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The Wizard vs. Todesberührung

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Oct 21, 2012 1:02 AM #764571
Sadly, Shadowkirby forfeited. That just leaves my story, I guess. I'll post it here because I think it turned out very well. Shadowkirby will like how I portrayed his character, I hope.

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Oct 21, 2012 1:47 AM #764599
This was freakin awesome! You're a great writer Devour! Thanks for the good "read" man. Good luck in your future battles.
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Oct 21, 2012 2:43 AM #764644
Quite a nice story :D
I agree with FIDST, you are a good writer

I just want to ask something: by killing Titania every hope of one day having your curse lifted is now gone forever right? :|
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Oct 21, 2012 4:06 AM #764703
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This was freakin awesome! You're a great writer Devour! Thanks for the good "read" man. Good luck in your future battles.


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Quite a nice story :D
I agree with FIDST, you are a good writer

I just want to ask something: by killing Titania every hope of one day having your curse lifted is now gone forever right? :|

Thank you very much. :D

And yeah. At least, there's no chance of being rescued from the curse by Titania. But there may or may not be some ideas I have that could lead to other escapes.
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Oct 21, 2012 12:37 PM #765083
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Thank you very much. :D

And yeah. At least, there's no chance of being rescued from the curse by Titania. But there may or may not be some ideas I have that could lead to other escapes.


I'll be waiting to see what you can come up with. I'm sure it will be interesting to read :)
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Oct 21, 2012 3:43 PM #765227
Great story devour, truely a great read and too bad Shadowkirb backed out i think it would have been interesting to see his story as well.
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Oct 21, 2012 4:22 PM #765281
I did really enjoy the read and how well you portrayed the intensity of the scene of you meeting Stan.

However, I started to be disappointed at the end. To me the ending seemed rushed. Now I understand the other party forfeited, but to be honest if he had finished his story and at least had a somewhat same caliber of writing as you (and assuming he didn't do the same rushing issue) I probably would of went with his story strictly because the build up of the entire story led to an immediate one-hit wonder of a victory. The Queen suddenly appears and in all of her mighty glory that she has been described as, she's only portrayed as a suffering omnipotent being that's dying from the touch of a death hand. Honestly, this seemed to sort of counter all the high speaking of this Summer Queen, despite her efforts on taking Stan with her.

And as SJCRPV pointed out, your first wRHG battle completely destroyed one of the main characteristics that drives you RHG to be unique. I think that if you were to carry on this fear of the Summer Queen existing all the way through multiple wRHG battles and eventually have her appear after all the suspense, it would've definitely provided a great climactic moment for your character's background. Regardless, still an enjoyable read. I hope you take this into account on your next battle!
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Oct 21, 2012 11:40 PM #765649
I totally agree with what you're saying, Sacred. Just remember, I have a lot of practice thinking up long-term stories ;) There's a lot that could happen from here, though I'm not going to give any hints.
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Oct 22, 2012 12:12 AM #765676
I'll take your word for it, heheh.
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Oct 22, 2012 2:51 AM #765803
Oh my... I was like: "ok it's late here, I'll just read one paragraph or two and then to sleep"

I didn't notice when i was about to finish the story, man.... I could feel the RHG's feelings and thoughts in my body, it was amazing how you built up the enviroment and movements, i aplaude you, I loved this story, and I can't wait to read more stories from your RHG :3
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Oct 22, 2012 5:32 PM #766249
This really was a fantastic battle, Devour. It was well written, well described and that moment where it turned out that that Stan was near him actually made my heart jump.
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