Exodus

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Apr 30, 2012 1:58 PM #646110
This is an excerpt from my new story, Exodus. here's Chapter 1.

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Although this may seem short, the actual chapter will be much longer.
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Apr 30, 2012 1:58 PM #646111
this is the cool part. This is where you guys make suggestions and story ideas for what's going to happen next. Also, ideas for characters and shit will be awesome, just include a physical description, a name, and a backstory. If it's not too retarded, I'll include it.
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Apr 30, 2012 2:12 PM #646114
In my opinion their base, or laboratory (whatever it is), will be attacked or by enemy soldiers or by spies.

I'd suggest you to describe the sourrondings better, since I can't make an idea of Kathleen's room
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May 2, 2012 11:51 PM #647640
Bumped the story, added new content to Chapter 1.
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May 3, 2012 1:02 AM #647688
what happens next is nick lights up a big ass joint and goes back inside to fuck kathleen