(New thread) Todesberührung (Shadowkirby) vs. Nox the Shadow Bringer (subzero1112)

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Feb 15, 2013 3:08 AM #884288
Remade new thread since the last one wasn't public and was locked.

So again, here are our battles! Vote fairly!

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Feb 15, 2013 3:17 AM #884297
Death’s Assailant
“The hunter becomes the hunted.”

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No mention of my previous battle since Shadow was my 3rd battle and Shaq was my 4th. The 4th just got released first.

Also, good luck to both of us.
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Feb 15, 2013 9:46 PM #884933
The poll has 5 days left until it closes.
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Feb 15, 2013 10:15 PM #884964
Great stories, but, is it really neccesary to

do this all the time, when you are telling your story

I mean It kind of makes the story fall

apart if you know what I mean.

It was a tough decision for me, but in the end, I find Shadowkirby's version easier to read.
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Feb 16, 2013 12:19 AM #885039
I liked Sub's point of view - Shadow's seemed to switch to one character and didn't focus on his own, so my vote vote goes out to Sub - greats stories both of you though
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Feb 16, 2013 2:23 AM #885153
Quote from Tenderwilly
is it really neccesary to
do this all the time, when you are telling your story.


What do you mean do "this" ?
If you mean the spacing between the lines, yes, since that is to distinguish when the characters are speaking.
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Feb 16, 2013 6:06 PM #886038
Well, I'd prefer the style you read in books. Ofcourse it's hard to distinguish who's talking sometimes, especially if you pick multiple points of view.
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Feb 16, 2013 6:33 PM #886062
Quote from Tenderwilly
Well, I'd prefer the style you read in books. Ofcourse it's hard to distinguish who's talking sometimes, especially if you pick multiple points of view.


Actually, more often than not, authors give dialogue of different characters their own paragraph, and starting a new one when they go to a new one. The difference is mostly subzero's usage of centering rather than going to the left.

Also, for some reason indenting doesn't work.

But I liked both stories, and how in both cases the characters had a connection.
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Feb 18, 2013 6:41 AM #887673
We're now tied in the poll.

Who'll win before the poll closes?
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Feb 19, 2013 2:05 AM #888581
I see, it would be difficult to think of a good follow up if we got tied, but if we must, we should think of a canon that both of us agree on.
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Feb 19, 2013 11:35 AM #889002
I like ShadowKirby better.
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Feb 20, 2013 8:08 AM #889995
I'm gonna lose again. *sarcastic happy face*

Well, congrats, Shadow.
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Feb 20, 2013 10:44 PM #890663
Quote from subzero1112
I'm gonna lose again. *sarcastic happy face*

Well, congrats, Shadow.


Thanks, sub. Sorry for the long wait to finish my battle.
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Feb 21, 2013 9:18 AM #891010
No problem