bit more to the animals, yeah. Other than the monkeys throwing their poo, haha.

ShadowKirby CnC:

When I first read the Suicide Sister's history and then peeked at their profile image I saw awesome. Although they had a semblance to Panty and Stocking, they were too different to be compared to them. The depth to their personality was just fantastic.

Anyway, I have little to say about your piece, ShadowKirby, other than it was great. I find that you're portrayal of Bl.An.C.'s anger right on the spot, all that internal rage did have to go somewhere. I loved how you incorporated the rampaging animals, it completed the scenery for me and added to the flavor of the fight. There are only minor things that I did notice like:

urge of unconsciousness, which I think was supposed to be verge of unconsciousness

But these are minor things and don't take away much from the overall quality. I liked the battle and its awesome to have battled you. :D

Shadowkirby
07-30-2014, 11:36 PM
Thanks for the CnC Boomerang, very much appreciated. :D I really wanted to add a bit more to the animals, yeah. Other than the monkeys throwing their poo, haha.

ShadowKirby CnC:

When I first read the Suicide Sister's history and then peeked at their profile image I saw awesome. Although they had a semblance to Panty and Stocking, they were too different to be compared to them. The depth to their personality was just fantastic.

Anyway, I have little to say about your piece, ShadowKirby, other than it was great. I find that you're portrayal of Bl.An.C.'s anger right on the spot, all that internal rage did have to go somewhere. I loved how you incorporated the rampaging animals, it completed the scenery for me and added to the flavor of the fight. There are only minor things that I did notice like:

urge of unconsciousness, which I think was supposed to be verge of unconsciousness

But these are minor things and don't take away much from the overall quality. I liked the battle and its awesome to have battled you. :D


Thanks, Error! It's a pleasure battling you as well!

I didn't know you liked my entry this much, I merely rushed the thing while taking some time to think and proofread it. Did it only, what, two days (one day past the due date)? Oh well, I'm just glad that you enjoyed reading it. :)

I'd enjoy reading yours as well, although it can be a bit too "dialoguey", but I liked it.

blakphoenix
07-31-2014, 02:06 AM
So to wrap up we have no idea who released the animals (well i'm gonna say the god of chaos did it but that's my excuse), someone "accidentally" fed himself to a lion (...what?), someone got trampled (Elephant is unstoppable), and the zoo got destroyed a good deal (You're not superman so you have to pay for your property damage). What a wonderfully standard wRHG battle. ^_^

Strong piece as expected. I dont think I saw too many, if any, grammatical errors...cause you're one impeccably grammatical Error...Anyways...Did Alice ever get back to Cooper with those details? If not I can already imagine the epilogue:
"Cooper I got the details you requested."

"Query: Details on what exactly?"

"The details on the Suicide Sisters you wanted."

Cooper grit his teeth in shock as the immense force generated by a pouncing lioness nearly overwhelmed him. Luckily his suit's own strengths outweighed the wildly ferocious predator's and he launched the beast back into its cage then secured the door.

"Response: There's no longer a need for it, I've handled the duo already."

"Excuse me? I searched for these details for half an hour and you're just going to tell me that you don't need them?"

"Statement: Yes, thank you Alice." Bl.An.C responded in his monotonous manner. His wingpack fired up and launched him into the sky as he chased down a rampaging elephant. If I can get it's attention with my drones I can attempt to drive it back to its pen The android stalled and requested his drones to carry out his plan. He hovered for a few seconds too long, realizing that his drones hadn't materialized when he wanted them. "Query: Alice is there something wrong with the Cy-Matter Materializer?" There was no response, Cooper grew worried and asked again in a haste his suit couldn't display. Query: Alice is something wrong?"

Then, like a light in the darkness, her voice broke through. "Oh...details Cooper. I'd love to find out what's wrong but I just have to read through a few details to find out. Ya know it's the little details that really trip a person up."

Cooper's eyes widened. "Plea: Alice, I need those drones now. Please." Cooper hurriedly soared over the elephant and landed on top of it. This sudden impact frightened the creature more and it began to buck, in the way elephants do, with Cooper holding on not only to the elephant, but also to the hope that he can come up with a plan to stop it.

"Fine." Alice said in a tone of defeat yet with mischievous intent entwined in it. "I'll give you your drones." The metallic orbs materialized around Bl.An.C in an instant yet his internal H.U.D became cluttered with pictures, paragraphs, and other info on the suicide sisters. "Read it aloud to me so I know my efforts aren't going to waste."

.....and It goes on from there. I got a bit carried away but whateves. What was this again? CnC? Eh, I'll get you on the next one.

I honestly expected more from you with the last piece of yours I read back in the tournament. Which was when you had that weird yet kinda cool guy who was undead and invincible sorta I think? I don't remember entirely, all I know is I wanted to fight you back then. With these two new characters however I really want to play with their personalities. I'm not trying to say that I want to fight you right away, just letting you know that you're on my fisticuffs hit list. Oh your fist, your fist, is on my list. Anyway, I have enjoyed your writing in the past and I dont think this piece live up to that standard so I dont think it needs CnC. Give me something worth tearing down next time please and thank you. :)

ErrorBlender
07-31-2014, 02:31 AM
Well, I can see that kind of thing happening between Alice and Cooper. I've never written them having a small argument like that and it seems fun to do so. Haha. Thanks for the epilogue then :D

blakphoenix
07-31-2014, 02:36 AM
Haha! Anytime friend, anytime. ;)

Crank
07-31-2014, 10:48 PM
Alright, so it's significantly later than I'd like it to be, so I'll catch you tomorrow Shadowkirby, or if not, Saturday for sure.

Error:

Very strong story! I've always respected the level of intelligence that you display, especially considering your guy's a scientist! I got a couple quick things for ya though.

The very beginning felt a little bit too relaxed to me considering all the chaos going down, like, if intensity is in the air like a firework igniting a tree, ya really gotta show it. Like, I'm fine with Alice being fairly relaxed, but when the scene shifts it should be one of the first things you feel. I don't know, I always picture settings like photos when they start out. If I see a snapshot of a zoo being overrun by things that would eat me like candy bar, it's going to freak me out. Like, Swear-in-front-of-Children Level freak out.

“The zoo is in utter chaos, Cooper.” Alice stated over the com.

“Statement: I’m quite aware of that.” He replied, sounding very irritated. “Commentary: Not how I imagined myself dealing with stress.”

Bl.An.C. was in the air, his wingpack strained against the extra weight. He had a few people hold onto his hands as he swept over them earlier and saved them from an oncoming stampede of animals. He set them down on top of a nearby store. With scarcely little time to react, the zoo guards and animal specialists were in a panic as they tried to rally the recently freed creatures. A myriad of sounds filled the air, the noise drilling into Cooper’s head.

This feels a little bit more like a sign. The zoo probably wreaks of sweat and urine by this point, show how dire the situation is.

“The zoo is in utter chaos, Cooper.” Alice stated over the com.

“Statement: I’m quite aware of that.” Frenzied panic below him drilled a hole into Cooper's head like an oil company raping the earth, barely able to hear Alice over all the shrieks and screams. His wingpack strained against extra weight, almost having to break one of the hands of those he was rescuing, grip seizing as the man's sweaty palm threatened to slide though. “Commentary: Not how I imagined myself dealing with stress.”

The stampede that almost ripped their lives from their body was still rampaging throughout the zoo when Bl.An.C. was finally able to unload them on top of a nearby store. With scarcely little time to react, the zoo guards and animal specialists were in a panic as they tried to rally the recently freed creatures. There wasn't a soul inside that was prepared for the day, but the courageous and brave below still planned on fighting to keep the innocent from turning to mutilated corpses, hiding their terror behind their resolve.

Similarly, there was another too casual conversation early on when Bl.An.C. goes to offer his assistance. These are regular men and women, but they were acting as though they were used to this sort of thing. I do feel ya though, it's tricky when you get stuck in one character's mind but when other people are getting screen time you have to throw on their shoes for a quick moment to discover what might be rushing through their brain.

“It seems you want to help. If you could find a way to rally the animals that would be great help.”

Before Cooper could agree the other guard interrupted. “No, I’d rather you find the culprit. They may still be here. The control panel is in the center building of the entire zoo. He couldn’t possibly escape yet.” He told the android and beckoned the other guard to follow. “I’m betting it was Sad Larry. The guy is nearing retirement and…”

“It seems you want to help. If you could find a way to rally the animals that would be great help.”

Before Cooper could agree the other guard interrupted. “Are you kidding me! Send a guy with rockets to go get tigers? This is why you got your hours cut, they'd all frickin' die! He should find the culprit. They may still be here. The control panel is in the center building of the entire zoo. He couldn’t possibly escape yet.” He told the android and beckoned the other guard to follow. “I’m betting it was Sad Larry. The guy is nearing retirement and…”

Again though, I really did enjoy the story! Namely, just make sure your intensity is expressed and your side characters match their atmosphere and you should be good to go!

Lobotomizer
08-01-2014, 11:07 AM
Shadowkirby:

Absolutely abysmal grammar and tenses. They're all over the place, and whilst still readable, is absolutely unforgivable. I also see overuse of some words and phrases ("volatile reaction" comes to mind)

The story was bland, talking was a free action, and a zoo seemingly containing dozens of bloodthirsty animals actively seeking delicious human flesh looks to be entirely unrealistic. There is alot of telling instead of showing, and whilst the battle was easy to follow, it made me completely disinterested because you were basically running through the story without stopping to go "hey, look at this, interesting thing here." The end where Eliza seemed to have been disposed of was fine, but you didn't bother stopping where suspense would have grabbed the reader's interest more. It basically amounted to "suddenly blanc defeated by eliza".

To me, it looks like a complete rush job. I don't know how long you took to make this and I'd rather not make any assumptions, but you can and should do better than this.

Error:

I've run you through this before, but just to repeat.

Stop swapping tenses and viewpoints. Stop where suspense is needed, pace the battle appropriately. Descriptions could use variation to feel livelier and more interesting.

Error wins, of course.

Crank
08-02-2014, 09:02 PM
Shadowkirby:

I think my definition of 'unforgivable' is mildly different than Lobotomizer's. While it is true there were some issues with the tense, it hurt the flow more than disemboweled the story as he's implying. It was still a good and entertaining read, and while perhaps some aspects of the animal attacks may have been unrealistic, I didn't buy The Avengers because I was duped into thinking it was a documentary on New York. I found it to be very entertaining, although I think more display of emotion would've benefited you very much. No matter what I'm watching/reading/thinking/talking or being told about, the characters are always the most important part to me. Their specific emotions and responses to things are what drives them, so that's what I look forward to.

Dialogue is the easiest way to do this, but it isn't the only way. Movies do close up shots so their characters can feel like they're in friend proximity. Like, where you'd be standing if you were talking to these guys. You get to see the softness in their eyes, the smile pulling their cheeks up or maybe that they're just really distracted by how badly they need to sneeze. It felt to me like there was a distance barrier between me and the twins on this, like they were way over there and Bl.An.C. was even farther. Try bringing your characters closer to your reader by showing more of the small details of them more often.

Bella, meanwhile, has finished off the ferocious lioness; what remains of the beast is now only minced meat of its former self. Being ravaged and pounced on multiple times have Bella look like she went to Hell and back. Panting heavily with what little energy she contains, while feebly holding Fetta with little fingers she have left, she spat on the dry dirt and flipped the carcass off.

Bella, meanwhile, has finished off the ferocious lioness; what remains of the beast is now only minced meat of its former self. Being ravaged and pounced on multiple times have Bella look like she went to Hell and back, stitches along her neck reopened and draining down her body, soaking the little clothing she wore. Her exhausted exotic eyes fought to say open as she panted heavily with what little energy she contains, while feebly holding Fetta with little fingers she have left. She spat on the dry dirt and flipped the carcass off.

Just that type of thing trickled in. Use it to showcase personality, get your reader to bond, dive into some more details, and you'll have a really sick story!

Again though, I did enjoy it and find the Suicide Sisters to be extremely interesting!