Eve Lumafio

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Jan 16, 2017 4:09 AM #1473477
- Name: Eve Lumafio
- (Abilities)
Abilities (Click to Show)

- (Weaknesses)
Weaknesses (Click to Show)

- (Personality)
Persona (Click to Show)

- (Appearance)
Appearance (Click to Show)

(Story.)
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- (Demo.)
Demo (Click to Show)


- Battles finished: 0 (thus far)
- Points: 0 around the board (thus far)
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Jan 16, 2017 4:26 AM #1473478
ivory as in BONE. can she control a skeleton or just specifically animal tusks?
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Jan 16, 2017 5:07 AM #1473485
She doesn't control bones, just the stuff they're made out of.
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Jan 16, 2017 5:08 AM #1473486
Oh neat! You made a gal! I think you could use a bit more detail with the personality, but other than that, I assume the ivory she uses is taken away from her? Like shooting a pillar would make her smaller/hollow?

Either way, welcome to the Lounge!
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Jan 16, 2017 5:15 AM #1473487
Azuryz, I'm not going into depth on critique yet, but for now i'll just recommend sorting everything into spoilers to contain your information neater.
Like this (Click to Show)

Here's how. Copy and paste the follow two lines.
[Spoiler=Insert title here]Info goes here[/SpoilerThen replace the part that says "Insert title here" with the desired title, replace "info goes here" with the desired info, and then remove this entire red text.]
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Jan 16, 2017 5:24 AM #1473490
Thank you!

And reguarding the Ivory thing, what happens is it puts extreme stress on her. That's why after just 2 minor fights she was exhausted. Should she have done more she would have collapsed before the boss arrived and died on the spot.

((though I might add a few more tweaks to make her not so OP))
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Jan 16, 2017 5:28 AM #1473491
Quote from Azuryz
Thank you!

And reguarding the Ivory thing, what happens is it puts extreme stress on her. That's why after just 2 minor fights she was exhausted. Should she have done more she would have collapsed before the boss arrived and died on the spot.

((though I might add a few more tweaks to make her not so OP))


Two minor fights right? Before you tweak anything, I recommend comparing your gladiator to others to see how OP it is.
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Jan 16, 2017 5:29 AM #1473492
Your right. Thank you for the feedback!
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Jan 16, 2017 7:22 AM #1473503
Well it is better now. (Insert applause here)

Wanna battle sometime?
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Jan 16, 2017 12:34 PM #1473514
I'd love to! :D
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Jan 16, 2017 3:34 PM #1473534
By the way, everything is fairly short because it is rather difficult to elaborate on a character like Eve. She is, after all, very simple. I am fully aware of that, but to many people have extremely advanced characters. To me, she falls into a category known as "Simplistically Unique." And damn it I think its a category that needs more people.

then again I am a snickerdoodle
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Jan 16, 2017 7:35 PM #1473587
Your name is extremely similar to mine.

We are now enemies. Good day sir, I'll be coming for your head some time in the future.
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Jan 16, 2017 7:56 PM #1473589
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Your name is extremely similar to mine.

We are now enemies. Good day sir, I'll be coming for your head some time in the future.


Okay who saw this coming? I know I did. Sorry Azuryz but you are going to have it rough with Azure.

Edit : Azure please wait until we are done fighting then take Azuryz head as politely as possible.
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Jan 16, 2017 8:03 PM #1473591
Welp I tried warning you about Azure. Too late now. I'd love to see a battle between the two Azur's.
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Jan 16, 2017 8:19 PM #1473593
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Welp I tried warning you about Azure. Too late now. I'd love to see a battle between the two Azur's.


Not much we can do now. I just hope both come out unscathed.