Fr0st (DragonFrost) vs. Raf (Lethal2)

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Mar 28, 2013 2:03 PM #928907
PLEASE VOTE FAIRLY!


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I have ever made, I don't have any ideas left so I quickly wrote, don't tell me why I rushed it.++



2002, 3rd of October, our man Raf, was in a park, sitting in a bench, but not only a park, the most famous place in the whole New York, the New York National Park (NYNP), it was built in the year 1723, by a man known as S.T.V Tasht, or you may call him for a full name as Senerope Targuz von Tasht, a legendary man who died at the age of 102, oldest man who died, now where is he? Up above the sky, Raf basically know him in the past few years, until now.

The park was empty, but only the man himself, Raf, the only one who was in the park, it was a sunny day, though there was a report that a coming storm would pass in the country, U.S.A itself, the biggest storm that the weather forecaster never ever learned.

"I guess I should smoke now." Raf said, picking up his smokes from his bag.

Suddenly a shadow was casted in the tree trunks, then it faded away very quick, like an assassin, Raf quickly stood up and picked up a rock that was found below the bench he is sitting with, he started to walk slowly, like a turtle, to find out who was the one who quickly ran through the woods.

"Anyone here?"

He quickly sighed and panted heavily before stepping at the back of the tree trunks that is in front of his sight, then he jumped, just to find a man smoking, sharpening his frost arrows with a sharp rock, with an appearance of a black shirt, having a brown bow just besides the man. The stranger quickly raised up his head and started to greet Raf a happy good morning.

"Good morning my little fellow! You may call me Frost, I live in my homeworld called the Inamorta!"

"Oh nice, yeah um, oh yeah, wait umm, why are you here? There's no such thing called as Inamorta here in the world!" said Raf.

"My homeworld Inamorta is in another dimension, not here in the Earth itself."

"Alright, what's your business here, why do you have bows and arrows?" asked Raf.

"It seems like you are stupid enough, just kidding, I came here to hunt some preys that we can eat in our dimension since this world looks like it has tons of meats and foods that we can cook, it seriously has tons of cows, or like you call rats because we have ran out of foods in Inamorta due to the last war that was done last week, my story on how I came here is the 13 of us from Inamorta constructed a portal that can send us in any dimensions/worlds, I went inside of it, then anything blurred, inside of the portal was very fast, you'll fall like the speed of light, then you'll crash somewhere in this world you called Earth."

"Oh nice story umm, you know it dude, it's danger here to hunt! The government might capture you and kill you forever, hunting here isn't allowed anymore!"

"Mind your own business bro, I know what I'm doing!"


Raf scratched his head, looking everywhere with his eyes confused, he then started to turn back and walk to light his smoke with his matches, he then threw the match just near the grass, he didn't even think that if he threw the burning match in the grass, it will make the grass go burn. But just about half of seconds, an arrow catched and shot the match, splitting the match into 2, then the fire faded away.

"Holy shit?"

It was Frost who prevented the match from falling through the grass, Raf's expression was seriously hilarious, Frost dropped his bow and said a word.

"Never throw a flammable material in the grass, use your common sense next time."

"What? Do you want to fight me or what? I don't want to fight right no-"

"I'm not forcing you to fight me, I really know what I'm doing, alright?"

Raf shaked his head slowly like he was ignoring him, he absorbed some smoke and released it on his nose, it was a good feeling when smoking in a sunny day, he turned back and removed his smoke and said to Frost a sentence:

"So what do you want?"

Frost ignored him, still sharpening his pack of arrows, Frost then spitted a saliva on the ground, he looked eye to eye contact at Raf.

"Nothing."

Raf nodded, he doesn't even know what to do, confused, what's wrong with this guy..., thought Raf deeply as he sighed, he picked up a small stone, he pretended that he was just standing while Frost was sharpening his arrows, he didn't noticed that Frost was focusing to him the whole day so he can scan what he will do next.

Raf quickly threw the stone and 1 seconds, an arrow quickly shot the stone, breaking it into pieces, it was fast as lightning! Raf didn't even saw how Frost reloaded his arrow, he was just fast, and concentrated the whole time.

"H-how did you even... do that?"

Frost inhaled a massive air into his nose, he then stood up and raised his head, he reloaded his bow with 3 arrows, focusing straightly, his target was Raf.

"Umm dude what are you doing, I didn't even do any thing!"

"Testing you, since you had powers."

"I don't have any powers at a-"

Frost proceeded to release his fingers to unleash the mighty fury of the frost arrows, each of the 3 arrows missed Raf's body, Raf then talked angrily.

"Oh, so you want to fight huh? Well let's see what you got!"

Frost smiled like a creepy person, he reloaded his frost arrow but only 1, Raf picked up the arrow that Frost shot to him, he charged the weapon and a glowing red appeared.

"Now that's what I called fun!" Frost said.

Both of them ran to each other, Frost aimed his first arrow at Raf's legs, though it missed due to lack of angle, Raf jumped in the sky while Frost reloads his bow, he aimed another piece of arrow, though it missed again, Raf fell in the ground, throwing his only arrow at Frost's bow, it was lucky one it didn't missed, Frost's bow flew in the corner of the bench, it was about 2-3 miles away from Frost.

"I'm screwed!" Frost said.

Frost quickly ran like an assassin, he picked up his bow, reloaded it with 3 arrows ---just in case that Frost removed the power of the tip of the arrow to prevent Raf from freezing so he would trick him--- and aimed it in Raf's arms, the 2 arrows missed, but the other one hit Raf's right legs brutally, it didn't sliced it, the tip of the arrow was cold like a North Pole ice was slammed into your legs.

"Shit! This hurt so bad! I need to remove this, but it's dangerous! It's cold damn it!"

Frost quickly ran and made a half knee just in front of Raf's face to hear his reaction on the newly aimed arrow on his legs.

"What the fuck man? Why did you do that! You're a shit man!"

"You call me a shit, Raf?"

Raf's right legs was bleeding, it was a huge pain he can feel, the trees smoothly shake, it was like a storm was coming, the clouds quickly is turning to dark.

"What's happening?" asked Raf

A storm was being heard up above the sky, lightnings was seen, both of the fighters quickly looked at their right side, there was a man standing, the man was just standing their, straightly.

"Wait is that... Aiman?" said both of the fighters.

The man was wearing a different outfit than the last time, he was wearing a green hoodie with a standard shoes, although his hair was just the same than the last time.

"Goddamn it, he's here, he's so overpowered when it comes into battle! Shit ass!" Raf said.

It was like Aiman was in the trees the whole day to watch what is Raf and Frost doing, then in a sudden way, Aiman started to walk straightly, although he stopped, with his face looking so overserious.

"What the heck is he doing?" Frost asked.

Aiman formed a great sword with the help of the fire element. Aiman himself started to say a word while inhaling the air from the great sky.

"What are you doing with the kid?" said Aiman with a furious voice.

"Do you care?" Frost quickly replied, reloading 1 arrow and pointing it in the face of Aiman.

Aiman wasn't moving nor shaking, he was just there, with his eye focused in the tip of the arrow that was made by Frost, Raf quickly stood while removing the arrow from his legs, he then moved backwards to avoid from being attacked, though he can't move very well due to his wound on his legs.

"You can't hit me with that half-assed arrow." said Aiman.

"You better start running!" replied Frost.

Aiman ignored him, with his body still staying in the ground, both of the fighters reached the battlefield, that means it's time for them to brawl each other, Raf wanted to stop the battle but both fighters was an ignorants.

"Your move?" asked Frost, with his fingers shaking while holding the bow

"I don't need a move." answered Aiman"

Raf quickly stood up and picked up a staff (stick) find in the trees to help him in standing, Aiman started to run with his great sword pointed at the arrow while Frost startd to aim the arrow.

"I don't want to do this, but it looks like your plan is to kill me!" said Frost"

He quickly released his finger, the arrow was sharp like it was forged in the mighty gods, the arrow's tip was hardly frost and iced, it was cold.

Aiman quickly slided his great sword in the air to chop the arrow into 2 pieces, it almost hit his face, Frost reloaded 2 pack of arrows, Aiman formed a shield with the Earth element in the ground, he shield was huge and it was brown, Frost noticed that the 2 arrows wouldn't do anything to Aiman, so instead he reloaded it with 5 arrows, the maximum, with the most cold arrow, Aiman started to place the shield infront of him, like a gladiator style. He then formed a spear with the electric element, the spear was releasing different white lightning bolts, Aiman quickly ran and jumped in the air, with his spear pointing below the ground, he slammed it and unleashed a strong earthquake in the spot, Raf and Frost flew away, Frost hit his back in the white obstacle, Raf hit his head in the bench.

"Mother of fuck! This man is dangerous, I guess I need to hit his head with my arrow, that would be good." said Frost

Aiman stood, disappearing his spear and shield, instead he formed a sniper rifle with the ice element he quickly reloaded the sniper and used the scope.

Raf stood up while holding his head, he then stood up and picked up a stone, Aiman touched the trigger, Frost reloaded 2 arrows, both of them were really serious, with the stone that Raf picked up, he charged it into 40% percent, with harder armor, he threw it as strong as he can at Frost's back, the stone flew and hit the back of Frost, it was strong and very painful, Frost fell down with his right hand holding back his back, it was bleeding, Aiman winked at Raf's, Aiman disappeared his weapons, he walked backwards. He stood there, sitting, Raf don't have any idea on why he sat, Aiman yelled.

"End him if you want! I'll let you do it on your own!"

Raf quickly nodded and picked up an arrow, he ran and ran until he's about 3 miles away from Frost, when he was near, he almost threw the arrow at Frost's head.

"STOP!" said Aiman.

Raf stopped, facing his head at Aiman's face, he dropped his arrow, then Aiman stood up walking nearby and started to talk.

"Why are you doing that?"

"You said you want me to kill him!" said Raf.

"We're just joking you dude, our plan was to trick you, we know you, and you were one of the fighter of the wRHG Tournament, you battled against Lan or Mile or whatever you call him, we saw you, and you were also brought to the hospital due to the massive uppercut that Lan did to you." replied Aiman.

"Yes Raf, we know you seriously, this plan started yeserday, me and Aiman are friends seriously, haha, and sorry for me hitting your legs with my arrow, you didn't noticed that my arrow can freeze peoples, but I removed it so I can trick you." Frost butted in.

"So that means, we were having fun, what the fuck dude? You scared my ass, I was about to kill you so you can go to hell, but you guys were just tricking me since at the beginning I found you smoking, what the fucking shit man." replied Raf.

"I caught tons of bad words on your sentence dude, haha, and yeah, it was our plan since yesterday, isn't if fun? Haha, oh guys, wanna go to a restaurant to eat something!" asked Aiman.

"Yeah sure, I'm hungry, seriously." answered Frost.

"Yeah me too, you guys fucked me up, I almost raged... haha." said Raf.


All of them proceeded to walk while Frost pick up his weapons, he hid it in his backpack and started to walk with the 2 guys to eat something, laughing each other. The End.

yeah that's it, thanks to my friends, kingkickass, Bladed Fire, Triss, Aiman, T King, J.Christian, techmaru (though his banned...) Mark XD, P12323, NrgFA, Blizzyguy, Sans.FS, Xilea, dickybayu, -yuno-, RenZen, RF.Kira, BlueFlame and those who I forgot, thanks to my clan Retribution, thanks to Hewitt, Crankuba and Lobotomizer for inspiring me to write since in the beginning I made my first character, thanks to Hyun for inspiring me to animate, thanks to Zetabrand (Nhazul, you're awesome! <3) for inspiring me to make a clan on RHG. (so off-topic lol.), thanks to everyone who are my friends or whatsoever, thanks to all people in the world (so much thanks to. lol.), and goddamn lastly, thanks to all members of Codex, and to everyone I forgot, I love you all, even though you guys hate me because I always spam and do something weird or whatever but I don't care about that, friendship is how life works <3. and thanks to facebook for making me have fun and chill with my friends by chatting, thanks to skype and irc <3.

time I spent writing this, i used a stopwatch from my iPhone, so yeah: 2h 34m 12s
I wrote this non stop without standing or eating in 2 hours.
I used notepad to write all of this story.
I used a pocket dictionary to learn words and add them here.
All characters I used here are Aiman (_Aiman_), Frost (Bladed Fire) and My wRHG (Rafael "Raf" Leonardo).
I suck at writing shits because I'm asian you asses, lol.
I rushed this becuz I'm out of ideas and I felt like dictionary makes my mind go twist because of small words..
so yeah that's it, now get out and make me a sandwich! oh I forgot, good luck to you Bladed Fire if you are reading this credits, I made the credits small words because it will take up so much space here in my story... damn it I'm tired typing so bye guys, good luck to both of us...
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und with an arrow stuck inside of it. “Not bad…” Fr0st was talking to himself again.

A while later, Fr0st was off to the familiar forests that bordered Inamorta to hunt for animals when he saw a strange shadow that he didn’t recognize as something from the forest. Just in case, Fr0st shot an arrow at the shadow. No movement. Then he shot a few more more. Suddenly a tall blonde man in a brown jacket and jeans appeared angrily.

“WHAT THE FUCK WERE YOU DOING?”

“Oh sorry, I didn’t recognize you.”

“ARE YOU SAYING I DON’T LOOK LIKE A HUMAN OR SOMETHING?”

“Of course you do, it was just that your shadow was sort of blurry. What are you doing here, though?”

“WHAT DOES IT LOOK LIKE I’M DOING?”

“Uh… You got lost?” Fr0st said.

“WHAT DID YOU…”

“Uh...You’re lost, aren't you?”

“HECK NO! I'm- uh...- I'm finding some food ok? Got broke, so I’m trying to grab something to eat,” The stranger said.

“Oh. I see.”

“You insulting me, punk?”

“What? What are you-“

Suddenly, the stranger whips out his scythe and leans it against Fr0st’s neck.
“I'm going to teach you some manner RIGHT HERE RIGHT NOW! “

“Hm, what to do? DON’T PANIC! And… AHA!” Thought Fr0st.

“LOOK! FOOD!” Fr0st shouted!

“Heh. You think I'm that easy to fool, idiot?”

“LOOK! WOMEN!” Fr0st shouted again!

“WHERE? WHERE?” The stranger looks around.

Meanwhile, Fr0st silently climbs up a tree nearby.

“HUH??? WHERE DID THAT MOTHER FUCKER GO?”

“Damn… Hope he doesn’t know that I’m on top of the tree RIGHT IN FRONT OF
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Mar 28, 2013 2:08 PM #928917
Hm, your story is 2.3k (not counting credits, which isn't included in the story i guess.) SO I can change it to DragonFrost?
Oh btw just cuz you're asian doesnt mean that's an excuse :/ I'm chinese.
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Mar 28, 2013 2:11 PM #928928
Wait. Fr0st, you're Chinese?
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Mar 28, 2013 2:20 PM #928944
Lol. I live in canada (usually, about 70% of the time), but I'm Chinese.
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Mar 28, 2013 2:23 PM #928949
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Lol. I live in canada (usually, about 70% of the time), but I'm Chinese.


I thought ur a pure canadian :O.My info bout you must be fixed."fixing"
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Mar 28, 2013 2:26 PM #928955
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I thought ur a pure canadian :O.My info bout you must be fixed."fixing"


Creepy... Stalker. Oh no! I'm losing lol
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Mar 28, 2013 2:47 PM #928973
Letahl2: GREAT STORY. Flow was nice, grammar was decent, and dialogue spacing... OH MY GOD. You actually understand it. Haha. One thing though. You need more description in your story, have people visualize your story. There are also a few grammar mistakes, but not very prominent ones. Good job Lethal.

DragonFr0st: WAAAY TOO MUCH DIALOGUE. Not enough actual fighting. Your overuse of dialogue takes away from the reader's enjoyment. Use more descriptive actions to keep your reader hooked. Your dialogue use and spacing was excellent, but there is never a need for THAT MUCH. Overall, your story was funny and pretty well though out. Just describe more and use less speech.
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Mar 28, 2013 3:35 PM #929000
I have one thing to say to the both of you:

Grammar you guys, grammar.

PS: Lethal, nobody cares if you rushed it, and frankly I didn't even notice it when I was reading your story.
"Rushing in 2.5 hours is not actually a rush, haha"
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Mar 29, 2013 3:00 AM #929482
No I'm screwed ;)
Edit: just checked poll results, I have 4 votes >.< thanks guys!
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Mar 29, 2013 7:45 AM #929599
Wahaha, I'm in that story. Both of you made a wonderful job. But I dunno who to vote.

EDIT : I made up my mind. My vote goes to Lethal. Fr0st, honestly, too many dialogues. But it's so hilarious.
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Mar 29, 2013 1:49 PM #929746
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Thanks and I agree, DragonFrost's story was seriously hilarious and I love to read it again and again <3. Lastly thanks.


Lol 7-4 lethal you are a good writer D: if I could vote I would vote for you
I have trouble writing fighting when my guy is an archer, I'm considering updating him. Btw is it allowed to fight the same person twice?
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Mar 29, 2013 10:26 PM #930113
Yes it is allowed, by the way if anything it would be easy to write an archer, but the easiest is a mage or some sort of magic type person, its truly a pain having to write about a melee only soldier, it gets repetitive and boring seeing the same charge and slash over and over again so I mix it up a bit to keep the reader watching.
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Mar 30, 2013 3:14 AM #930366
@Lethal: o you... demon at writing, i didnt even read the whole story and already voted :D
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Mar 30, 2013 4:22 AM #930405
finished reading both story....still you best XD
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Mar 30, 2013 1:59 PM #930695
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Want a rematch if I win? : D


Not if. You will win. But maybe later. I'm trying to think of a topic for Friday Funk, and I suck at multi tasking (usually I forget about both)