So, I found this website that gives you a prompt and a target amount of characters to write. It's kind of stupid, but I did it anyway because it was something to do. My prompt was:
a big prehistoric fellow kills dogs stranded on a desert Caribbean island

Enjoy.




I am Murd.


"Build boat," they told Murd, and build boat Murd did. Murd sailed boat, but where did boat get Murd? Boat got Murd stuck on dumb island. How many are the trees on dumb island? Maybe ten or fifteen. Too much sand on dumb island. How many are the savage dogs on dumb island? Maybe one hundred.



It all started when Scov came back from his hunting. Scov brought back a new dead animal. It was a big bird. A big bird that does not fly. It is easy to hunt, Scov says. He called it "Reya". Reya is stupid name. All names should be one grunt. Dog, cat, bird, fish, frog, Murd, Scov, Auns, Fen, Glurg, and all the names in our tribe.


When Scov brought Reya to the tribe, the tribe was impressed. My family loved Scov. People gave a name to finding new things. They called finding new things "scover". Glurg scovered Reya. That's what our tribe does. They make new action words from the names of the people who do them. My father, Auns, is the head of the tribe. People come to him with their problems. He makes the solutions. Now giving solutions to problems is called "aunser". It is the way of our tribe, but that does not mean Murd should like it.


Murd hates Scov. Murd is jealous. Murd should be the one who is known for scovering things. It was what he wanted from the beginning of his life. He loves to explore, and he wants honor. He needs honor.


Murd went to his brother, sister, mother, and father, Auns. He asked what he should do, and he waited for an aunser. Auns told him, "Build boat." Boat is a new word. Murd did not know the meaning of boat, so he asked his father what it was. "Boat is a hollow trunk that floats on water. You can sit in it. I thought of the idea now." Murd's family agreed with the idea. They thought that things could be scovered across the big water.


Murd obeyed his family. He hollowed out a tree trunk and made sure it floated before going off over the big water. He spent many days in boat, so it was a good thing that he brought some meat. But then he realized that the meat was Reya meat and he became angry. He spit it into the water. He could withstand the hunger. Murd was twice the man Scov was.


But now where has boat landed Murd? He is now on dumb island with many angry dogs. Murd is hungry. The only thing to do now is to try to kill the beasts and eat their meat. The problem is that Murd will not be able to cook the meat. There are not many trees on dumb island, and the only trees that are there are wet trees; they are filled with water. It is good for drinking, but bad for fire-starting. Murd will write again after he eats dogs.


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Murd has been eating now. In fact, Murd is full, but he still eats. He loves hunting and killing the dogs. He has also found that the wet trees have big round food hanging from in between the branches. When he breaks them open he finds food to eat, but now he does not like to do that. He prefers killing the dogs.


Chasing and killing the dogs are the best parts of Murd's day. He loves to wrap his hands around the dogs' necks and squeeze hard. His hands are so big that they go all the way around the dogs' necks. He even killed a dog with one hand one time. He just grabbed and pressed hard, feeling the breaking bones. One of the bones even came out and went through Murd's hand, but it did not stop him. He continued to kill the dog and later pulled out the bone.


At first, the raw meat was not good, but now it is good. It is tasty, and the dogs are making babies, so there is more meat for Murd.


Murd will write again soon.


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Over the past twenty days, Murd has been building a new boat out of the wet trees. He peels the shells of the trees off and lets them dry in the sun. Then he layers them together so that they will float on water.


Murd is wanting to return to his tribe, but he does not want to live with them anymore. Murd has become a lover of killing. He wants to feel what a dead person feels like beneath his hands. He wants to chase down every person, one by one, and squeeze the life out of them. It will be so much fun.


Murd hates Scov because he was honored. Murd hates his family because they sent him on the boat to nearly starve to death. He will get his revenge.


Murd will kill them all, and he will love every moment of it. Best of all, Murd will make sure that something is named after him. He will make sure that he is honored until the end of time.

"a wild lion whisperer is drinking alcohol"
That is going to be on my mind all day. You bastard.

That being said, mad respect for the perspective you chose to go after! Extremely ballsy move, and I give you mad props for it!

That being said, I think the perspective itself has a lot of issues in it of itself, which is ultimately going to make my CnC redundant. Again, the concept of a 1st person story from someone who talks in third person kicks ass, but it also gets confusing imminently until you catch on, and rather than looking like it's the narrator with the severely limited vocabulary, it looks like the issue belongs to the writer. I think a general third person story would've been a more effective delivery, but I do feel you though, I prefer 1st person when I write and I've got a character who doesn't know all too many words either. It just wouldn't work. The only thing I can critique here is the imbalance of Murd's intelligence/linguistic skills. Here's kinda what I'm getting at:

I am Murd.

"Build boat," they told Murd, and build boat Murd did. Murd sailed boat, but where did boat get Murd? Boat got Murd stuck on dumb island. How many are the trees on dumb island?

Those were the only two syllable words he uses, which gives the sense of either low intelligence or vocabulary.

People come to him with their problems. He makes the solutions. Now giving solutions to problems is called "aunser". It is the way of our tribe, but that does not mean Murd should like it.

Just a little while later, he suddenly seems much smarter. I don't know, it just feels like it takes away from it.

I did really enjoy your foreshadowing however, I found that to be extremely clever!

Anyway though, it's good to see you writing again! This was for sure fresh and I hope to see more out of ya!

Thanks for the reply. It was confusing trying to determine whether or not I should use I or he as a pronoun for Murd because he does speak in third person. I used he all but for the first sentence.
I guess he does seem to become smarter later on. I didn't want to use improper grammar the whole way through because it was confusing for me, and I thought that readers might get confused as well.
Anyways, thanks again for the criticism. I appreciate it.