CODEX: [Re-Opened] ~Recruiting Members~
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Aug 10, 2013 3:01 PM #1062192
...Boomerang. Please put your work here after revision. Since yours is perhaps the "only" one to make the deadline. Unlike O.P.'s at all...Does my weekly suck? ;^;
Aug 10, 2013 3:05 PM #1062194
Quote from GamerXD8...Boomerang. Please put your work here after revision. Since yours is perhaps the "only" one to make the deadline. Unlike O.P.'s at all...Does my weekly suck? ;^;
Hey man, the deadline is August 15th. You're too.....sentimental.
By the way, have anyone seen king?
Aug 10, 2013 3:09 PM #1062198
15th? It's called "weekly" for a reason. Though...our clan isn't "half" as good/active as O.P. so...do what you wish, leader. I give up.
Aug 10, 2013 3:09 PM #1062199
2100 words :D
I doubt it's really that good but there you go.
And yeah I was wondering about that two. If it's a weekly then you should only have a week.
Weekly: Arvine's personality swap. also some foreshadowing. (Click to Show)
I doubt it's really that good but there you go.
And yeah I was wondering about that two. If it's a weekly then you should only have a week.
Aug 10, 2013 3:11 PM #1062203
Dude, don't give up. We must fight on! We must be the man! (yea)Quote from GamerXD815th? It's called "weekly" for a reason. Though...our clan isn't "half" as good/active as O.P. so...do what you wish, leader. I give up.
But come on, I don't know any ideas, but I still tried to do something.
On the second page of the story (probably 300 words)
Quote from BoomerangReturns2100 words :DWeekly: Arvine's personality swap. also some foreshadowing. (Click to Show)
I doubt it's really that good but there you go.
And yeah I was wondering about that two. If it's a weekly then you should only have a week.
Wowza, you add Forsaken for a twist.
You got me there bro XD
I was surprised at the personality though. It suits him, on a different way.
But it's a bit....bloody at the end. Yet it's cool. it's cool.
Yet this is a good story. I'm surprised how well you'd do on personality swap. >:3
Aug 10, 2013 3:14 PM #1062204
I will be submitting it wayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy later. After ma Fairy Tale. Though I need an audience! Who volunteers? No one. Fine. >.<
Aug 10, 2013 4:41 PM #1062250
How exactly would you get an audience...? I could understand using Google Docs, but are there other methods? I'm intrigued. .
Aug 10, 2013 4:47 PM #1062256
Dunno. XD I chat. Telling bits and pieces and making up as I go. Got the plot, now gotta think of the words to WOW the audience, AKA: the person I'm talking to. This helps practicing quick thinking because you don't really want to make a fool of yourself, right? Well...That's my ridiculous method.
Aug 11, 2013 3:28 AM #1062530
If you use Google Docs, you can chat with people while you write :3 It's a great thing to use for collaborations.
Aug 11, 2013 3:34 AM #1062538
Okay how does everyone like my weekly since gamer told me to post it.
Aug 11, 2013 3:46 AM #1062552
I've said this before, but work on your comma use. It was much better than your battle with digkid, but you still need to improve in that area.
Personally, it could use a lot of work... I didn't like how Titus all of a sudden knew that he had swapped personalities. I guess I only have a problem with how it started. Not enough insight into how Titus had been given Arvine's personality, or even why, just that he did. Ya know? So it could use a lot of work... Just keep that in mind when you write next: EXPLAIN EVERYTHING.
Personally, it could use a lot of work... I didn't like how Titus all of a sudden knew that he had swapped personalities. I guess I only have a problem with how it started. Not enough insight into how Titus had been given Arvine's personality, or even why, just that he did. Ya know? So it could use a lot of work... Just keep that in mind when you write next: EXPLAIN EVERYTHING.
Aug 11, 2013 3:49 AM #1062556
Well honestly I didn't really know how to start it. I kind of wanted it to be a casual wake up from bed and get a odd feeling. And I know that was sudden, I ended up putting it in last cuz I forgot that I should probably add that he figured out whos it was. Maybe I should of just left it a mystery. And,
GOD DAMN YOU COMMAS
GOD DAMN YOU COMMAS
Aug 11, 2013 3:54 AM #1062564
Eh oh well. Just keep in mind to put more plot into it when writing.
As far as the comma usage: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm <-- Try reading through this. Pay special attention to #11
As far as the comma usage: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm <-- Try reading through this. Pay special attention to #11
Aug 11, 2013 4:12 AM #1062592
Thanks, Chamel.
I do try my best to put details in but I just have Moot points where I just add something in. As I said, it probably would have been better if I left who's personality it was a mystery since I didn't really know them that well. I hope my tourney entry isn't as bad. Oh nooo
I do try my best to put details in but I just have Moot points where I just add something in. As I said, it probably would have been better if I left who's personality it was a mystery since I didn't really know them that well. I hope my tourney entry isn't as bad. Oh nooo
Aug 11, 2013 2:05 PM #1062950
I think the mistakes on your part is your spacing, and some details.
And you don't give us backgrounds of what happened that causes the personality swap.
Also as Chamel said, commas, or special usage of "-"
Well, that's a decent work anyway, and it is rather interesting to read it again.
(Especially the Forsaken part. I thought everyone forgets about it XP)
And you don't give us backgrounds of what happened that causes the personality swap.
Also as Chamel said, commas, or special usage of "-"
Well, that's a decent work anyway, and it is rather interesting to read it again.
(Especially the Forsaken part. I thought everyone forgets about it XP)