http://www.truploader.com/view/142316

This is a teaser/preview of an animation I have been working on for about three days now, I have 19 seconds so far, and the teaser is about the third scene, I guess you could call it a scene, I don't know.

Just watch the animation and here is a little information about what it's about:
Guy talks to some girl, the chicks boyfriend gets pissed and beats the hell out of him, says something about if he messes with him again he is gonna be dead. Guy gets mad, freaks out and goes on a rampage killing everyone that stands in his way and eventually makes his way to the chicks boyfriend and epic battle between them.
Any thoughts or encouragement to help improve the animation will be greatly appreciated, also, if this does get complete, you will be in the credits.

Thanks again guys(:

The stars when the blue guy stood up did not look like stars. Fix those up. When the crates fell on the red guy, there didn't seem to be enough force, and the guy didn't even move. He kind of just fell over and had no expression of pain or hurt when the crates crushed his legs and arms. The blood had no splattering. When the blue guy gets up and turns around, his right arm is detached from the body. Pretty good, though. Nice job.

The way the boxes are placed is ****ed up. They would fall and crush the person.

The stars look like jizz . . . .

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The way the boxes are placed is ****ed up. They would fall and crush the person.

The stars look like jizz . . . .

Hahaha, ya they kinda have that jizz feeling to them lol.

and ya I know, it's supposed to be a very unstable stack of boxes.

I'll fix the stars in a bit and post the revised teaser.

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The stars when the blue guy stood up did not look like stars. Fix those up. When the crates fell on the red guy, there didn't seem to be enough force, and the guy didn't even move. He kind of just fell over and had no expression of pain or hurt when the crates crushed his legs and arms. The blood had no splattering. When the blue guy gets up and turns around, his right arm is detached from the body. Pretty good, though. Nice job.

He moved when it fell on his legs, just not on his arms, well I did kinda move his arms, but how is he supposed to move when his legs and arms are trapped?
Not enough force, hmm, didn't seem that way to me; but that's okay.
And about the detached arm, that was kinda a mistake and kinda fits to him just getting his butt beat by a guy he the scene previous to this one..anyways, thanks for the comment!

EDIT: The arm was easier to fix than I thought, so I fixed it now!(:

Revised version: http://www.truploader.com/view/142316

Good job! Now the stars look like dry cum spots. lol.

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Good job! Now the stars look like dry cum spots. lol.

Yes! That's exactly what I was going for, jeeze it kinda looks like the back of my pillow...haha jk guys.

Just use the same style that you did for the others.

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Just use the same style that you did for the others.

Wait, for the other whats?

and whoo! 30.4 seconds.

The other stars.
I like helping people >_>

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The other stars.
I like helping people >_>

Oh, you mean the smaller ones?

Yeah. Stars are too far away, so no matter what angle the camera is at, the stars will not get any larger.

edit: I hope you know what a star is >_> They're not glowing dots in the earth's atmosphere.

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Yeah. Stars are too far away, so no matter what angle the camera is at, the stars will not get any larger.

edit: I hope you know what a star is >_> They're not glowing dots in the earth's atmosphere.

Oh jeeze, I just got what you were saying, I was thinking that they might appear larger because you were zoomed in but I guess that doesn't make sense.

Thanks dude.

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Good job! Now the stars look like dry cum spots. lol.

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the boxes are heavier than they seem