Phelix the Pheonix

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Nov 7, 2012 2:30 AM #780339
Phelix the Phoenix


Author's note:
So I've decided to bring this back. I made this and then left it to rot, but now I'll be rewriting and extending upon my story. You can find the most up-to-date version here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/10gLkdfc0EdjK16XjbeQwo6PlPcKafccfRZPHW62Fvfw/edit?usp=sharing . I've made it so anyone can comment, so if you see any errors feel free to point them out. Still in the rough stages, there should be more tomorrow. Right now I'm going to primarily focus on finishing his story, and once thats done I will openly seek opponents. I'm still up for battles though, so feel free to challenge me (if you dare). ~M Penguin



Abilities:
Has Pheonix wings and can fly fast. Is immune to heat and fire. Can summon fire at will, whether it be from his hands or his mouth. Due to his Phoenix abilities, should he become ill, severely injured, or die, He will burst into flames leaving behind a pile of ashes, that will then regenerate back into Phelix. The more severe the injury, the longer the regeneration takes.

Weaknesses:
Isn't the brightest crayon in the box, if you aren't stronger than him you could probably out smart him. Fly and stuff is super easy but summoning fire can really drain him. Isn't tough and not that hard to take down. Water hurts him a lot, maybe throw a bucket of water on him and let him die. Not good at hand to hand combat.

Story:
Story (more coming soon) (Click to Show)


[SIZE=4]Demo:
Demo: (Click to Show)


- Battles: None yet. Available for battles.

- Appearance/personality: He has burning red eyes, and reddish orange hair, that is constantly moving regardless of weather (much like a flame but a little slower). He wears torn up jeans and a red shirt at all times because he can't go out and buy any new cloths. He is white, but extremely tanned. Not very muscular, very skinny and not in best shape. He tries to keep calm and show no emotion, though he has a constant feeling of sadness. Though he tries to remain neutral, his naturally aggressive instincts will sometimes kick in at random moments, and should he slip over the edge, his instincts take over and he goes on a psychopathic rampage (and everything around him dies and burns). He cares little about people feelings or emotions, and doesn't know how to read people. He tries not to take life but he can't control himself most of the time. At heart he is a nice guy, though he has trouble doing the right thing.

- Points: 0/0

CNC is always appreciated.

~M.Penguin
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Nov 7, 2012 3:10 AM #780368
Dang, that's one heck of a scary character. He could use a personality and appearance section though.

Also, I don't know about you, but I don't think he should be weakened by his use of fire. The number of weaknesses makes him actually seem underpowered.
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Nov 15, 2012 3:42 AM #787664
Quote from Luzoto
Dang, that's one heck of a scary character. He could use a personality and appearance section though.

Also, I don't know about you, but I don't think he should be weakened by his use of fire. The number of weaknesses makes him actually seem underpowered.


Added an appearance thingy so everything should be huncky dorey. Any other questions will be answered in the story, which I am working on as we speak.
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Nov 15, 2012 3:35 PM #787961
i like the idea, now that you have have added an appearance i think its even better and hewit i love the line about a glass cannon, could destroy itself if full power was ever used, i like the line from the second ghost rider better tho, a papermache flame thrower fits this a little bit better lol
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Feb 14, 2017 3:05 PM #1475861
So, if his ashes are arranged in a strange pattern, he might be considered dead, right? Because if he had some of his ashes at Antartica and some in Australia, then his upper body will be at Antartica and his lower body will be at Australia, right?
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Feb 14, 2017 6:04 PM #1475872
Damn... a '12 resurrection. Quite the phoenix yourself.

Anyhow, like the char. I think you've made him a bit too much of a glass cannon. Like, take away a few of the things, and reduce the water weakness. Seriously, he's not the wicked witch -- don't have him just die from water.

I mean, Altaer (my wRHG) would just come at him with a water gun in that case.

Overall, great job dude! And welcome (back) to the Writer's Lounge!