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Jun 24, 2014 9:57 PM #1210792
Another story waa hoo

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Jul 1, 2014 3:44 AM #1213257
I tried to CnC this, but there's a lot of grammatical errors. I love hack n slash novels, and although this was an alright read, I would've preferred more character development, but the story was too routine to be good, and not well written enough to be exceptional. The characters were very one-dimensional, and in my personal opinion, tourture writing cannot be "physical"

When you write torture lit, you can't just tell me what he's doing. Tell me what he feels like he's doing, and how his victim is reacting, and how that reaction makes him feel, as well as all the feelings welling up within him; the excitement, anxiety, sense of power and the unadulterated evil.

Not a bad place to start. But don't get into gore shit. I love me some torture shit, but don't write exclusively about it. Either make me love the torture and hate the victim, or love the victim and hate the torturer. It makes it either more exhilarating or helpless.

Don't walltext either. Learn to properly break up your paragraphs, and thus, make your stuff easier to read.
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