Name:
Viola

Age:
14

Gender:
Female

Appearance:
A purple girl with charcoal black hair in a ponytail. Her eyes are a chocolate brown but glows a bright pink when she uses her powers.

Personality:
She's nice and quirky, very cheerful, kind and full of energy. She can get a bit upset if you make her drop her toast, though, but she's trying to be more calm when that happens.

Power/Abilities:
Viola uses three main abilities, a defense ability, a strike attack, and a ranged attack. Her defense ability is when she summons a pink bubble (which acts like a shield) to deflect an attack, she can also spread the bubble out to knock her opponent away. Her strike attack is when her fist or any part of her limbs glows pink, she can use this attack in some ways (for example: punching and kicking), she could also use this ability to deflect something up close if she were to make her entire arm to glow. Viola's ranged attack is when she creates an orb of pink energy and throws it at her opponent, but if she were to charge it longer then she could fire a beam of pink at her adversary instead of an or, which is less stronger. Viola can summon weapons, but that deactivates one of her abilities until the end of the battle (for example: if she were to summon a sword then her strike attack will no longer work), but if she were to summon two weapons, two of her abilities will be deactivated.. She does have a special ability where she can make herself glow pink and be invincible for a short period of time, but this ability deactivated all her powers for a certain period of time, so she only uses this ability when she ABSOLUTE HAS TO. Viola can dodge well and keeps her guard up most of the time but she gets more tired and slower if she uses too much energy in her attacks.

Weakness:
Viola is extremely vulnerable after using her special ability and sometimes forgets that one of her abilities are deactivated when she summons a weapon. She also gets more slower and tired the stronger her attacks are. Viola can be distracted easily sometimes and she will normally strike up a conversation during battle, which is distracting. She will spare you after battle and this is normally the time where she puts down her guard. Her guard is also lowered when she is critically injured, exhausted, or abstracted. Viola normally doesn't attack first until she is attacked, but she will out of rage if you managed to make her angry.

Backstory:
Her parents left her and her brother when they were younger, leaving her brother to take care of Viola. After helping her brother retrieve some artifacts from a cave he was sent to, she unwittingly held a stone tablet with words that are unknown to her. Unbeknownst to Viola, she was given a mysterious power which she discovers weeks after when she defends a boy who was being harassed by a group of people. Viola is then inspired to become an RHG.

Demo:

Viola stood yards away from her brother, Ranger, who was loading his two revolvers. "You sure you want to do this now?" He asked. Viola nodded excitedly, thrilled her brother will be sparring with her today.
They were located in a wide clearing surrounded by a dense forest. In the far distance, Viola and Ranger could hear the faint chirp of birds. Ranger's obsidian black sword was sheathed behind his back and gleamed in the sunlight as he fiddled with his revolvers. The grass crunched under Viola's feet as she tapped her foot impatiently. "Are you almost done?" She asked after a moment, too excited to wait. "Yeah, just making sure it's working." Ranger answered. He aimed at the sky and pulled down on the trigger.
BANG!
"Great." Ranger said to himself, "It works." He looked up at his sister who had her eyes focused on a small butterfly that fluttered nearby. "You ready?" Ranger asked, Viola snapped out of her thoughts and realized her brother was done. "Born ready!" She said smiling as she raised her fists and dropped into a battle stance. Ranger smirked, "Good."
His hand flew to his revolver and aimed it at Viola, instantly pulling the trigger. Luckily for Viola, she knew what was coming and dodged the bullet, her now glowing pink eyes trained on her brother. An orb appeared in her hand and she flung it at Ranger who unsheathed his sword and deflected it with ease.
He smirked as his sister charged at him, her fist glowing pink. He brought up his blade just as Viola striked at him, a smile on her face. Ranger smiled too before slashing his sword away, jumping backwards as he brought up his gun and fired at her again.
Viola's arm glowed pink and she brought it up in front of her face to deflect the bullet. Just as she lowered her arm Ranger jumped forward and knocked her aside with the flat of his sword. Viola flew back and landed hard on the ground. "Bleh!" She spit out some dirt that got in her mouth. From a few feet away, Ranger chuckled, his sister shooting him an annoyed look as he laughed.
Seeing this as a perfect chance to attack Viola charged an orb in her hand and fired a beam of pink at her laughing brother. But to her dismay, Ranger was expecting this. He jumped to the side just as the beam blasted the spot where he once stood chuckling.
Ranger smiled and brought up his other revolver, firing at his sister. Viola managed to summon a bubble of pink around her, deflecting the bullets.
"Nice try!" Ranger said with a smug face. "But you can do be--HOLY SHI--!" Ranger ducked as a sword flew above his head.
The pink blade disintegrated in glowing petals and reappeared in Viola's hand. Ranger smiled in a shocked way, "You little--WHOA!" Ranger barely managed to jump to the side as an orb of energy flew by.
"Enough talk! Can we end this already!?" Viola shouted from afar.
Ranger shrugged, "Well, you asked for it!" He drew his sword and charged at his sister, Viola doing the same, her weapon raised.
CLANG!
Their blades met, sparks showering onto the ground. Viola smiled mischievously before pushing Ranger backwards with all her might and sweeping her feet under his legs, sending him off balance.
Ranger landed on the ground hard, but before he could get up Viola aimed the tip if her sword at him. A few seconds went by before Viola let her sword disentigrate away. Viola held out an hand to her brother who gladly took it, pulling himself to his feet. She smiled, thrilled that she had won. Ranger could only smirk.
"So! I won!" Viola tried to say casually. Ranger raised a brow, "Okay?" His sister clasped her hands together, "And I was kinda wondering..."
"Wondering what?"
"That the loser... would by the winner some food as a reward?" Viola said quickly.
Ranger looked at her as if saying Really?, but after a second, he considered before finally saying, "Okay, fine." Viola jumped with ecstasy, "Yay!" She cheered.

And so, the two siblings went. Off to go buy a bunch of sweets and junk food.







Thanks for reading! :3

Oh, you're here also! Well, from the looks of it, this character just needs some tinkering before she's ready(since you were rushed and all) One problem that I see are the weaknesses she has. First, she let's her guard down after a battle, well this can only be applied if your opponents character is devious and has no sense of honor, otherwise this isn't really that much of a weakness. Second, too loyal to her friends, especially her brother, I'm a bit confused in this one so I'll just leave it to someone else. After that, you just need to make your characters back story more interesting, explaining her past to us in a more detailed way, and expand your Demo! Over all, this characters has potential and I s\y good luck to you!

So.....

First, Hi, and welcome to SP and the wRHG!

Now for the CnC:

This character needs more depth on all levels. And more structure to the char page (use bold headings, spoilers -- [spoilers=title here]**insert stuff**[/spoiler} -- except use a ] instead of the }, and some form of listing system).

Secondly, the idea of your enhancing powers is fine, but you need to focus on just a few (read: about Three) things you want to enhance. Right now your power enhances EVERYTHING and turns your char into an extreme "toolbox."

Toolboxing (as defined by the glorious golden waffle) occurs when a character's abilities are waaaaayyyy too broad or numerous, resulting in having a perfect counter for EVERYTHING.....

Trim it down to just, say, speed and blocking or something like that.

Weaknesses...like Fellowman said, you have literally no weaknesses. In the weakness section you can put personality stuff like you have (oh, she loses focus/is easy to take advantage of, cares a lot about friends, etc.) but what you NEED to have there are the literal downsides of her abilities.

I.E. -- when she uses her abilities, she becomes extremely tired quite fast; her pink eyes make her color blind and have poor night vision; etc. Literal weaknesses. Something any opponent at all could take advantage of.

To determine weaknesses, I like to use mentally what I call "Random Fat Guy with a Stick" testing. Pretty much, if some random fat dude with a stick couldn't take advantage of at least one of your char's weaknesses, you need to give "better" weaknesses.

I'll just say put the spoiler tags on it and tinker with her power just a tad and you are golden.