"Stand-still your blood thirst soldiers, they attack us thusly the turn of tomorrow.
There screams, rants, and raves laced and lined with sorrow.
For tonight our gods strength and will we shall borrow.
Our gods strength ever lasting ever forgiving.
To torment, and haunt the pure, and corrupt of the living.
There arrows, swords, and the hate of there lords we will certainly be receiving.
So I digress, stow your blood lust and rest this evening."

" Storm there corrupt walls, I need not explain the feeling watching the moment in time there flag falls.
They cannot hold us back for long, so march men march, all night long.
If we not but stop once on the way to freedom, they will think we will all simply be gone untill tonight to tomorrows end.
We will interrupt there feast and there songs.
And reclaim the freedom and piece they took wen they came..."


Just figured I better do something out of the usual.
Tell me what you think.

Bump, ReAd tha POEMSz!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Lul.. awesome poem there

Mwuhahahahahha.

I dislike it greatly
For reasons which shall become apparent when I post them
Which is definitely going to happen
Just not yet because I am very tired and therefore must resign myself to sleep

Quote from ThatGuy

I dislike it greatly
For reasons which shall become apparent when I post them
Which is definitely going to happen
Just not yet because I am very tired and therefore must resign myself to sleep

Oh no feel free to elaborate, buddy.
I just figure I would give it a first, ironically the link in your sig. lead me to make these.

I see no form of meter in this "poem" at all.

Quote from Gavel

I see no form of meter in this "poem" at all.

Damn spazz, I don't get what you said.

Quote from NecroticMannequin

Damn spazz, I don't get what you said.

In rhyming poetry, there is always some kind of rhythm in it so that it doesn't look all chaotic. This is known as "meter". In order to have a good meter in a poem, you need to maintain a pattern with your syllables instead of just fit as many words as you can into one line because it all rhymes.

Here's an example:
A: Two syllables
B: One syllable

This could be arranged like this:
A B A B
A B A
A B A B
A B A

To help you this the rhythm a bit more:
Bada bum bada bum
bada bum bada
Bada bum bada bum
Bada bum bada

Of course you don't have to follow this specific pattern, but keep in mind to have some sort of syllabic pattern in each line of your poem. Don't just do with 5 syllables on the first line, 6 on the second, and 34 on the third line, 26 on the 6th, and 9 on the 7th.

Quote from Gavel

In rhyming poetry, there is always some kind of rhythm in it so that it doesn't look all chaotic. This is known as "meter". In order to have a good meter in a poem, you need to maintain a pattern with your syllables instead of just fit as many words as you can into one line because it all rhymes.

Here's an example:
A: Two syllables
B: One syllable

This could be arranged like this:
A B A B
A B A
A B A B
A B A

To help you this the rhythm a bit more:
Bada bum bada bum
bada bum bada
Bada bum bada bum
Bada bum bada

Of course you don't have to follow this specific pattern, but keep in mind to have some sort of syllabic pattern in each line of your poem. Don't just do with 5 syllables on the first line, 6 on the second, and 34 on the third line, 26 on the 6th, and 9 on the 7th.

I just remembered why I love you, <3.
Thanks spazz.