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wRHG - Arthur Castus

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Jun 30, 2014 6:33 AM #1212890
Arthur Castus

Name: Arthur Castus/Artorius Castus

Abilities:
Excalibur- The sword can cut through any type of solid, absorb fire based magics and cast Light magics.

Royal Shield- The Shield can deflect any type of projectiles, from bullets to fire balls to missiles.

The Light- Arthur can use his Light powers to blind enemies, burn Dark souls or Cleanse their Corruption.

Weakness: He has a very bad accuracy, he is a human after all, so he has human weaknesses like uncontrable anger, when Arthur is mad, his King's Mark is exposed, and it is exposed enemies can attack on the Mark and stops Arthur's Light powers, when he blinds his enemies, he is tired because of the power drained from him.

About/Backstory: Arthur is a descendant of the legendary knight with the same name. Arthur is borned in Hytlegrad, where Imperial Knights are trained. When he reached 15, his father gave him his ancestor's equipments the Excalibur andthe Royal Shield.
By 20, Hytlegrad is under attack by Corrupted Demigods. Arthur seeks help from Merlin, his ancestor's guardian. Merlin grants him the power of Light. Arthur then used this power against the Corrupted Demigods. Arthur realises that the Corruption had spread across the world. He seeks Merlin's help once. This time, Merlin offers himself as a guardian. Then they began the journey to stop the Corruption.

Personality: A strong-willed man, a very skillfull swordsman, hates insects very much.

Appearance: Wears a black trench coat with a shield symbol as a Knight badge, has a black wavy hair, wears blue denim jeans and has purple eyes.

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Read the Chronicles of a Knight!
Chapter 1
http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?85796-Chronicles-of-A-Knight

Chapter 2 & Chapter 3
http://forums.stickpage.com/showthread.php?85810-Chronicles-of-A-Knight-Chap-2-amp-Chap-3&p=1213313#post1213313

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Jun 30, 2014 7:07 AM #1212909
I am curious, how does "a very skillful swordsman" affect his personality?
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Jun 30, 2014 7:45 AM #1212917
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I am curious, how does "a very skillful swordsman" affect his personality?


He could be arrogant sometimes
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Jun 30, 2014 11:42 AM #1212969
I've got to go to work in 7 minutes, so I don't really have time for a long, elaborate comment, but you really might want to expand on most of what you have in there. His personality could still be any number of things, especially considering you didn't showcase it much in the demo, black hair could still be any type of style, and everyone has weaknesses, above just being human. For example, some of mine as a human being are heights, low stamina, overconfidence, and stubbornness. Human is just a cop-out, I would like to see this whole thing just a little more in depth.
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Jul 1, 2014 10:55 PM #1213537
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I've got to go to work in 7 minutes, so I don't really have time for a long, elaborate comment, but you really might want to expand on most of what you have in there. His personality could still be any number of things, especially considering you didn't showcase it much in the demo, black hair could still be any type of style, and everyone has weaknesses, above just being human. For example, some of mine as a human being are heights, low stamina, overconfidence, and stubbornness. Human is just a cop-out, I would like to see this whole thing just a little more in depth.

Done Crank! I'd love to read your commentaries more about my wRHG! Tell me if there is more that I have to add
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Jul 2, 2014 12:52 AM #1213568
Heh, alright, been a while since I had something close to a CnC!

You say he can cast light magic, maybe I'm just being uncreative here, but to me that'd be like blinding flashes or having his sword glow. What exactly are his magic attacks? Is it simply one of those, or are we talking beams and slashes? If so, what is the extent that they accomplish?

What's a dark soul? Is this someone who is naturally evil, a demon, or just something strictly to your storyline that the other wRHGs would not possess?

What's the King's Mark and how quickly does his magic drain him?

I would still like to see a bit more in his personality. As an example, I might just wind up doing myself at the end.

I'd still like to see a little more of personality, but I'll just example that as well rather than ask for specifics.

For your demo, here's a big way appearance and personality can help a story flow.

Ever wear out a pair of shoes? Like, they'll start out maybe a little uncomfortable until you break them in, but after that they get nice and cozy. After that though, that's where we can run them down. Character names can be like that.

The Shade Monster attacks Arthur for another time, but Arthur slices the Shade Monster so fast until the Grand Knight was impressed of Arthur's attacks.

The Shade Monster attacks Arthur for another time, but the purple-eyed man slices the feral beast so fast that the Grand Knight is impressed by the warrior's offense.

When you're breaking in a character it might take a minute to establish trait X belonging to person A, but once you do it's smooth sailing. Additionally, words in general grow tiring in you over use them. Try to at least have a couple sentences between the same words, not counting obvious exceptions. Grammar was kinda rough, but I'm not very good at explaining the rules of it all too well.

And now I owe you an example:

Appearance:
Usually bearing a neutral expression or light smirk, Crank can usually be spotted in his trusty blue jeans or black hoodie, unzipped and revealing a plain desaturated shirt. He stands at average height at just over average weight, but prides himself on his rugged appearance after that. He'll let his facial hair grow just past a 5 o'clock shadow if he has no were to be, and the brown hair that would normally be down to his eyebrows usually stands straight up, to the point that he's been told by multiple sources it'd look like Goku if it was bleach blonde. Eyes being hazel, his shirt and surrounding effect their appearance more than anything else. More often that not they look brown, but green pops if he's in his olive shirt or traces of blue can be seen if it coats the walls around him. Although he doesn't speak much, exaggerated hand motions accompany his words.

Personality:
A usually calm person, Crank experiences a strong lack of powerful emotions and has a tendency to internalize what he doesn't express, which by chance is most of them. Although quiet, he'll open up around his friends but even then he'll outright lie if an exposed secret would complicate something. Morals and compulsions dominate his behaviors, but being a habitual person he doesn't mind nor does he get too board. He's quick to compete, quicker to rally, and determined to make things happen, but caution and trying to keep all his bases covered are often his downfall. Optimism does however, keep him from falling to far though.

How would people describe you, or how would you describe yourself?
Don't answer that, just think about it and then describe Arthur in similar depth.
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Jul 2, 2014 2:42 AM #1213596
Have you read the Chronicles of a Knight? It'll explain SOME of your questions.
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Jul 2, 2014 2:52 AM #1213601
Not quite yet, I'm fairly behind on everything again, and while I do understand where you're coming from, that's kinda the point of the profile. You come here to figure out everything you need to know because it's all in one spot. Like, if someone challenges you, they shouldn't necessarily have to read everything your wrote to get a feel for a character. That being said, it helps, but it shouldn't be a requirement.
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Jul 4, 2014 12:36 AM #1214617
Ah... Another fellow human. Can I have someone who doesn't use Skills and Elements but Fundamental Forces?
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Jul 4, 2014 12:38 AM #1214619
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Ah... Another fellow human. Can I have someone who doesn't use Skills and Elements but Fundamental Forces?


Light isn't an element