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did a little bit more on this cus I was deathly bored
http://sta.sh/02bea8jivawr
1.) Tempo man. Yes, it is intense. Yes, it is fast. Yet, it's consistent. There's nothing really notable that I can say when viewing this. It's somewhat, bland. It's short though so this isn't really going to be much of a problem unless you're going to lengthen it.
2.) Okay, all in all, what just happened? It's not that it's incomprehensible, it's just hard to understand. I had to exert effort to see what the scene was portraying. This isn't bad, story-wise but if it has something to do with the execution, then that's when a problem needs to be addressed.
3.) I feel like this is incomplete(Not in a sense of length or % completion) that you need to add more to it before you actually release it. The sketchy style is nice and all but everything is just mediocre because of this style. Such an example would be the water particles, the splashes, the BG's(If you ever make one), and just everything. It doesn't help that the camera is flying all over the place too.
Personal Note: You're good. That I know of but this was just way too early for you to release. You should have at least polished up the introduction and a few scenes after that unless you're planning to stick with that style all-throughout. By all means, go ahead but if you're going to do that for the rest of the action scenes, I really recommend you start working on the BG's to give us some anchor on what's happening and slow it down to give us a breather. The introduction just throws us into the action directly and due to the consistent tempo, I can hardly follow what's going on.
Good luck on this.
