Female version of Deus I made. Inspired by Mr. Yoshikaito's thread. I decided to make this thread separate for comments.



CnC and such.

Her neck needs to be a little bit wider. Just a little.
Her tits are weird. That's about it. Oh and clean up the line art. Looks sketchy.

She has a really long torso.

Her torso don't get along with her legs ! The finger need work the left hand's fingers need shading !
But the overall Shape Was Good ! 7/10

really neat :D ,that right higheel ,fix it :D

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Her tits are weird.

How so?

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She has a really long torso.

Thats part of the style, if you'd compare it to the arms and legs, its not that long, although I still have anatomy to correct though.

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Her torso don't get along with her legs

What do you mean?

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the left hand's fingers need shading

It does have shading, but the FX cover it too much.

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really neat :D ,that right higheel ,fix it :D

Yeah, I'm bad with shoes haha.

Thanks everyone for CnC, I'll be sure to fix things, after you guys hopefully clear up the things I don't understand.

Her BREASTS aren't so much as weird, as they look like they are positioned at an awkward angle. Shading in that area can help immensely and maybe they won't look so weird next time, haha. Or maybe try positioning the torso into more of "turned-away" angle so you can add dimension to her breasts.

What Falcon means is that the way her legs are facing don't correspond well with way her torso is angled. It's easy to see that you made it look like she is turning slightly by the way she places her right foot, but it just looks funny if you don't notice the heel. Re-color the shadow to a dark-grey color so it becomes easier to see the foot itself. This will also allow people to see which way her body is facing.

The torso looks funny at first glance, but by looking at the style and the thinness/length of her other limbs, it becomes natural. Along with the neck. It doesn't seem to be too thin when you take in the full photo.

The folds in the shirt and cloak are adequate (though I myself could not do much better, haha) but there are no folds whatsoever in the jeans. They may be tight-fitting jeans, but even they have some form of folds.

The only thing I see wrong with the line-art, is that at the base of the heel, there seem to be two nubs joining the heel itself. On closer inspection, there are other nubs on the toe of the same shoe, and two other nubs jutting from the "forward-faced" heel. The line-art is probably just your style, am I right?

I like it. Keep it up Sub. Hope I managed to clear a few things up a bit.

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She has a really long torso.

No it's just fine. The problem is that she has really small shoulders for her head. If we're talking about some form of realism, the shoulder width should be at least 1.5x of the head width (Which is still pretty thin by the way, but adequate enough to look good. The small shoulders give zero space for the torso, and this makes it unnaturally thin compared to its length.

As for the breasts...Well, They're drawn really wrong. For starters, they stick out too much. and why is the shirt wrapping around them? It's not a leotard. They also droop too much. They are lobs of fat, but how low they are makes me think she's more than 60.

Her legs are awkwardly placed. It feels as though she's about to fall over. Have you tried to pose yourself?

Feet are on the same horizontal plane even though the right foot should be (rightfully) a little forward than the other.

Hips are too small. Woman have bigger hips to make way for their...reproductive organs. About the same width of the shoulders is the norm (assuming the shoulders are in the right proportions themselves). Also, with smaller hips you won't give the crotch any room at all. A crotch is important.

The hands need work. I don't have much advice other than taking references from real life.

As for the clothing...The folds are largely nonsensical, as is the lighting. Her shirt and pants wrap around her like some leotard, and if you straighten her jacket with those folds you'd realise it's a ragged tarp that won't look like a jacket. Again, draw from life. You should use lines of action to denote where and which parts of the clothing do the folds lead to, so they don't end up contradicting each other.

Judging by the shadow the light source should be coming from her front/right, yet the back of her jacket which would normally be exposed to light is dark. There are more examples, but the main point is that you need to keep in mind where the light source truly is. A bit of logic is all, really.

That's all I have. Work on your anatomy and clothing, is my main point. The cartoonish style is somewhat refreshing though, I'll give you that.

I gotta say, I died a little when I saw Lobotomizer posted, but I also sought to have him here. XD

Thanks all for the CnCs

All of it will be useful.

Hey there Nanite check out the new photo of Nelieblanc that I added I kinda replaced the old photo cuz Nelieblanc (girl version) has the same birthmark and baseball cap like Neoblake(original). If u saw it, did u like it although it isn't much?