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True Friend Poem

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Apr 30, 2013 6:03 PM #960804
Some people cry,
As a friend I ask why,
Offering a hand,
And helping them stand,
Some only need a friend,
One that will defend,
One that will have your back,
And give what you lack,
To hear you clearly,
And hold you dearly,
To wipe your eyes,
And to forgive your lies,
To heal your scars,
And break those iron bars,
The ones that keep you restricted,
The ones that make you feel convicted,
There for you through thick and thin,
There for you even in sin,

That,

That is a true friend.
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Apr 30, 2013 11:31 PM #961011
Dem rhymes. That is best "happy" poem I've ever read.
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May 2, 2013 7:36 AM #962488
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I like how the poem is shaped like a jug, but other than that the rhymes are too, nursery.


I thought it to be better than that, although I don't generally read poems with rhymes.
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May 2, 2013 9:53 AM #962583
Quote from Hewitt
To elaborate, it sounds like the rhymes are forced. They sound alright, but the poems looks like the rhymes are there merely to enforce the pattern..


Fair enough.
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