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Thread: Dark Dreams

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    No ordinary girl... Cassandra's Avatar
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    Dark Dreams

    Darkness creeps where light cannot,
    My inner wars are all for naught,
    Sleeping beasts now awake,
    Suffering I cannot take,
    Round and round my mind it goes,
    Through my soul the feeling flows,
    The night falls...I cannot see,
    Where this nightmare is taking me.

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    While I was reading it I could really feel the misery of the poem itself.
    I liked it.

    Now a suggestion, what about making the poem more personal? Like saying "My inner wars" instead of making it "inner wars"?
    Luther (Rochedan) Wright

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    A man chooses, a slave obeys

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