He's 6'1, muscular, and ruggedly handsome...

No, not really. Jett, with his loveable smile, long blonde hair, and emerald eyes, could be considered a lady killer. It's the fact that he's 5'5" and not all that muscular that kind of takes away his whole 'gladiator' feel. His coolness factor is balanced a bit by the fact that he has a leather jacket, though.

Jett loves to laugh--even if there isn't anything to laugh about. He's always smiling and cheerful, even when he's criticizing his opponents, and especially when he's making puns about them. There are also times where Jett will look into the horizon or...talk to someone that isn't there. We don't judge him for that, though.

Pain Tolerance: Jett...doesn't feel pain. Like, at all. His arm could be severed and he'd be feeling just fine, even if he was bleeding out. This helps him to continue through fights despite awful injuries

Telekinesis: His most prized method of fighting, Jett has the ability to move most objects under fifty pounds with little to no effort. Anything more requires focus and time. He is also able to create large shockwaves around himself, blowing back any opposition.

Pain Tolerance: He can't feel anything, which sometimes means he doesn't know that he's gravely injured until it's too late and his body is shutting down.

Human: Jett is completely human. He has no thick skin and no immunities, which leaves him generally vulnerable to drowning, suffocating, or being made into a Jett-kebab, just to name a few.

Mercy: More an emotional weakness than anything else, Jett doesn't like to kill. If he can help it, he will provide mercy unless the person has angered him--an extreme rarity. He also might go easy on an opponent at first to make a better fight.

Telekinesis: Concentration is key when using this ability. Similar to how a person can harm themselves lifting weights, too much effort or unfocused use of his telekinesis for heavier objects could result in injury. Unlike weights, however, the injury would be directly in his brain, a much more fatal version of pulling a muscle. On the rare occasion that he's angered, he will typically throw caution to the wind and harm himself while throwing the heaviest objects possible.

So you want to know the story of The Great Jett, huh?
Who said you needed to know about i--Oh, the wRHG rules, okay.
Well firstly, there's no big story on Jett's powers. Like a low-level wizard who mastered in one profession, his telekinesis originated from birth. His childhood would have been pretty sucky, had it not been for his brother John. John and Jett's real parents didn't pay them any mind, and the neglection eventually ended with social services being called. John, old enough to apply to be a legal guardian, took Jett under his custody.
Being a teen with telekinetic powers was kind of a weird thing. His brother was the only one who knew, and took all precautions possible so that there wasn't any incidents. In his spare time Jett would practice, but otherwise he would work deligently in school and produce stellar grades. He wanted to be an engineer.
Eventually as most kids do, he began to fall in with the wrong crowd. Only with Jett, who was vulnerable from parents who didn't care enough to wish him a happy birthday and a rocky life with a brother who could barely hold down a job, he fell hard. Pills, drugs and alcohol followed him everywhere he went. His grades went in the gutter, and all he wanted was to party and stay out late. No matter what John did, he couldn't get through to Jett.
One night while out looking for Jett, John was held at gunpoint and then shot to death; Jett hasn't talked about him since. Dropping the addictions and parties he decided to find the person who killed his brother, but in the less conventional way of walking with a smile and cheer. Just as John would have wanted.

"Oh hey, you guys came!"

Two tall, muscular men sat uncomfortably in the seats of two chairs they barely fit in. At the center was an Amazonian-like woman, arms crossed with biceps bigger than her head. All three of them were battle ready, weapons placed next to their chairs. The woman huffed, impatient.

The man in front of them was at least a foot shorter and 100 pounds lighter. He grinned benevolently, a lock of blonde hair swaying in front of his face. He brushed it aside hastily, clapping his hands together, "And in full battle gear, too--that's just wonderful, it really is."

They were in a living room, with a roaring fireplace against the wall at the center of the space. There were a few coffee tables, a TV, and a window just behind the man's head, "My name is Jett--like the airplane, but with an extra T." He laughed at his own pun, "And I called you three here because you're the most muscular and scary people I could find in about an hour's notice."

The woman raised her eyebrow, and it looked as though even those had biceps, "And why would you want that?"

"Because I have a demo and I need to showcase my skills--that's what somebody told me, anyway. By the way, I'm sorry for what happens next--"

One of the males suddenly flew backwards out of their chair, smashing against the wall with enough force to send a splintering crack up to the ceiling. Jett stomped his foot into the ground, a block of wood uppercutting the other man. He tumbled backwards to the floor. The woman was up and charging him with her spear before he could do a cool telekinesis move on her. The upside was that he got to dodge around her spear, which showcased another one of his skills. He elegantly jumped on the head of the spear as the woman jabbed forward, launching himself off of it and over her head. The man who tried to stand up after falling out of his chair was dramatically dropkicked into the land of pain, where he would rest there for a while.

Sticking the landing, Jett grabbed an apple from the coffee table and threw it at the other lackey who, after splintering the wall, was now charging him. The apple hit with such speed that as it smashed and broke on the behemoth's temple, he passed out almost immediately.

"This is going well," Jett turned around, only to be tackled by the Amazon. She broke the coffee table in half in the process of smashing him into it, throwing her spear down inches into his abdomen. He looked down at the wound, and then up at her, "I almost wanna say ow and give you the satisfaction, but I think you need a little honesty in your life, Amazon lady."

The spear she was holding kicked upwards, the butt smacking her in the face. He then lifted her up a few feet with his telekinesis, initiating a shockwave that blew her back and through the window with a loud CRASH! Standing up and dusting himself off, Jett looked around his living room, "Good job on the demo," He told himself, "I just never put cleaning everything up into my plan."

None for now.

First things first, appearance and personality, no problems there, keep it up.

Now for powers, before we move on to telekinesis let me just quickly point something out

Mercy: More an emotional weakness than anything else, Jett doesn't like to kill. If he can help it, he will provide mercy unless the person has angered him--an extreme rarity. He also might go easy on an opponent at first to make a better fight.

Sword: His sword can be materialized at will, and is also extremely sharp to the touch. Whatever organic material his sword cuts through will start a process of decay--the larger the cut, the faster the decay process goes through the body/material.

I have always considered it odd, and made a point out of merciful characters using lethal weapons. It just doesn't make any sense. If your character isn't one for killing, and they know that, then why would they wield a weapon with a purpose the exact opposite of their intention? It's like a pacifist bringing a jagged, serrated knife to his fights to cause irreparable internal wounds that are guaranteed to kill off the foe from internal bleeding. If your character is merciful, it'd make much more sense for them to bring something like a staff or club; something you can knock someone out cold with and defend yourself with, but which can only really kill when used with such an intention.

One could argue that a sword can be used to incapacitate the foe in a non-lethal way, though I'd say that's defeating the purpose of a sword a bit and it just goes to show that this is something stapled on as opposed to an integral part of the character. Also, even if you were willing to buy all that, then why would this supposedly merciful character use a sword that causes the foe to literally start decomposing? It's a very odd choice indeed, and it either defeats the purpose of his mercy weakness, or defeats the purpose of the sword. Think about it.

(Also, another small tidbit ; The sword feels incredibly stapled onto the character just for fashion purposes. Nowhere does it really come up in the backstory, or any other part of the character, and it just makes it feel like it's there just for the author's sake of being there).

Human: Jett is completely human. He has no thick skin and no immunities, which leaves him generally vulnerable to drowning, suffocating, or being made into a Jett-kebab, just to name a few.

I will keep pointing this out for as long as I live but "human" isn't a weakness. I won't get into the nitty gritty of just 'why', if you want to know you can check it out Here, just scroll down to find my post. What it boils down to is that unless your character is superhuman or not a human at all, human weaknesses are something that come naturally with the character and shouldn't have to be mentioned. You mustn't worry about your character lacking in the weakness department by removing this, because weaknesses should only be directly proportional to the character's innate strength. If your character can bend fire like it's nothing, they're expected to have some major exploitable weakness to offset this. If your character's just good at fighting with a staff, however, they don't really need an Achilles heel.

Pain Tolerance: He can't feel anything, which sometimes means he doesn't know that he's gravely injured until it's too late and his body is shutting down.

Because I don't just want to barrage you with critiques and give you the feeling everything's shit, I feel I should point out that it was clever of you to observe the downsides of having such pain toleration. Good job.

Now, let's get to telepathy. Why do I care so much you may ask? Well, it's because I spent a lot of time dwelling on the subject when I made June. My conclusions were that telekinesis is pretty much one of the most inherently overpowered abilities around. As such, it must be properly balanced to prevent it from getting out of hand really fast.

The first problem we face with telekinesis is that it is basically everything-manipulation. Whereas some characters may have metal manipulation or earth manipulation as their primary ability, your character can do everything they do and more. One could argue that telekinesis only applies to tangible matter, but ultimately everything is tangible.

You want to be an airbender? Just use your telekinesis on a blank spot of air to move it forward over a short distance really fast and boom, you're air-bending. One could also argue that you could only affect objects as a whole and that prevents stuff like the previously mentioned airbending, but if you dwell on it, it really doesn't. For if you think about it, most objects simply consist of a whole lot of smaller objects. So would that mean that if one object is in contact with the other, the telekinetic would have to lift them both? If so, how would he be able to lift a little pistachio from atop a car, for example. In fact, if he wanted to lift anything at all, he'd essentially have to lift the entire world with his telekinetic powers, meaning that even if he were capable of it it'd still be entirely useless.

Now we get to the nasty stuff; If you have the power to apply force on any sort of matter at will, from any range, what's there to stop your character from literally exploding his opponent the second things start getting nasty for them? For example, a baddie is holding Jett at gunpoint. The easiest solution, at that moment, would be for Jett to just apply a lot of force on the insides of said baddie and then project it outwards. The result is a rather meaty and gorey exploding human being, but a dead man can't threaten Jett. If your character holds such power, it essentially devoids the story of any sort of tension. We can never really feel like Jett is in any sort of danger if we know he can just explode the opposition into little meatballs with a single thought, and consequently we never feel compelled to root for Jett to win.

But perhaps that's looking too far into it. Let us not view telekinesis with such depth and simply view it as the power to move up to a man sized object purely with your mind. If this is the case, what's keeping Jett from just lifting his opponent really high up and just dropping them and letting them die from altitude? His mercy you may argue, and that is a fair point to make, after all I use the absolute no killing rule to balance June's incredible potential out. Even then, unless his power is properly tuned, there's nothing to really stop Jett from just using telekinesis to hold his opponent in place, keep their feet nailed to the ground, while he goes in to sucker punch them out cold. Again, if Jett essentially has the power to win most any confrontation we can never really root for him to win. It's like pitting Superman against a paralyzed 3 year old. I mean it's obvious Superman never stood a chance, because the 3 year old was made of kryptonite, so we're never really rooting for this child to win in the first place.

I've had incredibly lengthy conversations about the topic with a handful of people and even though this critique is already getting quite long, it could still be tenfold longer so I'm gonna quit my babbling about telekinesis here. I suggest either thinking about balancing out the power a bit more, or just putting a disclaimer next to it to point out to people they shouldn't look as far into the power as I did :P.

Backstory isn't really anything special or doesn't really break any new ground, but it's concise and to the point so it's alright nonetheless. Good work.

I think that's about all I have to say on the matter really. Good luck in your battles and good luck with any possible revisions.