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Cassandra
06-18-2016, 04:54 PM
The assassin and the blademaster have faced off...
Beware, for the shadows are watching...

SHARPIRO'S PART


He had been observing her. Ever since the other people in the building left, he had tried to claim it as a refugee, but the creature had been guarding it. He knew he had been spotted when he had came to the vacant building. He saw it hiss and swoop up gracefully in the air, It sweeped the night air, majestically and terrifyingly. He considered leaving the premises, but times were desperate. He could not find shelter anywhere, he could not afford to rent a room in the inn and his house was burned down by the trackers. Also he felt he could not leave, fearing the creature might spot and stalk him.


“Well done Ethernu,” he muttered under his breath, “Now, look at what you’ve gotten yourself into.” He spent most of the nights sleeping the dark and tranquil forest; It would have been fine if there weren't any mosquitoes. Ethernu was getting tired of the mosquito bites and was growing restless. The stupid insects sucked his blood and left itchy swelling. He regretted taking even one step towards the property fence. Then he did it, the most idiotic thing he could have done. In the dead of the night, he walked towards the building, cautious of every step he took, every noise he heard. As he walked, he thought to himself: “How did I even convince myself to doing this?” He expected at every moment, for the creature to swoop behind him and attack. However, he felt the wind blow as he walk towards her at the front gate, an iron gate that seemed similar to that of a graveyard. The heard the gate creak eerily and blow open. He felt as if something was watching him. The dark night was lit up by the pale, lifeless moon. He saw the shadow of a pillar and something on top of it. Fearing what he might see, he looked up slowly. He saw two eyes that burn with fire, it had a stick figure like body with a fine coat of fur as black as darkness itself. “Well, well, well,” the creature started, “What do we have here?” Trembling, Ethernu tried to say something but his mouth remained unserviceable. “Well, before you die, I let you know my name is Vamprina.” The creature spread its wings and stared at Ethernu, looking as if she was ready to strike.

And then she did. Ethernu unprepared, attempted to unsheath the morph blade. But Vamprina dived at him and clawed his face, and blood streamed into his eye, blinding him temporarily. He heard her taunting him: “Is that all you’ve got? I was expecting more of a challenge.”

Rubbing the blood off of his eyes, he unsheathed the morph blade and turned around, only to be meet with the absence of Vamprina. Then he heard something creep behind him. He rolled forward and turned around, uppercutting with his blade. Sure enough, he hit Vamprina, a perfect cut from the belly to chest. Vamprina, annoyed and pained, swooped up into the air and circled for a bit. She dived down at Ethernu from behind. Ethernu, expecting such a move, morphed his blade into Joy. Without looking, he shot seven phasers at her. She dodged the first three, but
was hit by the other four. She panicked as she lost control of the air and smashed into the ground.

She stood and screamed at him: “JUST WHO DO YOU THINK YOU ARE?”

Ethernu sensing his opponent cracking emotionally, shouted out bravely: “If you wish Vamprina, I am Ethernu, wielder of the morph blade and guided by the four winds!”

As he said this, he morphed the blade into an Rpg and fired a rocket. Vamprina narrowly dodged as she heard an explosion behind her and the sound crumbling of stone. Not wanting look back at the damage, Vamprina flew at him with tremendous speed. She sliced her opponent's face with her wing blade and stabbed him with her claws. She got a couple more hits on him before Ethernu finally countered her and cut one of her wings.

Angered, Vamprina charged at him slashing at him with her wing blades, clawing at him with her talons, and swiping at him with her claws. But it was of no avail, Ethernu blocked all her attacks. Suddenly, a cold feeling struck her heart what if she had met her match? She wished that Jolt could come and help her now. She wished any member of The Wind Chasers would come back and help her. She missed Zoe, even if Zoe did leave her ramen boxes under her hang perch. Then Ethernu broke from the fight and dashed into the forest. She chased after him but couldn't spot him. “Come out and fight coward!” But, she was met with silence. She didn’t know how much of a threat the human could be as he ran towards her with a zweihander; silent
as a mouse, but deadly as a lion. He brought the pole-arm down with a tremendous force, wounding Vamprina badly.

Vamprina turned around, but Ethernu disappeared again. Now she was the one who was being hunted, by an ameture using guerilla tactics. Although the thought of this disgusted her, she began to wonder if he had more experience than her. After several more painful blows, she finally heard a sound behind her. “At last!” she thought. It looked like her chance had came. Pretending to not notice anything. She waited until Ethernu was close to her. Then, she turned around and confronted a now suprised Etherenu. She smirked at him then vanished from sight.

The next thing that Ethernu knew was that Vamprina bitten him, He tried to shake her off, but she refused to be shaken off. He felt his strength weaken. When she finally let go, his legs wobbled and he leaned on the morph blade for support.

Vamprina, seeing her chance, flew at Ethernu knocking him away from the weapon and pinned him to the ground. Then she lifted him up by his neck and stared at him coldly.

“Spit it out!” She spat in his face, “Why are you here, and what have you done to my friends.”

Ethernu smiled weakly and did not answer.

“ARE YOU DAFT? ANSWER ME NOW!”

She threw him on the ground violently like a ragdoll. Weak, he lay there and felt the north wind blowing, he felt some of his strength returning. He stared at the starry night sky filled with stars. It was beautiful and mysterious. The Morph Blade’s gem shined brightly, illuminating the area. After regaining his strength, he stood up to face a shocked Vaprina and motioned the blade to return to his hand. The blue gemmed blade of the goddess returned to his hand. As it came back, it cut Vamprina’s face, and Ethernu walked quickly towards her. Once more he attacked and blocked but this time, he was more wiser and more skilled. He had learned from his mistakes during the battle. He fought flawlessly as the skilled person he was. Both exchanged heavy blows to each other and both fought with equal valor and skill. Vamprina swooped over him and grabbed him using her talons, she flew up high with the struggling human then dropped him. Ethernu screamed as he fell. He fell and broke his leg with a sickening crunch. Vamprina, take using his crippled leg to her advantage, turned invisible again, only this time, Ethernu was prepared. As he turned around, he swung the blade in the direction he turned. As the blade moved closer to the shadow creature, it morphed into a giant hammer. He broke one of Vamprina's wing and part of her rib cage. At this, she yelled in pain as her fell to the ground, crippled.

Still weak, Ethernu morphed the hammer back into its true form. He slowly limped towards

She saw the human approach her slowly, sword in hand, ready to finish her off. She would be humiliated this time, but next time she would get revenge.

Ethernu prepared to kill her, but something in his mind told him it was not right. His hand trembled and he started sweating. Was it really how he was going to win? Killing his opponent without mercy? Even if she was a shadow creature, she deserved a chance to live, right? He struggled to make up his mind. Out of frustration, he stabbed the rock next to her.

Vamprina was surprised, he was about to bask in the glory of winning. Why did he just throw out that chance. She heard him speak: “Sorry for invading, we could have talked this over a nice cup of tea. To answer your earlier question, I wished to seek refuge in that building you were guarding. I do not know who your friends are or what they look like.”

Vamprina felt something, this person reminded her of someone… Perhaps Aiba? No...probably not. “Well, I think I’ll leave now.” Vamprina felt there was one question left unanswered. “Wait!” She called out. “Yes, Vamprina?” “Were you the person who was stalking me in the woods?” “No, I did observe you when you were guarding the building though.”

Then Ethernu limped away into the woods as it began to brighten up for the sunlight. Leaving Vamprina with many unanswered questions. Why did he spare her? Where did he come from? Where were her friends? Were there others who were stalking her? And so, how many?

After the red scarfed man left, she went back to the building she called home and rested her broken bones and her wing. She saw the broken pillar as a result from the battle and sighed. She had a lot of explaining to do to the silver haired boy, if he ever returned. It was a long night she had experienced, and she did not want repeat that again.



MY PART


Vamprina hung from the roof of the Wind Chaser clan building, eyes focused on the environment. Within the structure’s walls were her clan mates, sleeping as was usual. Yesterday had been exhausting for them. Just two days ago, one of their own left, and even now everyone was still reeling from the shock of the situation. The incident had hit Aiba especially hard, and his usually sunny nature had noticeably less glow than normal. Vamprina shook her head, focusing on reality again. He’d get over it. He had to.

The glow of the early morning sun began to creep forth from the horizon. Its warm rays sent long sweeping shadows running for cover; cowering behind the buildings they belonged to.

As she hung there, invisible in shadow save for the dim glow of her eyes, a flicker of distant movement called her attention. Her ears turned towards the approaching figure. It was human-like. Vamprina left her perch, bearing down on the target before it could notice her. As she got closer, her mental picture changed. This wasn’t the figure she was looking for. She slowed down, coming out of her dive and beginning a slow circle above the individual. It had noticed her now.

It was a human, with a red scarf and a tan cap. It wore a blue sweater over a white T-shirt, and the height seemed to suggest that it was about 30 years of age. After a brief conversation with the human’s shadow, it confirmed that the age was indeed 30. On the human’s back was a blade-like weapon.

“State your business stranger.” Vamprina hissed, landing a short distance away. “Make it fast if you want to live.”

The figure cocked its head, slightly confused.

“My name is Ethernu.” he replied. “I’m your challenger.”

Vamprina looked him up and down, narrowing her eyes. Ethernu reached for the hilt of his weapon, and the assassin tensed for a moment. However, the human was only interested in scratching an itch on the back of his neck, and Vamprina relaxed only slightly in response.

“I see.” she responded, folding her wings to her sides. “Your name does ring a bell.”

“You got my message?”

“Yes.”

“So. Shall we?”

“Not here. My allies are sleeping and I don’t take kindly to people waking them up at this hour.”

“Then, can you suggest something?”

“I suppose we could use the ruined city. We can prevent collateral damage that way.”

“Where is it?”

Vamprina smiled, spreading her wings for takeoff.

“I’ll show you the way.”


***

Ethernu shuffled along after Vamprina, switching his gaze from her to the crumbling ruin around him every few moments. The city looked like something out of a post-apocalyptic movie. There was no life anywhere save himself and his opponent. He cast a wary glance her way, watching as she drifted lazily on the winds above. She didn’t look that dangerous. To him, Vamprina resembled a large bat with a very thin body and legs. Her head was perfectly spherical, and she had large eyes, long hair, and a pair of large pointed ears on the top of her head. Her claws and talons were a formidable sight, but other than that, he figured he could take her on.

He returned his gaze to the terrain, stepping carefully around sizeable cracks and chunks of debris. The sight caused a slight frown to edge across his face. This was the battlefield he was supposed to fight on? That was unfair. She might as well just stay up there and laugh as he stumbled about, trying to get into a proper fighting position.

Ethernu looked back to the sky, and found that Vamprina had completely disappeared. Tension snapped through his body. Had she tricked him?

Just as he was about to decide this wasn’t a good idea in the first place, the ground leveled off into a massive flat of cracked pavement. Ethernu took a few moments to survey the scene, noting the ring of ruin around the edges of the plain. Scorch marks dotted the ring, broken up every now and then by a massive scratch mark. Crusted blood and stains scattered across the flat area, scentless with age.

For a moment, the sun slashed through the cloud barrier, lighting up a strange marking near the further edge of the ring. He walked over to it, curiously attracted by its swirling design.

“Disturb it and you’ll disintegrate.” a sudden voice said.

Ethernu whirled to see Vamprina standing behind him, a disturbing grin on her face. Ethernu suppressed a shudder. He could see every one of her teeth, and her fangs stuck out the most. Was that where her name came from? Vamprina smiled at his discomfort, and then waved her wing at the mark.

“It’s an explosion rune. Highly sensitive.” she continued. “If you’d taken at least one step more, the dirt kicked up by your movements would have triggered it.”

Some of the earlier tension Ethernu had been feeling began to melt away. He moved back, giving the symbol an extra-wide berth.

“Thanks,” he replied. “…I guess.”

Vamprina nodded. “I found another one of them over there by that abandoned warehouse. I sent my shadow to investigate and she disintegrated when she tried to land near it.”

Seeing Ethernu looking at her feet, she laughed and twirled once, spreading her wings wide.

“Don’t worry; I still have her with me. It takes more than just a little explosion to kill her.”

Ethernu’s face twisted a bit. Well…that was kind of unnerving to hear. He and Vamprina then stood there for a while, looking at the marking. Then Ethernu looked back up at the assassin, finding out that she was all the way on the other side of the ring, perched on a scorched rock.

“Are you ready human?” Vamprina called.

Ethernu drew his weapon and took on a battle stance. “I’m more than ready!” he shouted back, hoping his voice sounded as confident as he thought it did.

Vamprina crouched, ready to take wing.

You’d better be, she thought to herself, and shot into the air.

Ethernu tightened his grip on his Morph Blade, eyes locked on Vamprina as she approached. As she drew near, she flicked her wings a little, and a new gleam caught in the sunlight. Blades. Part of her wings had just become swords. The assassin closed the gap and swept her wings down, aiming directly for Ethernu’s blade edge. The blades met with a ringing CLANG, and Ethernu staggered for a moment. Vamprina pushed hard against the blade, and Ethernu held his stance for a few moments and then suddenly jumped backwards. The action nearly caused him to stumble and fall onto his rear, but he recovered quickly, just in time to see Vamprina simply flap her wings and land before him again. He pushed the disappointment out of his head. He’d wanted her to lurch forwards at least a little.

Slightly angered by her smug smile, he jumped forwards, swiping hard. Just before the blade hit its target, Vamprina burst apart into tiny particles. Ethernu hesitated, taking a quick look around.

What…?

Suddenly Vamprina reappeared on his left, her talons ready to sink into his arm. Ethernu spotted her and swung wide, trying to aim for one of her wings. Vamprina folded them and twisted to avoid the attack. She landed again, a safe distance away, and Ethernu turned to see that his blade had come in contact with her after all. Vamprina was missing a bit of her hair, and the fire in her eyes showed that she knew it.

“You…” she hissed, and beneath her feet, her shadow seemed to grow slightly larger. “…will pay for that.”

Ethernu twirled his blade, pointing it at her. “Bring it on.” he challenged.

For a few moments, Vamprina checked herself quickly, making sure she wasn’t missing anything else. Ethernu took the chance and rushed her, forcing her to turn her attention to him again. Vamprina ducked under the first swipe, jumped over the second, and then the third completely missed as she took to the air again. She landed on Ethernu’s weapon, her claws digging in near the hilt. Vamprina flapped her wings, nearly lifting Ethernu off the ground, weapon and all. Ethernu tightened his grip, not wanting to let go, but he could feel his fingers slipping ever so slightly…

Ethernu morphed his blade into Joy, and Vamprina let go immediately, suspicious. Okay, so he could turn his blade into things. Interesting. Vamprina landed a safe distance away, eyeing the weapon. It seemed to be a ranged weapon of sorts. Not good.

Ethernu fired, intentionally aiming for Vamprina’s left foot. The assassin barely leapt out of the way, taking wing once more. She circled, unsure of the gun’s real range.

“How far can that thing shoot?” Vamprina asked Ethernu, keeping her flight path irregular.

Ethernu smiled. “Wouldn’t you like to know?” he responded, and fired again.

Vamprina dodged with a little twirling motion, secretly watching the bullet’s travel as it zipped by her ear. Still, it had happened really fast, so for now she decided it was safe to assume that it had an infinite range. All she had to do was avoid getting hit by it and everything would be fine.

Down below, Ethernu kept his eyes on Vamprina as she circled swiftly in the air, trying to confuse him with her twisty flight pattern. For a moment, he just studied her motions, firing every now and then. Ethernu then focused completely on Vamprina’s left foot, firing a shot and then another after a split second delay. Just like he’d predicted, the assassin twisted to avoid the first one and exposed her left foot for just a few seconds. The laser bolt smashed into it, shattering the talons on contact.

Vamprina screamed in pain and anger, vanishing again. Ethernu held his ground, listening carefully for the sound of wings. He picked them up quickly, figuring out that Vamprina was right in front of him. He fired in that direction, causing Vamprina to appear again. She wavered, her left wing having been seared by the attack, but the next few shots were dodged easily. She closed in, seemingly aiming for his head.

Ethernu ducked down for a moment and then swept the gun hard at the air above him, missing his planned melee attack by inches. Vamprina turned on a dime and sped back at her foe’s exposed back, putting up her claws.

You won’t dodge me this time… she thought, and landed a solid shoulder charge onto his back.

Ethernu cried out and sprawled onto his face, the wind knocked out of him. He coughed to recover, scrambling to rise as fast as he could. No such luck. Vamprina landed on his right side, her talons digging into his flesh. He screamed again, writhing like a miserable fish out of water. He lifted his gun and fired wildly, managing to hit his assailant’s left wingtip. Vamprina snarled and released him, vanishing once more.

Ethernu leaped to his feet, gingerly plucking at his injury. Surprisingly, the wounds, though painful, were not very serious and only bleeding a little bit. He took a quick look around and then listened carefully. She had to have taken to the air again. Sure enough, he could hear wingbeats coming close.

He whirled and swiped at the source with the butt of his weapon, managing to land a solid hit to Vamprina’s head. She tumbled, an angry hiss bursting from her throat. She then faced Ethernu again, crawling on all fours.

“Resting already?” Ethernu taunted, feeling a shiver run up his spine for some reason. “I could do this all day!”

Vamprina just shook her head and smiled. “Maybe you could, but with me alive, you’d never make it through the night.”

She finished the sentence with a chilling laugh, and spread her wings again. Ethernu aimed his gun at her, but then hesitated for a moment. She was getting too used to this weapon. It was time for another change. The weapon shifted, turning into a grappling gun.

Vamprina took to the air swiftly, now knowing that this weapon did have a certain range she could learn and avoid. Ethernu dashed forwards and fired before she was ready though, and the hook’s claws dug deep into the skin of her right wing. Vamprina landed immediately, and Ethernu realized his mistake a few seconds too late. The assassin raised her wing and lunged back, yanking Ethernu off his feet. He was thrown forwards; his face kissing the unforgiving pavement beneath him.

Vamprina’s mocking laugh reached his ears, and he rose just in time to see her cut the cable and take off.

“Oh are we all sleeping now?” she crooned. “Seriously, you snore louder than Zackeroar.”

Ethernu caught the dangerous edge in her voice and grew tense, morphing his blade back into his laser gun. Vamprina swept towards him, and he fired quickly, making a hole in her left wing. The assassin screamed and faltered a little in the air, renewing her charge with fresh ferocity in her eyes.

Ethernu tensed, but Vamprina vanished just before crashing into him. He turned his weapon back into the Morph Blade and made a quick estimation before swinging it in a wide circle. A screech met his ears and he turned quickly towards its source, ready to swing again.

To his astonishment, Vamprina sprawled before him, a pool of blood expanding beneath her. At his feet lay her left wing, severed perfectly from the shoulder down. The assassin spat blood, heaving herself into a position where she faced her foe.

Stunned at the sight, Ethernu felt a sickening feeling grab his gut. His weapon slipped from his hands.

“I…I’m sorry…” he faltered.

Vamprina crouched awkwardly, blood flowing freely from the injured area. Her eyes blazed with fury.

“Oh…you’ll be sorry all right.” she replied, leaping gracelessly towards him.

Numb, Ethernu didn’t even register Vamprina’s collision with him, or even the feel of her fangs sinking deep into his neck. They fell to the ground together, covered in blood and sweat. After a few moments, Vamprina rose, tracing the side of his neck with her existing wing blade, her expression serious. A droplet of blood was on her chin, but Ethernu couldn’t tell if it was his or hers.

He tried to move, but he felt completely drained, as if he hadn’t slept in years.

“What…what did you do to me?” he managed to say, exhaustion plaguing his every word.

Vamprina just gave him a small smile and lowered her head to the side of his face.

“Sleep tight…Ethernu.” she whispered into his ear, and then everything went black.


***

Vamprina woke to a familiar sight. It was the wRHG recovery center. She rose, swinging her feet off the side of her bed and prepared to take flight. She stopped for a moment as a strange feeling overcame her, and then she remembered and looked down at herself. Her left wing was still missing.

Vamprina snorted, looking at the empty beds spreading out before her. On the far wall left of her position was a massive screen with many different names. The most recent entry read ‘The Master versus Zhelan’. As she watched, the screen changed and added ‘Ethernu versus Vamprina’. The sight caused a faint smile to grace Vamprina’s face.

She then looked around, hoping to spot Ethernu, but he was nowhere in sight. She got off her bed, walking towards the room’s only exit (which also happened to be its only entrance). Before she reached the door, a nurse came in quickly, startling the assassin. Vamprina’s ears flattened and she narrowed her eyes.

“Vamprina!” the red-haired lady exclaimed, her voice firm. “You can’t leave here yet!”

“And why not?” Vamprina replied, a slightly suspicious edge to her tone.

“You need to rest more before I let you loose. Those are the rules, so please return to your bed.”

“The magic of ‘please’ doesn’t work on me. Where’s my wing?”

The nurse put her hands on her hips, staring unflinchingly into Vamprina’s eyes. “It was taken by some strange men in black hooded cloaks. They set off the security alarms everywhere, but even though the wRHG regulators arrived, they escaped.”

Vamprina’s face changed immediately, and even the nurse took a few steps back.

“You let them take it?” the assassin hissed, her body trembling with anger. The nurse opened her mouth to respond, but then shut it again and put her head in her hands.

Puzzled by her reaction, Vamprina took a good look at the lady and realized how distraught she really was. Something was wrong here. The nurse’s face had clearly shown that she was lying.

“I’m leaving.” Vamprina announced, pushing her way past the shaking nurse. As she passed by though, the human actually dared to grab her wing.
Vamprina turned, her fangs bared, but then stopped when the nurse sank to her knees, trembling.

“Please!” the lady begged. “Please don’t leave me here with them…”

“Who?” Vamprina asked, suddenly feeling pity for the human.

“There’s no one left! I’m the only one they didn’t find!” the nurse babbled. “Doctor Martin didn’t let them take your wing…so they killed everybody.”

Vamprina was stunned. How was her wing that valuable? What kind of thief would kill all the people in the hospital just for one thing that could just be grabbed and ran with? A sudden thought slammed into her mind.

“Ethernu!” she told the nurse, and saw the recognition on the lady’s face.

“He…he’s alright.” was the reply. “He woke up before you did and left before…before this all happened.”

There was a short pause, and the poor lady began to tremble again.

“They’re still inside…” she whimpered.

Vamprina senses were suddenly on high alert, and she put one wing around the nurse. Whatever or whoever ‘they’ were…the regulators had not been able to stop it.

Vamprina lowered her voice, looking right at the nurse’s face. The assassin’s eyes were soft, and the nurse seemed to relax a little.

“We’re going to get out of here.” Vamprina whispered. “Just stick with me and try to keep quiet.”

The lady nodded, her eyes moist, but otherwise willing to listen. Fearing she might cry, Vamprina said nothing more and the two slowly crept out the door. The nurse pointed in the direction that led out of the building. Vamprina kept her ears at a constant swivel, making sure they weren’t followed. At first, there was nothing.

Suddenly a score of black forms appeared, surrounding them on every side. The creatures were vaguely humanoid, and seemed to be made entirely of wriggling, wormlike tendrils. Their pulsating heads shone from within, tiny rays of red pushing past the worms; casting an eerie glow across the walls and ceiling. Dotted across their faces were disorderly clusters of spiderlike yellow eyes, each one with a slitted black pupil that darted crazily back and forth. Behind them, Vamprina could see the broken bodies of some of the hospital staff, horror frozen onto their dead faces.

The assassin’s blood iced. The presence she felt coming from them was unspeakably evil. She’d never felt anything like this in her life, except...

Sudden recognition crossed Vamprina’s face. Sevientorr. This was his doing.

The nurse moaned with fright, cowering beneath Vamprina’s wing. Vamprina was suddenly overcome with rage at the sight of the creatures. They had killed all those innocent people. They did not deserve to live. One monster cocked its head, and then all of them swarmed forwards at once. Vamprina hissed, baring her fangs and reciting:


Curse your night, curse your day,
Shadows come, observe your prey,
Torture their minds, snuff out their light,
Death itself cannot save them from fright!

The creatures shrieked, grabbing at their misshapen heads with their hideous wriggling fingers. Vamprina watched as each horror’s own shadow rose and strangled its owner, causing them to explode into particles of smoky red light.

The two stood there for a moment, listening. Then they continued on, reaching the hospital entrance without incident. Upon opening the doors however, a whole new terror met their eyes. Everyone was dead. The streets were lined with bodies, as if they had simply fallen from the sky like spring rain. For a moment, the pair stood silent.

The nurse fell to her knees, overcome with emotion by the brutality of it all. Vamprina cocked her head, too saddened to speak and too stunned to cry. As she stood there, a wave of darkness crept across the ground, forming a massive birdlike shape. These were shadows from all the life forms on this planet. Vamprina looked up at the form, asking it for the status of the life on the world. The answer confirmed her suspicions. She and the nurse were the only ones alive.

Vamprina glanced at the nurse, wondering how on earth she’d managed to avoid those terrifying monster beasts. The assassin’s shadow appeared, and the look on its face said it all. Her shadow had only managed to conceal one life from Sevientorr’s minions.

Vamprina looked up at the sky, her previous wrath having returned ten times worse than before.

“Sevientorr!” she shrieked. “You’re doing this all because of a wing?! Is that it?! An innocent person decided not to listen to your foul purpose, so you destroy him and everyone else on this planet?! You may be powerful…but my shadow mastery is even greater than yours! Curse you! CURSE YOU!”

The assassin screamed at the clouds for a long time, wishing that she could fly, wishing that she could face Sevientorr and rip his evil grin off his evil face and then tear what was left into bits so small…that no one would ever care enough to put them together again.

She got no reply. Thunder growled overhead, and then the skies opened up in a torrential downpour. Vamprina sighed, and she and the nurse returned to the hospital building. As they drew close, Vamprina spotted a familiar-looking individual lying by some plants in front of the hospital.

“Ethernu!” Vamprina cried.

She rushed to his side, but he, like all the others, was dead. Vamprina knelt there for a while, thinking hard. No…there had to be a way to fix all this. There was only one being in the world that could save everyone now.

“Seraph…” Vamprina whispered. “Seraph, we need you…”

Vamprina…

The voice rushed through her mind like a soothing wind, making her feel comforted despite the situation.

Vamprina. I am here.

The rain stopped as if it had been switched off, and the clouds cleared to reveal the blue of the sky above. The nurse was on her knees again; her face peaceful, her eyes full of wonder. She stared skyward, and a small smile lit up her expression. Vamprina rose to her feet, jabbing her wing at the bodies before her.

“Look Seraph.” Vamprina snarled, a single tear falling from her left eye. “Look what your brother did.”

When Seraph spoke again, his words were hushed with sadness.

I see it, he replied. I see it all.

“Can you…do anything about it?”

It will be difficult, but since this is my brother’s doing…I may be able to reverse all that he’s done.

“Thank you.”

Vamprina waited, and then suddenly the bodies around her began to revive, rainbow-colored light swirling around them. The nurse did not seem to notice. She was still on her knees with the same expression. Vamprina frowned.

She’s alright, Seraph replied. I’m just distracting her with happy memories right now. She’ll never remember this terror once I’m finished.

Vamprina nodded respectfully. “That’s useful.”

Indeed.

Soon everyone in sight was in the same position as the nurse, seemingly having the times of their lives…given their blissful expressions. They’d never remember this terrible incident. What a relief for them.

Smiling, Vamprina turned to Ethernu…but was shocked to find him in the same position. The blood around his body was gone, but he had the same lifeless look as ever.

“Hey…” Vamprina started, a chill going down her spine. “…what about him?”

I cannot bring him back Vamprina. This has taken so much out of me.

“What do you mean?” the assassin sputtered, her voice rising to a frantic pitch. “You can create entire worlds! How can you not raise at least one more life?”

This world is not mine. I am weaker here than on one of my worlds.

“What does that mean?”

To raise him I need another life force, but the only eligible one would be the one from the core of this planet. I cannot sacrifice the core for a single individual. All those I’ve revived will perish, and my act would have been for nothing.

“So you’re saying it’s impossible to raise him?”

I’m sorry.

Vamprina slammed her talon into the ground, her eyes blazing.

“He didn’t deserve any of this!”

None of them did.

“Then I’ll die. Take my life and give it to him!”

There was a long silence. The assassin looked around. For a moment, Vamprina was afraid Seraph had left her, but then his voice came again…soft this time.

You’re willing to do this?

“Yes.”

Once it’s done you can’t come back.

“I know, so get on with it before I have second thoughts.”

I…don’t know if I should.

Vamprina rolled her eyes, and then started at the sound of a new voice. Its tone was feminine, and very familiar for some reason.

Just do it Seraph. It’s what she wants.

Cassandra. The Author was here. This was going to be interesting.

Cassandra…are you really allowing this?

I have something really big planned for her. And she can get all the revenge she ever wants on Sevientorr.

At the word ‘revenge’, Vamprina’s ears pricked up and she began to smile again.

“Cassie…” she giggled, suddenly feeling a lot better. “…do you really mean it?”

You’d like nothing better and I know it.

Vamprina knelt down by Ethernu, grinning. She barely knew him, but he deserved to live more than she did. Besides, she’d lived long enough. And her wing was gone, so she was probably maimed for life anyway. Not being able to fly was a huge disadvantage and it meant one of her main weapons was gone.

“Cass…do I get my wing back?” the assassin asked.

A laugh made its way into Vamprina’s ears.

Sure you do. No use in Sevientorr laughing himself to death at the sight of you anyways…right?

Now it was Vamprina’s turn to laugh. Millions of ideas surged through her mind, most of them involving the number of ways she was going to destroy Sevientorr.

Alright girls, enough chit-chat, Seraph cut in. I can’t leave these people in this state for too long or they’ll get side effects of huge dizziness when they wake.

Vamprina nodded, and then a blaze of rainbow light swirled around her. She glanced at Ethernu one more time, and a smile stretched across her face.

“You have no idea how lucky you are.” she told him, and then she burst into a spray of blazing light particles.

The light surged towards Ethernu, swirling around him until finally entering with a flash of prismatic fire.

Ethernu awoke with a gasp, feeling as though he’d woken from a dream. A dream that had him falling with no end in sight. He shook his head, and then looked around, realizing he was sitting in front of the wRHG recovery center. He got up quickly, brushing himself off and ignoring the stares of passerby.

The interesting thing was that everybody seemed to be getting up like him, like they had been waking from something too. He frowned. What had happened? Ethernu spotted a very confused-looking nurse standing off to the side, looking up at the sky so intently that he almost looked too, as though there was some important message written in the clouds.

“Hello? Hey, uh, nurse?”

She looked at him, blinking a little. Being outside the hospital must have rattled her a bit. What had she been doing out here in the first place anyways?

“May I help you?” she asked automatically.

“What happened here?”

The nurse looked around, a genuinely puzzled expression on her face.

“I…I don’t remember.” she replied.

Ethernu turned away and began to leave, but then he had a sudden thought. He ran after the nurse, grabbing her arm to get her attention (just in case she was still absent-minded).

She turned to him, stiff and slightly irritated.

“Yes, young man?” she responded, her voice edged with a touch of sharpness.

“Vamprina…” Ethernu told her, the name tumbling from his lips. “…is she alright? I wanted to say goodbye!”

At this the nurse’s gaze grew distant, and then she shook her head.

“She’s not here anymore.” was the response. “She’s gone.”


***

Vamprina watched as Ethernu walked right past her, his face twisted with confusion. Vamprina looked down at herself, noting the smoky haze drifting off of her body. He couldn’t see her. No one could see her, because Seraph had hidden her from everybody’s eyes. Great.

For a moment she considered appearing to Ethernu sometime, but then decided it probably would be better if she didn’t. It wouldn’t be easy for Ethernu to live with the thought that he’d changed her life forever, especially if she had to explain how the world had actually been at a literal end just a couple minutes ago.

“So I’m my shadow now?” Vamprina asked, knowing the two were still listening in.

Yes, Cassandra answered. And I’ve made sure Sevientorr can’t kill you.

“Hah! He’ll never know what hit him!”

You won’t be able to kill him Vamprina, Seraph told her. Not in that form.

“Huh?” the assassin responded, bewildered. “Then what did I let you guys talk me into this for?”

Technically it was your decision to sacrifice yourself. Not ours.

“Yeah but…”

No worries Vamprina. You can’t kill him because that would just upset all the timelines I’ve set from here on.

“But what about my revenge?”

Well…you’re a shadow now. So what can a shadow do?

Vamprina paused for a moment, and then a smile began to spread across her face.

“Well, I can command shadows to kill, conceal, and assume different forms. The shadows will always protect me because this was what I was born with. I’ll be a shadow to rule all shadows…I like the sound of this.”

Anything else?

“Oh yes. I can either command shadows to kill their owners, or to protect them. This will be a huge help if lots of people need a little extra defense if those worm creatures ever come back.”

You’ll be the infinite thorn in his side. He won’t like it one bit. You alone will be one of the biggest disruptions to his plans, FOREVER.

Now Vamprina was laughing. “Only you could think of that Cass! Only you!”

You’re exactly right.

There was a short silence as Vamprina reflected on her new life. Then a confused look passed over her face and she narrowed her eyes a little.

“What did Sevientorr want with my wing exactly?” she asked, kind of muttering half to herself and half to her listeners.

Seraph sighed before responding. Well, he always wanted to find a way to destroy my work. He figured that if he took your wing, he could figure out how I put things together. Knowing that, Sevientorr will soon learn how to pull things apart.

“Ewww. How did he get like that?”

It’s a very long story.

That’s mostly my fault, but readers have to know the origins of my most integral characters to all my stories.

“Does Sevientorr’s particular backstory involve lots of discussion about his weaknesses?”

Hang on; we’re not getting that far yet Vamprina. We’ll discuss your new role first. Also I don’t want you trying to exploit any of those anytime soon. It will take a lot of time to explain everything. Oh, and I won’t reveal everything about Sevientorr. He has to have some secrets he can keep to himself.

“Right…I forgot who I was talking to for a minute there…”

It’s alright.

There was a short silence.

So…are we done here? Seraph asked. Can we go?

Seraph…we can go. Vamprina can leave anytime she wants.

Very well.

And just like that, Vamprina felt very alone, but much happier than she had ever been in her life. Finally she was going to get back at Sevientorr for destroying her planet, for almost killing her brother, and for just being annoyingly evil. He was going to regret everything.

She was going to make him regret everything.

Vamprina shot into the sky, blazing through the atmosphere like a streak of night.

Down below, Ethernu’s head shot up as if acting on a separate instinct. He looked up at the clouds, not knowing what to expect. He saw nothing, and then resumed walking. But somehow…deep inside…he knew he was never going to see Vamprina again.

AUTHOR'S NOTE: Yes, so now here we have the "end" of Vamprina. She will still appear in some of my stories, but not as prominently as before. Additionally, Seraph is the ultimate creator of all the good things and some planets I've made up. Sevientorr is Seraph's brother, and the source of any and all misfortunes and evil things that have happened to my characters so far. I have a new wRHG all lined up, and I think this one will be permanent (although I've said that before and it usually doesn't end up that way :D).


Sorry...the first post was not in poll form. This is the real one. CNC is truly appreciated (yes Crank, I'm looking right at you! :D).

Vern
06-18-2016, 05:45 PM
Cassandra, just in light of your other failed thread ; You can easily attach polls to your post (if you're the OP) by pressing "thread tools" in the upper left corner of the first post. It should give you the option to attach polls.

Also, it'd be nice if you could connect names with the written pieces, because right now I could only guess at who to vote for.

I'd give you some CnC but I'm quite too occupied until Thursday, so don't expect it anytime sooner.

Cassandra
06-19-2016, 02:29 AM
Noted. Thanks Vern!

Sharpiro
06-20-2016, 09:33 PM
Oh my god. Welp, I think I know who won. Man I really need to step up my game. Cass, your story was so beautiful and heart compelling, you did such a good job! :D
PS: yeah. Cassandra, Ethernu doesn't have the ability to morph his weapon into a grapple gun yet. It was not added to the morph list yet. I'll let this time fly but if we ever have a rematch, please look more carefully at the morph list. I know I said I wanted him to use a grapple gun and you probably misunderstood, it was my fault, so sorry. Also, WHY ARE YOU GETTING RID OF VAMPRINA I THOUGHT SHE WAS YOUR PERMA WRHG! ok sharp, relax...

Crank
06-22-2016, 11:10 AM
Ahite, here we go!


First off is something everyone gets told pretty often, but watch for repeating the same words too soon. It creates a repetitious vibe that chips at the flow of your story.

Ever since the other people in the building left, he had tried to claim it as a refugee, but the creature had been guarding it. He knew he had been spotted when he had came to the vacant building. He saw it hiss and swoop up gracefully in the air, It sweeped the night air, majestically and terrifyingly.

Ever since the other people in the building left, he had tried to claim it as a refugee, but the creature had been guarding it. He knew he had been spotted when he had came to the vacant house. He saw it hiss and swoop up gracefully in the air, it swept the night sky, majestically and terrifyingly.

This next thing might be a bit of a personal preference, but if you can't comfortably introduce a character's name, you don't need to use it. I've always viewed it as if I'm going to get mugged in the street, chances are low I'm going to find out his name is Jeremy. If you can make it work, by all means, but I'd rather not see a square peg crack a round hole.

“Well, well, well,” the creature started, “What do we have here?” Trembling, Ethernu tried to say something but his mouth remained unserviceable. “Well, before you die, I let you know my name is Vamprina.” The creature spread its wings and stared at Ethernu, looking as if she was ready to strike.

“Well, well, well,” the creature started, “What do we have here?” Trembling, Ethernu tried to say something but his mouth remained unserviceable. The creature spread its wings and stared at Ethernu, looking as if she was ready to strike.

Also, retrospectively, you could've broken that paragraph up, especially when Vamprina began talking since Ethernu already had that one.

Next off, try to avoid assuming your reader is entirely up to date. I read your guy for example, but I've built up a bit of rust since then, so 'Joy' doesn't actually mean a lot, but now that I've looked it up again, there still isn't much of a description. May want to add to that a little.

Ethernu, expecting such a move, morphed his blade into Joy.

Ethernu, expecting such a move, morphed his blade into Joy, the slick steel of the sword condensing as the hilt created a right-angle, slowly shifting into the shape of a handgun with a rather large bayonet.

Next off, especially when dealing with a fictional weapon type, make sure what it does is defined, damage wise.

She dodged the first three, but was hit by the other four. She panicked as she lost control of the air and smashed into the ground.

She dodged the first three, but was hit by the other four, each packing the heat of fireball and blasting with the impact of a professionally thrown baseball. She panicked as she lost control of the air and smashed into the ground.

He brought the pole-arm down with a tremendous force, wounding Vamprina badly.

I had to google zweihander, but is that right? If you're going to swing a massive sword and hit someone with 'tremendous force', how do they live? I can understand if you don't want to write gore, and I know I'm pretty guilty of having my characters survive fatal encounters, but being cool with such a blade slash might be pushing it a bit far. If it wasn't the edge she was struck with, that'd need to be defined as well since that's what would be assumed.

He swung the giant blade with a tremendous force, the flat side slamming into Vamprina, cracking ribs and sending her sprawling.

Next off, everything has pretty even attention. I don't want to call it flat because there's a lot of rise and fall, but nothing's really highlighted so to speak. If someone lands a good shot or turns the tide, really delve into the details there. Compared to the rest of what you had going, this felt like a bit of a rush job.

As it came back, it cut Vamprina’s face, and Ethernu walked quickly towards her. Once more he attacked and blocked but this time, he was more wiser and more skilled. He had learned from his mistakes during the battle. He fought flawlessly as the skilled person he was. Both exchanged heavy blows to each other and both fought with equal valor and skill. Vamprina swooped over him and grabbed him using her talons, she flew up high with the struggling human then dropped him. Ethernu screamed as he fell. He fell and broke his leg with a sickening crunch. Vamprina, take using his crippled leg to her advantage, turned invisible again, only this time, Ethernu was prepared. As he turned around, he swung the blade in the direction he turned. As the blade moved closer to the shadow creature, it morphed into a giant hammer. He broke one of Vamprina's wing and part of her rib cage. At this, she yelled in pain as her fell to the ground, crippled.

Go ahead and break it up, blow by blow, injury by injury. Let it build up the intensity it deserves, right now it feels like someone's holding the fast forward button on the final fight of an action movie.

Lastly, just a reiteration of something I loosely touched on, when a different person speaks, it makes a new paragraph.

Vamprina felt something, this person reminded her of someone… Perhaps Aiba? No...probably not. “Well, I think I’ll leave now.” Vamprina felt there was one question left unanswered. “Wait!” She called out. “Yes, Vamprina?” “Were you the person who was stalking me in the woods?” “No, I did observe you when you were guarding the building though.”

Vamprina felt something, this person reminded her of someone… Perhaps Aiba? No...probably not.

“Well, I think I’ll leave now.”

Vamprina felt there was one question left unanswered. “Wait!” She called out.

“Yes, Vamprina?”

“Were you the person who was stalking me in the woods?”

“No, I did observe you when you were guarding the building though.”

Lastly, is English a second language? Not trying to be rude or anything, but there were a few instances where you used the wrong word, such as sweeped instead of swept. I'd been amusing simple mistakes, if it is and you actually don't know, I'll make a point of pointing them out as well.

All in all though, a good first fight! Keep it up!



Just to open, you've made a lot of improvement since I last checked in! Great job!

Anyway, I want to start with the same note of not assuming your readers are exactly up to date with the characters, at least in terms of ability names. I know that when I'm fighting someone I know their guy pretty in and out, but chances are my reader doesn't.

In all fairness, you do define it as 'a ranged weapon of sorts' soon after, but it leaves your reader with a 'huh' feeling for a bit long. I know it isn't defined on the profile, but you can still ask or even wing it when it comes to that.

Ethernu morphed his blade into Joy, and Vamprina let go immediately, suspicious. Okay, so he could turn his blade into things. Interesting. Vamprina landed a safe distance away, eyeing the weapon. It seemed to be a ranged weapon of sorts. Not good.

Ethernu's blade quickly began reshaping like a liquid pouring into a new container, and Vamprina let go immediately, suspicious. Okay, so he could turn his blade into things. Interesting. Vamprina landed a safe distance away, eyeing the weapon as it took shape. It seemed to be a ranged weapon of sorts, loosely resembling a rifle. Not good.

Similarly, the assumed projectile from a gun is a bullet, so without the proper context of a laser beam, her testing its range is a bit of an odd concept.

Next up, I'm going to give you the same note I gave Sharpiro, when you have a major turning point, make sure to give it the attention it deserves. When Vamprina loses her wing it feels a little neglected.

Ethernu tensed, but Vamprina vanished just before crashing into him. He turned his weapon back into the Morph Blade and made a quick estimation before swinging it in a wide circle. A screech met his ears and he turned quickly towards its source, ready to swing again.

To his astonishment, Vamprina sprawled before him, a pool of blood expanding beneath her. At his feet lay her left wing, severed perfectly from the shoulder down. The assassin spat blood, heaving herself into a position where she faced her foe.

Ethernu tensed, but Vamprina vanished just before crashing into him. He turned his weapon back into the Morph Blade and made a quick estimation before swinging it in a wide circle. Although the slash was smooth, there was a brief moment of quickly severed resistance, paired with the horrific screech it left and wet spray that collided with his cheek. Appalled at what he could've done and afraid of the rage he may have unleashed with the action, he quickly towards its source, ready to swing again.

To his astonishment, Vamprina sprawled before him, the wrath in her eyes made all the more horrific by all the red she was kneeling in. Spluttering from her shoulder where her wing once was, a pool of blood was expanding beneath her, entire body quivering in wake the injury. Trembling himself as he felt his shoes dampen, Ethernu slowly gazed down to the earth. At his feet lay her left wing, severed perfectly from the shoulder down. The assassin spat blood, heaving herself into a position where she faced her foe.

On a similar note, I would've liked to see his downfall dragged out a bit as well. Vamprina just got terrifying, showcase it!

Next, highlight major discoveries too. Everyone being dead would be a pretty horrific sight, but without much attention the reaction you'll get might be a bit more reserved than what you're looking for.

Behind them, Vamprina could see the broken bodies of some of the hospital staff, horror frozen onto their dead faces.

Behind them, Vamprina could see the broken bodies of some of the hospital staff, white walls now forever stained red with horror frozen onto what remained of their faces. Insides littered the floor like toppled garbage cans and she couldn't see a joint unbroken, most of which exposing bone.

Same deal with getting crappy news. I would've liked to see a bit more emotion when Vamprina leaned she was half of the people alive, and then her feelings focused on again when was willing to sacrifice herself for Ethernu.

Final note, and backing up to the explosive runes in the battle, if you're going to introduce something major like that, make sure you make use of it. Just kinda showing it is like when you watch a movie trailer, get excited over a specific thing and then find out it never made it into the final cut.

All in all though, really nice job!

Sharpiro
06-23-2016, 07:29 AM
yeah, English is my second language but I lived all my life near English speaking people. I'm a fluent speaker and writer but occasionally I let something slip so, sorry.

Crank
06-23-2016, 02:12 PM
Oh no, don't apologize! As I said, ya did really well, I just didn't know if those types of things were simple mistakes or you would want help ironing them out