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Oct 12, 2016 10:21 PM #1464095
C'MON MODS! HIT ME WITH YOUR BEST SHOT! I NEED THIS THREAD BINNED QUICK!
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Oct 12, 2016 11:13 PM #1464102
My only concern is the containment of the guns. Purely based off the size of a beretta, I can't help but wonder how they fit in his arm, especially the forearm.
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Oct 12, 2016 11:25 PM #1464103
Fixed it, made the Beretta's start out in two pieces each. If you still can't imagine them fitting in there, just imagine Riley has decently thick forearms.
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Oct 13, 2016 12:40 AM #1464109
Hm, with the name of the character being an epithet I was hoping for something more intriguing.
Regardless, I'd say overall a decent character. Although, I would place the weaknesses section beneath abilities as opposed to it being under personalities.
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Oct 13, 2016 12:56 PM #1464138
First, surprised not to find someone undead after reading that title, but great job. I really, really like the char (although I'm getting images of Winter Soldier here...)

Secondly, I need to focus on getting more sleep because after misreading Doom's new char as "Smurfka," I have now misread yours as Riley Adam Sandler.

Thirdly, I think you want to upgrade that strength. Any man who performs regular strength training can, with appropriate technique, knock out a normal person with one punch. If you know how and where to hit, it's not that hard. My father was a sniper for the Army Rangers, and taught me that there is one type of punch taught to specialists (like CIA field operatives) called the reverse punch. It takes tons of practice to get right (neither me nor my father can do it just right) but when done properly by a man of average build it can crush ribs, tear muscle, and generally do a butt-ton of damage. Honestly, with your enhancements, I see Riley being able to fracture or even crush skulls with a single punch, not just knock people out -- he would be holding himself back to do that.

Fourthly, congrats on compacting this char into a very concise page. As you can see on my char page, this is not something I am capable of doing yet...

Lastly, could you explain why the eye has trouble with fast moving targets? I know of several military tracking devices (such as the visual aiming device used by pilots in Apache Helos) that can follow the movement of aircraft or even missiles.


P.S. -- Yes, Vern, I left my mark here too. Why? 1) If you're on forums, you post, unless you want to spend half your time lurking. 2) Hell, it's my job to look at projects, review them, and then tell people how they're doing and why. It appears Malacal and Crank have done the same on the last several char sheets I've seen, btw.
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Oct 13, 2016 1:33 PM #1464145
Glad to see him up! Can't name many characters with living family, so I look forward to seeing what you do with that!

And his name is Malical, Alph. God, get it right.
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Oct 13, 2016 3:13 PM #1464153
Quote from Alphaeus

Lastly, could you explain why the eye has trouble with fast moving targets? I know of several military tracking devices (such as the visual aiming device used by pilots in Apache Helos) that can follow the movement of aircraft or even missiles.


The eye is able to keep track of stuff that stay within his vision and or peripheral vision, but as soon the thing can't get a read on the target, Riley essentially just has to rely on his instincts. And guys, seriously, the title makes sense if you read his story, he should've died in that one assignment, but he was instead given a new life.
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Oct 13, 2016 3:36 PM #1464157
These past comments have been fucking hilarious. Also, I like how the man with the steel "We can rebuild him" arm can just about knock out a human. The way Alph described it, a "reverse punch" would be able to cause several major organs to rupture. Also, you gonna need REAL thick forearms for that m8. or you could have them go up the arm or something. Also Crank is right. Living family on a main char?
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As well as this, what IS wrong wih TDMW? perfectly good title. But then I am a sukka for those.
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Oct 13, 2016 3:49 PM #1464160
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As well as this, what IS wrong wih TDMW? perfectly good title. But then I am a sukka for those.

What the heck is that supposed to mean? Was that a stab at his awesome title? Whatever, his sidearms start in two pieces in his arms, and let's just assume he has decently thick forearms. And what do you mean by sliding up his arm? Care to explain?
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Oct 13, 2016 4:41 PM #1464163
It was the OPPOSITE of a dig at his title. I was asking everyone else why they are mad bruh.
Also, I mean, you put one beretta above the other, like one in the tricep, one in the bicep. (so you can have guns in your guns)
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Oct 13, 2016 5:08 PM #1464165
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It was the OPPOSITE of a dig at his title. I was asking everyone else why they are mad bruh.
Also, I mean, you put one beretta above the other, like one in the tricep, one in the bicep. (so you can have guns in your guns)


God, that just made my day. Yeah, I don't know why everyone is getting their pants in a bunch over his title. Assumption I guess. And that's a good idea. I'll make an edit.
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Oct 13, 2016 10:26 PM #1464188
An arm and an eye? He didn't even lose a leg. Hardly dead.
Meh, it was sort of one of those things where once I got done reading the character I thought "This guy isn't the Undertaker."
There's nothing wrong with it though. Anyways, have fun doing your thing :P
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Oct 14, 2016 1:32 AM #1464198
Well, I might suggest using his name as the lead-in for the char sheet, and introducing the title later. Because Riley seems like the kind of guy (not having read his demo because...time) that would just go by his name or maybe a code name for an op.

And while I get the name now that you explained it (I played a game once where I did a special quest to win an item set and powers dubbed "Death's Hand" that had the same principles), using as the title for the thread probably leads just about everyone to believe their getting some kind of undead or death-ish char.

So, to shorten my words -- I get it now, and I'm cool with it too. Just think using it first is just a bit less efficient and slightly misleading.
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Oct 15, 2016 1:18 AM #1464257
Eh, I'm Crank because it rhymes with Spank, which was led in with Spaniel because I'm Daniel, not because I'm the king of levers. Ya don't get to pick your nicknames, I think it works fine.
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Nov 1, 2016 10:15 PM #1465615
Oh look, an UPDATE!

- Added two weapons to Riley's arsenal.
- Polished up Physical Abilities and Weapons.

Also, since you guys will probably see this post, does anybody want to battle? Cause I do... I'm free this week and got nothing better to do.
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