Phelix the Pheonix
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View Profile Phelix the Phoenix
Author's note:
So I've decided to bring this back. I made this and then left it to rot, but now I'll be rewriting and extending upon my story. You can find the most up-to-date version here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/10gLkdfc0EdjK16XjbeQwo6PlPcKafccfRZPHW62Fvfw/edit?usp=sharing . I've made it so anyone can comment, so if you see any errors feel free to point them out. Still in the rough stages, there should be more tomorrow. Right now I'm going to primarily focus on finishing his story, and once thats done I will openly seek opponents. I'm still up for battles though, so feel free to challenge me (if you dare). ~M Penguin
Abilities:
Has Pheonix wings and can fly fast. Is immune to heat and fire. Can summon fire at will, whether it be from his hands or his mouth. Due to his Phoenix abilities, should he become ill, severely injured, or die, He will burst into flames leaving behind a pile of ashes, that will then regenerate back into Phelix. The more severe the injury, the longer the regeneration takes.
Weaknesses:
Isn't the brightest crayon in the box, if you aren't stronger than him you could probably out smart him. Fly and stuff is super easy but summoning fire can really drain him. Isn't tough and not that hard to take down. Water hurts him a lot, maybe throw a bucket of water on him and let him die. Not good at hand to hand combat.
Story:
Phelix sat on the edge of the roof of a
n old, abandoned apartment complex. It wasn't much, really. It had no electricity, dust covered everything in it, and years of being uncared left it nearly destroyed. But Phelix liked it. This is where he lived. This was home to him. He stared of into the horizon and saw the sun begin to dip below his field of vision. Watching the sun set had become one of Phelix's favorite past times. It was one of the things he could appreciate, and no one could take it away from him. Over the years he had grown to appreciate how much that meant. No one could take it away from him. He liked that, he liked that a lot. Over the years he had come to appreciate just how much that meant. He had lost so much, and suffered beyond belief. Now all that was left was these simple pleasures in life. He started to wonder when it all began. It took him a while, so much had happened in so little time it was perceive just how much time had gone by.
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Phelix flew away from his burned home as fast as he could. He landed on a rooftop and began crying his eyes out, the tears evaporating as soon as they touched his cheeks. After a few minutes he collected his thoughts and from there, figured out what he needed to do. He did not want to go to a foster home and explain why he had flaming wings, so he would have to live on his own. He needed food, water, and maybe later some shelter. Though Phelix wanted nothing more than to forget his powers and never use them again, the rational side of his head wouldn’t allow it. He would have to fight and rob people for money if he were to survive. Maybe later he could come up with a way to hide his wings and could go back to living a normal life.
He flew around the city trying to get his crap together so that he wouldn’t break down in the middle of and fights. When the sun finally began its decent below the horizon he waited hidden on the rooftops looking down on alleyways to see if he could find any drug dealing. He saw a couple of guys wearing baggy jeans and oversized jackets walk into an alleyway. They met up a couple other guys, and one of them brought out a bag full of white powder, and the other pulled out a plastic baggy filled with rolls of money. It was now or never.
He swooped down and landed on top of the man holding the bag of money. He had been going fast enough to knock out the man he landed on but not so fast he would hurt himself. He quickly grabbed the bag and flew off in hopes of keeping things short and simple, but no such luck. As he was about to take off one of the other three remaining men grabbed him by the leg and threw him on the ground.
Phelix quickly stood up and prepared to fight.
A punch in the face. Phelix got knocked off the ground and landed on his back, the wind knocked out of him. The three men gather around him ready to beat Phelix to death. Phelix tried to get up, but the dealers would have none of it. Pinning him down, the men started punching him in the face, kicking his stomach, and doing whatever they could to hurt him.
Phelix was hoping that fire wouldn’t have to get involved but it was clear that if he didn’t do something, it would not end well for him. Phelix’s mouth opened wide and he screamed as loud as he could. But instead of sound coming from his mouth, and tornado of flames erupted from the back of his neck and burned two of the three men. They screamed and shouted as they had their cloths set of fire, and most of their faces burned. The third man stepped back, shock written all over his face. Phelix rose from the ground, a flame dancing in his hand. He raised his hand to face the final man and clenched his hand into a fist once more.
A pause. Then a stream of white-hot flames exploded from the top of his fist and blasted a hole right through the man’s heart, killing him instantly. Then Phelix grabbed the money and flew away as fast as he could. Completely unaware of what he was getting himself into.
- Battles: None yet. Available for battles.
- Appearance/personality: He has burning red eyes, and reddish orange hair, that is constantly moving regardless of weather (much like a flame but a little slower). He wears torn up jeans and a red shirt at all times because he can't go out and buy any new cloths. He is white, but extremely tanned. Not very muscular, very skinny and not in best shape. He tries to keep calm and show no emotion, though he has a constant feeling of sadness. Though he tries to remain neutral, his naturally aggressive instincts will sometimes kick in at random moments, and should he slip over the edge, his instincts take over and he goes on a psychopathic rampage (and everything around him dies and burns). He cares little about people feelings or emotions, and doesn't know how to read people. He tries not to take life but he can't control himself most of the time. At heart he is a nice guy, though he has trouble doing the right thing.
- Points: 0/0
CNC is always appreciated.
~M.PenguinLuzotoPosts: 1,100
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View Profile Dang, that's one heck of a scary character. He could use a personality and appearance section though.
Also, I don't know about you, but I don't think he should be weakened by his use of fire. The number of weaknesses makes him actually seem underpowered.
MusicalPenguinPosts: 5
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View Profile Dang, that's one heck of a scary character. He could use a personality and appearance section though.
Also, I don't know about you, but I don't think he should be weakened by his use of fire. The number of weaknesses makes him actually seem underpowered.
Added an appearance thingy so everything should be huncky dorey. Any other questions will be answered in the story, which I am working on as we speak.
cowboy bodaciousPosts: 357
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View Profile i like the idea, now that you have have added an appearance i think its even better and hewit i love the line about a glass cannon, could destroy itself if full power was ever used, i like the line from the second ghost rider better tho, a papermache flame thrower fits this a little bit better lol
Azarel CS.7772Posts: 238
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View Profile So, if his ashes are arranged in a strange pattern, he might be considered dead, right? Because if he had some of his ashes at Antartica and some in Australia, then his upper body will be at Antartica and his lower body will be at Australia, right?
Alphaeus2Posts: 1,218
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View Profile Damn... a '12 resurrection. Quite the phoenix yourself.
Anyhow, like the char. I think you've made him a bit too much of a glass cannon. Like, take away a few of the things, and reduce the water weakness. Seriously, he's not the wicked witch -- don't have him just die from water.
I mean, Altaer (my wRHG) would just come at him with a water gun in that case.
Overall, great job dude! And welcome (back) to the Writer's Lounge!