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Jan 17, 2017 5:57 PM #1473755
Elias Coen


Elias is a field agent for Providence Los Angeles. Inspired by Film Noir and Spy Fiction.


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Jan 17, 2017 6:11 PM #1473756
Hey, looking forward to this Demo.

Excellent Work man!

Welcome to the Writer's Lounge!!
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Jan 17, 2017 9:15 PM #1473778
Thanks for the friendly welcome! Demo and availability will be soon.
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Jan 17, 2017 10:21 PM #1473782
I must say welcome the Stickpage!

On another note, are you the guy who approached me about Providence? Funny story, Alphaeus here convinced me not to scrap it. The truth is I'm more micro minded and even there, I handled the characters poorly. But I believe between you and Alpheaus can give it the depth it deserves.
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Apr 13, 2017 1:06 AM #1478771
Soon is relative.

- Added demo

- Added availiability

- Various edits to appearance and equipment

I'm afraid I still have to put him on hold since i'm leaving for a few days, but soon as I get back, the fun begins.

CnC is absolutely appreciated. Rip it to shreds, ladies and gentlemen.
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Apr 13, 2017 1:28 AM #1478772
Hey, good to see you didn't just up and die on us! :P

I'll be checking over the demo, and just re-reading the whole profile since I don't remember the original in detail.
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Apr 20, 2017 1:15 AM #1478997
I'm back from my trip! Elias is now available.

Bring it on.
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Apr 28, 2017 4:49 PM #1479222
I'm a bit late to the party, but I wanted to say that this is one of the best profiles I've seen and one of the characters I'm most excited to hopefully continue to see. You and that other Elias should totally fight BTW.
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Apr 28, 2017 5:12 PM #1479225
Thanks for the complement! Now if I can just write a decent story or two...
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Apr 28, 2017 9:18 PM #1479230
Quote from Brosephus
Thanks for the complement! Now if I can just write a decent story or two...


SAY WHAT?! Your demo is fine man! Just take your time on the stories and you'll do great!
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Nov 26, 2017 3:39 AM #1485936
UPDATE

Finally got some of the changes I want finished.

These changes range from tweaks to presentation to full retcons. I've decided to redo the handler character from scratch, giving him a new name, backstory and appearance. He's still not as fleshed out as I want him to be, but like I said earlier, I want to get something finished.

I also want to redo my demo. A future battle may become a new demo at some point, but for now I'm simple labeling it as outdated.

I'm back
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Nov 26, 2017 3:52 AM #1485937
Very good work overall. Glad you are here.

Just a few notes:

There are a couple places where your sentences just end while you

And then another place where you are writing and the. Which isn't good.
^^Aka, just do a quick proof-read to catch spots that do the above kind of statements.

Secondly, your marksmanship. Up that a bit. If you can't hit a human head at fifty feet, put down your gun. If he's even a halfway decent marksman, up this to a higher range notably.

Otherwise this char is simple, concise, and well thought through. Underpowered a bit IMO, but we'll see how this goes! Look forward to you being here.

Might want to whip up a battle with you ;)
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