OK after Devours helpful criticism and with tutorials from Terkoiz I have tried again! I hope there is a improvement, also, even if you see something someone else has already noted still tell me, it helps when there is more then one explanation, so if I don't get something one person says I can pick it up from what you've said and vis-versa. (if that makes sense). Anyways:
Link 1 (this is direct from a tut from something easy by Terkoiz. Don't say it's unoriginal, I know).
Link 2 (request from my friend).