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Velo: The Forgotten Raptor

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Dec 28, 2017 5:17 AM #1486646
BACKROUND: Velo is a member of an elite squad that was sent out to defend his monarch, all of the squad was killed but him. He escaped to where no media could find him, but before he could his picture was put in the news. He decided to run away and find new friends, new family, new weapons.

Velo's Strengths: Velo can run at 119 miles per hour. He can run art this speed due to the aerodynamics of his feathers and armour. He is also great at making things, weather it be metal working or robots, he's your guy

Velo's Powers: Velo can breathe ice, use any bladed weapon, and run incredibly fast.

Velo's Weaknesses: If Velo gets wet, he can only run at two miles per hour, he can also not use ranged weapons

Fun Facts 'bout 'em: Velo loves video games, he also loves Rick and Morty. Velo is very vulgar, he has never spared anyone, and will kill anyone who considers him a hero

Velo's weapon: His weapon is a jeweled long sword, it is covered in silver, rubies, and gold. It is enchanted to have a supreme blood thirst, blood making the gems more red.
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Dec 28, 2017 8:15 AM #1486652
You need a demo and a picture.
Anyways your rhg seems to be nice, good luck with it !
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Dec 30, 2017 2:00 AM #1486716
ACKROUND: Velo is a member of an elite squad that was sent out to defend his monarch,

Okay.
all of the squad was killed but him

They weren't so elite then, were they?
He escaped to where no media could find him,

Okay.
but before he could his picture was put in the news. He decided to run away and find new friends, new family, new weapons.

Then what's the point of running anyway? (Also, couldn't you find new weapons literally anywhere?)
Velo's Strengths: Velo can run at 119 miles per hour. He can run art this speed due to the aerodynamics of his feathers and armour.

I'm pretty sure this is more of a lower body strength thing than an aerodynamic thing. If it was, then most people would be able to run that quickly after only a little bit of training.
He is also great at making things, weather it be metal working or robots, he's your guy

Where did he get these skills, and how far do they go? (How quickly can he make things, how much material does he need, is he some kind of miracle worker in regard to this area of expertise? We need more details.)
Velo's Powers: Velo can breathe ice, use any bladed weapon, and run incredibly fast.

Why can he breathe ice? Why can he run fast? Being able to use any bladed weapon isn't really a weapon, anyone can use a bladed weapon.
Velo's Weaknesses: If Velo gets wet, he can only run at two miles per hour,

Why?
he can also not use ranged weapons

Why?
Velo's weapon: His weapon is a jeweled long sword, it is covered in silver, rubies, and gold. It is enchanted to have a supreme blood thirst, blood making the gems more red.

Gold and silver aren't the best materials to use for a sword. Also, what's the point of blood making the gems more red?
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Dec 30, 2017 3:19 PM #1486727
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he also loves Rick and Morty. Velo is very vulgar, he has never spared anyone, and will kill anyone who considers him a hero


Edgelord and Rick and Morty fanboy. This is probably the most unlikable character I think I’ve seen here, bravo.
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Dec 31, 2017 7:54 PM #1486766
Really? This is the worst you've seen?
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