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Jun 14, 2009 11:24 PM #440130
Uppercut combo - very pleased with this animation
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Really proud of this one, tell me if it is internz yet.
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Jun 14, 2009 11:29 PM #440134
Hmm... He looks very awkward, drunk, and powerless, but I guess that's what you were going for. However, his hits looked like it had enough force. The run was pretty decent too, besides the strange placement of his arms.

I don't know if you should change anything except the "drunk" style.
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Jun 14, 2009 11:30 PM #440138
It was really smooth.
And the run was kind of funny I guess.
I'd say you're about borderline inter.
Try animating something that actually takes more than 10 minutes.
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Jun 14, 2009 11:36 PM #440146
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Hmm... He looks very awkward, drunk, and powerless, but I guess that's what you were going for. However, his hits looked like it had enough force. The run was pretty decent too, besides the strange placement of his arms.

I don't know if you should change anything except the "drunk" style.


When you say drunk style are you reffering to the run at the end, because the rest of it, to me, looks rather sober lol.
Thanks for the comment.

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It was really smooth.

And the run was kind of funny I guess.

I'd say you're about borderline inter.

Try animating something that actually takes more than 10 minutes.


Ha, it actually took like 20-25 minutes lol.
Thanks for the comment, but I don't really know what to animate that's long...
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Jun 14, 2009 11:38 PM #440149
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When you say drunk style are you reffering to the run at the end, because the rest of it, to me, looks rather sober lol.
Thanks for the comment.


Well drunk probably isn't the best word, I meant that it looks like he's out of power when he bends over after the first punch, but of course it's not consistent with the rest of the animation so you might want to change that. Huge run-on eh.
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Jun 15, 2009 12:04 AM #440162
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Well drunk probably isn't the best word, I meant that it looks like he's out of power when he bends over after the first punch, but of course it's not consistent with the rest of the animation so you might want to change that. Huge run-on eh.


Well I just made him bend his knees more to give him more power for his kick.., I was gonna make him touch the ground first but that didn't seem like it would look very realistic.
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Jun 15, 2009 12:06 AM #440163
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Well I just made him bend his knees more to give him more power for his kick.., I was gonna make him touch the ground first but that didn't seem like it would look very realistic.

What ground?
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Jun 15, 2009 12:08 AM #440164
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Well I just made him bend his knees more to give him more power for his kick.., I was gonna make him touch the ground first but that didn't seem like it would look very realistic.


Really... Doesn't that position look awkward to you? Try it out in real life. Lawl.

It'd be better just to have his elbow bent and on the other side of his torso, so when he kicks, it looks like he's turning his whole torso and rotating his arms.
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Jun 15, 2009 12:28 AM #440174
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What ground?


Ha nice, good point, hmm a better wording would be, the representation of the ground, which would be even with where his feet rested.

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Really... Doesn't that position look awkward to you? Try it out in real life. Lawl.


Ha, that's true.
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Jun 15, 2009 12:55 AM #440197
Ah yes, that is refreshing something that can actually be criticized. The movements unique, they were to loose for normal movements and not loose enough for rag doll movements. I recommend either loosening them up or tightening them. The easing was not quite what is needed for intermediate, however fairly close. You just need to emphasis on easing a tad bit or perhaps make movements that are a certain way to where the easing can remain the same. The spacing was very awkward and could really use a monstrous quantity of improvement, that was you worst category by far. And another thing don't make your animations so pall, use other sticks like ground, another stick man or weapons. Or perhaps make him fly or leap, not just him moving in one stationary screen. The punch was lacking in some preparations at it's beginning though it is not lacking in force, a few more frames would do it much more justice. Further more the kick was missing a frame in it, were it lifts up into the air. It most likely could benefit from more easing on the pulling downwards of the leg as well. Same goes for when he is running and his arms are flopping about, there needs to be some more emphasis on easing there or it will seem to rushed and not very smooth. Other than that nothing really to hate about the animation itself, I actually liked it for the most part.
Stars: 3/5.
Out of ten: 6.5/10.
Rank: high beginner.

Knowing that most people can barely push a two, your animation is not all that bad and with more effort and practice you could be intermediate very soon. If you had used other things.( like ground, another stick man or weapons ect.) It would have been a considerably higher rating, please take this criticism to heart and continue to make good animations in the future.

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Jun 15, 2009 1:07 AM #440211
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Ah yes, that is refreshing something that can actually be criticized. The movements unique, they were to loose for normal movements and not loose enough for rag doll movements. I recommend either loosening them up or tightening them. The easing was not quite what is needed for intermediate, however fairly close. You just need to emphasis on easing a tad bit or perhaps make movements that are a certain way to where the easing can remain the same. The spacing was very awkward and could really use a monstrous quantity of improvement, that was you worst category by far. And another thing don't make your animations so pall, use other sticks like ground, another stick man or weapons. Or perhaps make him fly or leap, not just him moving in one stationary screen. The punch was lacking in some preparations at it's beginning though it is not lacking in force, a few more frames would do it much more justice. Further more the kick was missing a frame in it, were it lifts up into the air. It most likely could benefit from more easing on the pulling downwards of the leg as well. Same goes for when he is running and his arms are flopping about, there needs to be some more emphasis on easing there or it will seem to rushed and not very smooth. Other than that nothing really to hate about the animation itself, I actually liked it for the most part.
Stars: 3/5.
Out of ten: 6.5/10.
Rank: high beginner.

Knowing that most people can barely push a two, your animation is not all that bad and with more effort and practice you could be intermediate very soon. If you had used other things.( like ground, another stick man or weapons ect.) It would have been a considerably higher rating, please take this criticism to heart and continue to make good animations in the future.

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Wow, dude, that was an extremely long comment, thank you for all the help, I usually have a ground, in fact this is the FIRST animation that I haven't, EVER. I just was seeing if I could keep foot placement without the flood, that's why he isn't at the bottom of the screen, I have noticed even some...not so good foot placement by some internz, so I make that almost my first priority, then easing, and everything else as the rest..

So do you have a thread on DD, if so what section are you in?
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Jun 15, 2009 4:58 PM #440510
The stickman is way drunk. The arms are too long.
That was a really short combo.
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Jun 15, 2009 5:13 PM #440526
Cewl man .
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Jun 15, 2009 5:41 PM #440545
mE iNk He hAD a WiTtLe tOo ManY
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Jun 15, 2009 7:32 PM #440638
Okay, fact of the matter is, who gives a flying **** if a stick figure animation is realistic? I mean come on.

Anyway, it was well eased and entertaining to watch, it flowed well and the power behind the hits was enough. You also managed to keep the foot placement even, so good job on that too.

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