The short story: *WIP*
As my eyes opened, I saw nothing. just black. I tried getting up, but something was keeping me down. Unexpectedly, I saw a little light slowly becoming bigger. A shadowy figure had his arm out, trying to keep what I thought was a door open, in the other hand, I saw a rough shape, he was sticking it in the door, it was a circle, I think. I saw numbers on it. All the man said was 'Goodbye.' He turned the lights on, and left.

I couldn't remember anything, I couldn't talk, and I was stuck to a wooden floor.
As I turned my head, I saw what was holding me down; a chain with some cracks in it, and 2 thin ropes, and there was blood on me. It couldn't have been my blood though, it looked like I was unharmed. There were holes in the wall. I wondered what they were for. Then as a high pitched bats flew out, almost as if I had jinxed it. Then, with strength that I didn't know I had in me, I ripped the chain and the ropes, with astonishing force.


As I struggled to my feet, the bats were all over me, I could already feel my body getting weaker with the amount of blood I was losing, I still had to escape this nightmare that happened to be to wretched to truly be a nightmare, I lost focus and my hand hit a hard object, giving me a deep cut, horrifying me, as if I wasn't being tortured in the grim light. Then I remem

this was an unrust at first, then i wanted to turn it into a couple of pages

How about you erase this before you get carried away and take a gun to your middle school.

I'm tempted to do that..hmm...

:p

but no joke this girl is such a damn faggot

I wasn't being humorous.

Stop being a bitch and stop writing this; it's sickening that you'd even fantasize about torturing your classmate.

Learn not to give a fuck about women. Protip.

Actually, IMD, it wasn't my idea, buuuut i was pretty fucking stupid do it i admit.

Good, I'm glad you realized that.

Now close this thread and write something less sadistic.

Whats wrong with the first one?

The first one? I meant that this entire piece is pointless. If you want to relieve stress, play Grand Theft Auto or the torture game. But if you choose to write a story, which you have the right to do, please don't slide it in front of it, include sadistic humor, and try to pass it off as legitimate literature.

Oh no lol, I meant the first story thing :p

My bad, I wasn't paying attention.

The first story seems to abstract; it doesn't have focus.

Haha, It'll get better if I finish it :p (this is a rough copy)

anyway I think I got writers block, gonna mess around in OpenOffice :]

make your sentences longer, they seems confusing and you don't need three sentences of description when one will do.

Really interesting story. Very small grammatical errors but very good