I've listed some of the highlights I enjoyed from your piece:

-First order of business, I like the length of the story. Eight pages is pretty impressive. I realize that it's usually quality over quantity, but I still have to share my admiration.
-I really like the choreography you constructed for the fight. Most of it was well thought out, and a good deal of it was well executed.
-That ending was something else. "Ironic is it not, that our battle is on Hallow’s Eve? Where humans frolic around masquerading as monsters? Whereas we, masquerade as humans?" Like, damn. That was deep. Kudos to you.
-Some of your descriptions were really well thought out, and were worded perfectly. For instance, in one of the first paragraphs you described the naked branches of a tree clawing at the sky to reach the stars. I loved it, absolutely loved. There was a handful of little nuggets like that one throughout your story, and I just have to say they were great.
-Your portrayal of Mancer was spot on, and impressively close to the way Cav portrayed his own character; cold and calculating. ANd of course, Bl.An.C was true to form, hah.

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Now, some things that I picked up on while reading this:

-There were quite a few instances where some revision was necessary. Either you missed a word, worded something strange/incorrectly, or used the wrong tense. I found this happened quite often. I think a bit more of a thorough revising session could have done you well, but seeing as your piece is eight pages long, it's borderline understandable.
-As previously stated, I really enjoyed the choreography of your fight. But the thing is, it's practically all one big fight. Some of the fighting seemed almost repetitive, and was nearing being less exciting at some points. Along with that, there wasn't much social interaction between the fighters. It might be more of an opinionated view, but I think a little more small talk would have been adequate. It just seemed too "quiet" in a way, if that makes any sense.

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That about covers everything that I could find "wrong" with your story, EB. Overall it was a great read, good job man!

Some particular highlights:

-I loved your word use. It was so colorful, and so varied. I, admittedly, found the need to look a few up, but I found it to be fun.
-Some of the phrases you put in there were great. I especially loved the one with snow covering the ugliness of the world; simply brilliant.
-Same with you Cav, I enjoyed the choreography and work you put into executing it. Nicely done.
-Your story flow was put together great as well. It didn't shift abruptly, but it also didn't take forever to reach a certain point. It was really an interesting read.

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Now for a few thoughts on improvement:

-Honestly, I couldn't find much wrong with your piece. One of the most glaring things (if you can even call it glaring, really) that stood out to me, was the word flow. It seemed to be interrupted by carefully worded descriptions that were filled with commas. Comma use was just too often in some cases, and really drew away from the scene itself.

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Overall, I was really impressed with your piece. And did I mention your word choice? Fantastic. Well done, Cav.