GK - The Dark Warrior

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Mar 5, 2015 2:18 PM #1320844
GK - Dark Warrior


Abilities (Click to Show)


Weakness (Click to Show)


Personality (Click to Show)


Appearance (Click to Show)


Weapons (Click to Show)


Story (Click to Show)


Demo (Click to Show)


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Mar 5, 2015 2:20 PM #1320845
._. aaa.aaa?

wheres the demo xD?
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Mar 5, 2015 2:39 PM #1320849
Don't worry deary about not having a demo deary, that's fine~just as long as you add it later, it just means you are not allowed to fight anyone until it's completed

Anyways, I was wondering about the dark powers since really there's a lot of variety of it. Does it mean shadows? Or dark matter? Or dark energies like from emotions or evil?

Also maybe you could add a little more weaknesses, but that's just what I think~you could also go into detail the special attacks like how big is the God Hand? Or can he change the size according to the situation? Is dark lightning like in this shape of a bolt of lightning? Or is it just a beam?

Just things to think about to improve it~
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Mar 5, 2015 2:52 PM #1320851
And im here still wondering what GK stands for
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Mar 5, 2015 3:03 PM #1320858
EDIT:- Demo added and weaknesses and abilities improved.

Quote from BBKing5
._. aaa.aaa?

wheres the demo xD?


man i by mistakely added the post before adding the demo and i was editing it.
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Mar 5, 2015 3:06 PM #1320862
Also just a little heads up, unlike RHG we don't really deal with stickfigures. Most of us have detailed appearances and different life forms but are usually human, so just something to keep in mind as well~

Also what do you mean by human weaknesses? Mortality?
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Mar 5, 2015 3:30 PM #1320865
Edit:- Weakness and appearance improved
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Mar 5, 2015 6:08 PM #1320906
AAAAA! Being average is NOT a weakness! Nor is being human! There are not enough exclamation points to emphasize this!
Otherwise as far as your abilities go, you're fine.
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Mar 5, 2015 6:23 PM #1320911
Quote from acutelatios
Also just a little heads up, unlike RHG we don't really deal with stickfigures. Most of us have detailed appearances and different life forms but are usually human, so just something to keep in mind as well~

Also what do you mean by human weaknesses? Mortality?
o w o


Anyone affected by Human Weaknesses forfeit any sturdiness that the average wRHG/RHG character has. The average wRHG/RHG can deal with ten strong punches to the head, along with a little extra grabbing-by-the-hair-and-slamming-on-the-ground and still get up, spit out some blood and fight on. Human Weaknesses means a medium-strength punch to the head will knock him out allowing for an easy kill.
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Mar 5, 2015 6:29 PM #1320914
Did you proofread your demo and story? Lot's of grammar and spelling errors. I'd recommend spending some more time working on him. Like what are these dark spells he can use?
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Mar 5, 2015 10:39 PM #1320979
Tweak your RHG a little more and add a demo, you should be good to go.
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Mar 5, 2015 10:52 PM #1320983
what he said
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Mar 5, 2015 10:53 PM #1320984
Oh you are making a wRHG too? Nice!
Your demo seems a bit...Short. Also, add more descriptive stuff. I didn't, and my story didn't turn out so well...
Your abilities seem a bit short also..
I think, like mike above me, you should tweak it.
Your character seems fun though!
Good Luck!
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Mar 5, 2015 11:52 PM #1321007
Add more details to his appearance man, is he tall? Short? What's the skin color? What is his eye color?
But nice wRHg, similar to your RHG.
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Mar 6, 2015 12:15 AM #1321016
Quote from WafflesMgee
Anyone affected by Human Weaknesses forfeit any sturdiness that the average wRHG/RHG character has. The average wRHG/RHG can deal with ten strong punches to the head, along with a little extra grabbing-by-the-hair-and-slamming-on-the-ground and still get up, spit out some blood and fight on. Human Weaknesses means a medium-strength punch to the head will knock him out allowing for an easy kill.


It's a miracle, Waffle didn't lose his head over the "being human" weakness thing.
I say we mark this day one our calenders, 3/5/15: The Day WaffleMgee Didn't Slaughter the New Guy.