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    Boomerangtang Boomerang's Avatar
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    Jett The Great

    Jefferey "Jett" Hamilton
    This will be the first and only time you'll ever see his real name.

    Spoiler for Appearance::


    Spoiler for Personality:


    Spoiler for Abilities:


    Spoiler for Weaknesses:


    Spoiler for Backstory:


    Spoiler for Demo:


    Spoiler for Battles:


    W/L/D/F
    0/0/0/0

    Open for Business!

    EDIT: Sword is taken out and a weakness added
    Last edited by Boomerang; 05-05-2017 at 01:53 PM.

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    Cool, That is all I can really say.

    Cnc Coming soon
    Availability : Come get me when your ready.



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    Might want to be careful with the teleconetic deal. If you can lob people effortlessly, that doesn't leave much room to work with.

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    I considered leaving it to where he couldn't lift up people but thought that just wouldn't be logical. It's the only part that's really up in the air for me--Ha.

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    Telekinesis huh? Well consider me hooked for a critique now ;

    Spoiler for Big CnC:

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    Can I just say I really dig that people CnC characters now? When I did wRHG before I never got these thoughtful critiques.

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    I like you, Boomerang. So I'll be straight.

    "Pain Tolerance" Yeah that's fairly balanced. Good ability, enhances some human traits right there.

    "Telekinesis" that is gonna be fuckin' OP quick as a shit unless you balance it out with limitations and a weakness.

    "Sword" He can summon it out of nowhere? Jesus Christ no. Not this lazy-ass cheap thing. It's a tool, let it weigh you down, let it limit itself by being something you gotta pick up. It's bad enough your mind powers let it just fly back into your hand.

    "Human" Weakness. I am touchy about this. You see, "Human" is what you have as a Race, not a weakness. You don't have it as a strength so I guess you forfeit adaptability, intelligence, adrenaline, stamina?

    "Mercy" The most overdone cliché thing ever. Why give the guy a sword if he's not gonna use it for its intended purpose.


    In the end, you have a good ability, an overpowered ability, and a weakness that pertains only to the good ability. And a sword you can grab outta arsefornicate neverplace, and you don't even mention it in the backstory.


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