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You very well know my stance on CnC, Error.

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You did not vote D:

Fixed it.

PS: WHAT I VOTED FOR ALPH (no offence, yours was better than if I wrote anything, EB) hnghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

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Y U NO VOTE, CHROME?

Anyways, I'm sure both of us would like some CnC. So please throw words that destroy and build at us.

Hoping to get through reading (and vote) before the poll closes tomorrow. CnC will have to come after, if at all. Has it really been a week already?

Both battles were written really well and I don't have much to add on either. Error's was pretty long, but it build a lot between the characters and added depth to his heroine, so that's fine. The battle was choreographed very well, and despite personally having a Mr. Serious at the moment, ending on a joke is a fantastic way of winning me over!

Alph, I think you're doing a lot of creative experimentation, but I'm not super sure battles are the place to do it. The flow was there, characterization was there, but... I don't know, man. It's kinda like for the past couple battles, you haven't been putting your characters in any real danger. With George, David seemed off sight just setting up the dominoes to descend him into madness, and here, she's drugged on sight by Al, bound when she meets David, unbound with David and then there's David again perfectly fine after she stabs the first one. You say outright that she's an assassin to kill him, so bias is against her (your protagonist, not bashing, just the way it is), but when Party A is in no danger and doesn't want to kill Party B, there's not a whole lot of... tensity? that can come of it. I don't know man, I feel like there weren't really stakes here.

Maybe that's just me.

Great job though, you guys!

I have a question. How does one make a poll for one of these?

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I have a question. How does one make a poll for one of these?

Just above the first post in each page is a grey bar with tabs on it. The thread creator, and only the creator, can start a poll by accessing a poll in "Thread tools" and making a poll. Here we generally select the option to make all votes public and we usually do not allow you to vote multiple times.

Thanks me and Charm just had a small battle and I kinda wanted to know how to post battles.

I checked the forum tools in the grey bar but it didn't have the poll choice in it?

I voted Error. Hot and Cold just reads like a breath of fresh air,
at least in a world where like breathing air can like,
y'know
read

y'know?


EDIT: Seriously though, they were both nice.

Alright.

Sooo....point taken.

I've been so focused on canon and character development I've lost the idea of a battle.

Fortunately, I wrote my upcoming battle with LeeLee was written before this spurt by me.

Truthfully, I think part of the issue here is that I'm simultaneously working with my editor on my book, so I'm in a more "long-term literature" style mind-set than a "wRHG battle" mindset.

That "round" of editing is nearly finished, so I'll be refocusing. I think part of it was also that I lost sight of David's actual...well...combat ability.

I love Miggles' (read: EB's) representation of David in her battle, and that's the David I want to get back to. I've been over-emphasizing Nehushtan as a plot driver and under-emphasizing my characters themselves.

Thanks for the CnC, Crank -- that was insightful and helpful!