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Cherdef, chivalrous golem

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May 26, 2017 6:28 PM #1480181
Name: Cherdef

Abilities:
Cherdef is a golem made of stone, clay, and metal.

Therfore, he is incredibly durable. He also has limited shapeshifting, being able to rearange his materials, and change his limb shapes, even though he must retain a humanoid form. In his default form, he has a resemblance to s very bulky knight in plate armor, with a crude "sword" and "shield" made of plates of metal. Tne right arm is where all of the bladed pieces he has picked up are, most being in his blade. However, his blade is still not as effective as a normal sword, except for the fact that it is much heavier.

Can absorb metals and stone into his mass


WeaknessesHaving no brain, he is much less susceptible to psychic powers

He is also very well trained in the sword, though this new form makes this difficult to use

He's slower moving than a normal human, but can put on a sudden burst of speed (that of a normal human's light jog) if he decides to

He is a bit more susceptible to raw magic damage. Elemental and kinetic magics do not count, only raw magic. It can also stun him for a substantial period of time

His core, while encased in solid steel in the middle of his mass, is a big weakness. Removing the core will essentially defeat him

His mass can be chipped away. Parts separated from him become inanimate

About: Cheredef is from a parallel universe, a timeline closely related to this one. One where magic progressed instead of science and technology

600 years ago he was a legendary knight. Back before the Academy dominated the world. He was fighting them, routing them in every battle up until his death

His soul was at peace. Until, 600 years after his death, the academy brought him back.

Souls will usually decay over time. But not cherdef. He remembered everything. So he waited as they put him into a golem, and then rebelled


After attempted escape, he was locked up in the Lower Archives of the academy. He spent that time collecting stone and metal from in his cell, eventually breaking out.


He got into the wrong artifact in there, it seems. Now he's in this world.

Personality: he has an antiquated code of chivalry and honor. However, he, even in this form, is a bit arrogant, a d cocky. He has a soft heart, though.

He is a bit more moody and melancholy now than he was in life, however

Appearance: a large stone golem, about seven feet tall, covered in metal plates. Looks like a crude mockery of a knight. The small circular plate on his chest is made of incredibly aged bronze, with an ancient insignia inscribed upon it, changed ever so slightly

Demo: the portal appeared in the middle of the arena that day. It was an all-out melee, and the competitors assumed the golem as just another contestant


They assumed wrong. Cherdef, however, already knew this to be a sort of contest of fighting. And by entering the arena, he was now within it, at least in his mind.


So he began to amble towards the brawl. A single man disengages from one of the satellite clashes and attempts to take the golem unawares, a poisoned dagger aimed for a stone neck


The dagger slides off, and catches the attention of Cherdef. The opportunistic backstabber finds himself lifted bodily in the air, before his face is plunged onto the rough floor of the arena, hundreds of pounds of stone grinding his head into a pulp on the ground

Cherdef roars, the sound of a rumbling avalanche filling the arena. He feels newly powerful, just like his glory days. After four years rotting in a dungeon...

A crude sword of stone and metal forms from his right hand, a large metal plate serves as a shield on his left.


His roar attracts the attention of most contestants near him. He appears to be the biggest threat, now. Which he is.

The combatants all rush at him at once, simple novices armed with melee weapons.

They stand no chance, as the golem lays into them, smashing his sword with reckless abandon against their hopeless ranks. The shield, apparently useless to one made of stone, serves as an effective blunt weapon, a quick bash with a shield to stun, followed with a strike of the slow blade

Eventually, one crafty individual climbs on the golem's Back, wrapping a chain about his neck. A tank, a tug, and the cobbled stones and metal are yanked free, the clay mortar binding the two together breaking apart

But the golem's eyes still stare from within the head.. And a new one pops up out of the stone to take its place

Cherdef falls backwards, simply crushing the one behind him.


Soon, there is only one opponent. A lone man, barely an adult, with only a sword


Cherdef stops. He is no longer outnumbered


He lets much of his mass just fall off, becoming similar in size to a normal human, and approaches the frightened swordsman
He bows, and begins attacking. The match seems almost fair now, with cherdef shedding most of his advantage.

Yet, he still presses on, the novice swordsman barely defending, unable to get a strike past the sword and shield

Eventually, he gets a lucky strike, his sword skittering across cherdef's chest, ineffectively

Cherdef does something surprising. He simply walks off. Subsequent blows do seem to chip mass away, but it has no effect, as he walks about collecting most of his shed stone

"I forfeit"


The swordsman is puzzled. But definitely relieved, as the golem walks off





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May 26, 2017 7:31 PM #1480183
Heya Rusted! First off, a big and warm welcome to the Lounge

Moving on, let's have a look at your character;

I like it. It's a basic little concept, not much to it, but for a starting character it is still very solid. That being said, you can put some of the info for your character in spoilers so your readers aren't instantly bombarded with a wall of text. It's very simple, just put your text in between [ spoiler=(your title ] Like this [ /spoiler ] but then without the spaces between the brackets.

(your title (Click to Show)


Other than that I can see a lot of typos or places where you forgot to hit your spacebar and it's irking me a bit. Perhaps you should have a little re-read to correct those mistakes or have someone spellcheck it for you?

Alright that's it. Good luck in the Lounge and I'll add your character to the Hall very soon.
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May 26, 2017 7:34 PM #1480184
Sorry about the typos, i'm on mobile. I'll proofread it on pc



I actually asked which character i shoulda used in the discord. Cherdef is relatively underdeveloped, so i need to use him more anyways.



But sure, i'll add some spoilers


(i have better characters than cherdef, i just think they're a bit underpowered for use here)
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