This is a short poem about a life of child who grew to lose his faith in god.... Enjoy



I grew up to believe that God is always the answer.

My father was a head priest

He would pray everyday

But God never answered

Were is he?

Is he above us?

Is he laughing at us struggle?

Is he going to help us?

As the days drew on i looked at the sky

Hoping that God will answer my call

Every night i sit and pray

For one day he will help us

That night there was a knock

That night there was blood

That night my father died

That night my mother died

That night my sister died

That night i lost my eyes

From there i lost hope

From there i lost my Life

Who did i pray to for all these years?

Why would God take my Family?

Why would he test my faith like that?

Years passed as a grew

I stopped caring

I never listened to anyone anymore

I grew to be myself

I tested my own life

So as days turned into weeks

and weeks turn into months

I never thought i could be happy

I never want a life a false hopes and dreams

I want my life to be complete

Today, all i have is more answers than prayers

All i have is my Life

Not a life lead by a god

No, a Life lead by me

People Still tell me god is the solution

But i All i can tell them is god blinded me from my life, and my eyes are the proof

So when the earth becomes straight, On the day of the Equinox

On the day i Lost my life

On the day i lost my hope

All i can say is.......

There is no god in my life.




This is a short poem, It was Inspired by my wRHG, I thank all who read this, Its Great that i can Express a poem to you all.

Pretty straight forward and simple. There's not much to it, but at least it had a nice depressing story. I have to ask, was the loss of captial on the word 'God' intentional?

when referring to "a god", it's gramatically correct to leave it un-capitalised, as it's not a specific noun (such as, for instance, saying I have "a cat"). It's also correct when he says "no god", because, again, it's unspecific and plural. Only when referring to "THE" God should it be capitalised. However, I did note that he wrote: "People Still tell me god is the solution", which should be capitalised. So, either you're correct and it's intentional to signify his loss of belief/faith, or it's a mistake.

I liked the poem, but there are a couple of mistakes, I feel:

"Years passed as a grew" - should be "I grew"
"I never want a life a false hopes and dreams" - should be "of false hopes and dreams"
"Today, all i have is more answers than prayers" - should be "all I have are" (I believe, considering it's plural)
"But i All i can tell them" - should be "But all I can tell them"

Not flaws with the poem itself, merely some things that a proof-read could have fixed.

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Pretty straight forward and simple. There's not much to it, but at least it had a nice depressing story. I have to ask, was the loss of captial on the word 'God' intentional?

Yes it was. Not many people notice when i do things like that.

I still believe in God. I might end up like you which I hope won't happen.

Automaton, it's capitalized for Christian Catholics since God is our god. I think it's His name.
We also capitalize the pronouns used, I think it's for respect, same goes with Jesus.

I hope atheists here would respect each others religions and not help others be converted into atheists as well.

Jesus man, that was deep.

I can't say I agree with the message, but sheesh man. Thats depressing.

Can I ask, how exactly did you lose your family?


And also if I can add, I know this is all very depressing, but I can't help seeing this of some cliche story of a low faithed boy who experienced a tragedy and then lost faith in everything because of it.
Don't get the wrong idea, you have my sympathy, but maybe you should think about throwing your beliefs away.
Just a thought.

@ Mikematic I believe that it's not a real thing that happened. Like he said, it's inspired by his WRHG
o w o

also, sweet poem man~ love the story and the flow, not much of a poem writer myself and I honestly can't find anything for you to improve on, besides capatilazing "I" since that drives me insane, but besides that everything's pretty good~
Keep it up! :3

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@ Mikematic I believe that it's not a real thing that happened. Like he said, it's inspired by his WRHG
o w o

Oh, that makes more sense, sorry to intrude.

@Hewitt Aren't most of those question are irrelevant to the story, or at least are not essential?

I think it's more of a context thing you have to interpret yourself, but it is pretty vague in the manner in which it's composed.
You still got a ways to go, santiago.

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I think it's more of a context thing you have to interpret yourself, but it is pretty vague in the manner in which it's composed.
You still got a ways to go, santiago.

Shut it, Arancibia or do i have get the foot?

And also, Hewitt, I appreciate your input its always helpful to hear from another writers opinion, But its just a poem, So keep your feathers together. But in all i still appreciate your advice