Stick Page Forums Archive

Sunnydale Home - Rykosar vs Sirius

Started by: SaulMurphy | Replies: 3 | Views: 859

SaulMurphy
2

Posts: 290
Joined: Oct 2013
Rep: 10

View Profile
Jul 21, 2014 8:51 AM #1221291
Here is the Civil War battle between Kyra's Rykosar and Boomerangreturns's Sirius Nightshade. They have the luck of being in an oldage home called "Sunnydale Home". Enjoy, may the best writer win.

Sirius Nightshade:
Sunnydale's Friendly Neighborhood Sociopath: (Click to Show)


Rykosar:

Spoiler (Click to Show)
panic and concern, his bearded homeless companion following into the retirement building as the elder limped inside. Marat peeked over the ancient man’s shoulder to the younger man and the green eyes piercing like daggers into Rykosar’s own.

“Iz tis, ehm, hwon uf hyour behttul men?” He would ask with a sheepishness that didn’t seem normal for a man of his girth.

“No.” Rykosar responded, startling Marat with his bluntness. The old gladiator’s eyes trace over the forming crowd of elderly before snapping back to the young assaulter, addressing Marat still. “Get these people out of here. I’ll take care of this.”

“Whill du, eld sobaka.” Marat followed this by giving a rather light hearted pat on Rykosar’s shoulder, likely to keep himself from falling into panic. He started left and began trying to move some of the residents back, if to give Rykosar some space before leading some outside.

With old man’s gaze diverted, the younger gladiator pulled up his blade and pushed out in a charge towards Rykosar. The blade was brought up as he neared, dragging up across the old man’s left arm as Rykosar pulled the arm up to shield his face from the weapon. It slid cleanly through the leather of his coat and into his skin, biting through and drawing blood. Or something like blood.

The black and red mixture sat along the edge of the weapon. The younger man looked to it expectantly, expression twisting as nothing happened.

Rykosar took quick advantage of this pause and aimed a punch, his left fist contacting man’s jaw. It stuck true, but didn’t carry as much force had he used his metal one instead. “Can I have your name and reason, young man?” He’d speak, watching the young man stumble back before plopping into a lounge chair.

With a heavy scowl bearing teeth, the younger gladiator quickly jumped back to his feet and brought his hands to chest height. As he twisted his open palm, black tendrils formed from the ground, peering out from the shadows of a coffee table. The shadows slipped through the obstacle course of people, even passing under Marat’s boots which caused a start and a “Der'mo!” from the bearded man, his pace quickening but his words unable to keep up with his haste.

As the swirls of black reached the young gladiator, they clawed up his legs and slithered down his arm, gathering in the hand wielding his blade then began to reach out. They began extending and shaping into what appeared to be a bat from the handle of his blade. He grinned, feeding off of Rykosar’s expression of shock when witnessing his power. “Sirius. Lord of the Night.” He announced, fingers clenched the handle of his blunt shadow weapon as two sides formed near the front, allowing it to take on the shape of a hammer.

“As for purpose-” He stole the distance between them with his weapon, swinging out and bringing a side of the head to the old man’s temple. A cold pain flashed down the old man’s spine, b
Boomerang
2

Posts: 4,045
Joined: Jun 2013
Rep: 10

View Profile
Jul 21, 2014 2:48 PM #1221411
I'd like to say good fight to Kyra, and a great job of portraying Sirius as the psychopath he is. I certainly enjoyed reading it, and may the better person win.
Crank
2

Posts: 1,849
Joined: Feb 2012
Rep: 10

View Profile
Jul 22, 2014 1:26 AM #1221626
Great job to both of you, but I had to go with Kyra with this one! I think the two of you portrayed the setting quite well, but I ultimately found her characters to be a bit fuller.

Boomerang:
I found Nightshade's perspective to be very well defined, but he seemed to be the only who's mind I could really get into. Like, a lot of the other people were like deflated balloons who just needed to be filled up with a little bit of emotion. Rykosar especially, considering his large role in the story.

And for a moment, the two just stood opposite of each other, staring into one another’s menacing irises. Everybody wondered; Who would come out of this battle conscious, or even alive? Sirius showed disdain in his expression. He wanted to be the man standing tall. The size did not matter here, for Sirius had the speed. That was what he had used this whole time to stay on top of the battle at hand.

Screen time just wasn't balanced enough for me, I would've liked to see some up close shots of Rykosar too.

And for a moment, the two just stood opposite of each other, staring into one another’s menacing irises. Everybody wondered; Who would come out of this battle conscious, or even alive? Sirius showed disdain in his expression while Rykosar held a quiet determination. His furrowed brow was impossible to detect through the mass of wrinkles on his forehead, but a knowing smile found itself on his lips before long. Sirius' frown deepened in reply, he wanted to be the man standing tall. The old man's size did not matter here, for Sirius had the speed. That was what he had used this whole time to stay on top of the battle at hand.

I'm not saying Rykosar has to have exactly as much face time as Sirius, but I deffidenly think main characters should all share the spotlight to a degree.

Still a very good story however!

Kyra:
The only thing I can really say is that I would've liked to see more of the audience gathered, I think they would've played a very interesting element to the story and I know you can be hilarious when you really want to be! Very solid story, and I found everyone you used to be very human!

Again though, very valiant fight from the two of you, and I wish you both the best of luck!
ErrorBlender
2

Posts: 4,399
Joined: Feb 2012
Rep: 10

View Profile
Jul 26, 2014 4:32 PM #1223475
Awesome fight from both of you and I have to admit I didn't expect the ending of Boomerang's.

BoomerangReturns CnC:
cnc (Click to Show)


Kyra CnC:
cnc (Click to Show)
Website Version: 1.0.4
© 2025 Max Games. All rights reserved.