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Xal and Mr.Fluffykins

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Sep 10, 2015 8:45 PM #1403018
Xal and Mr.Fluffykins
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Xal (Click to Show)



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story (This is long) (Click to Show)


Availability: No, I'm fighting an old friend.

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Sep 11, 2015 2:20 AM #1403050
Jeez if you're going to type that much info, at least organize it with spoilers. >.>
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Sep 11, 2015 2:24 AM #1403051
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Jeez if you're going to type that much info, at least organize it with spoilers. >.>


How do i do that?
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Sep 11, 2015 2:34 AM #1403053
Sephiroth? XD one winged angel o.o
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Sep 11, 2015 2:50 AM #1403055
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Sephiroth? XD one winged angel o.o


Lol no. I got the name from Tv tropes, but I came up with the main idea of the technique by myself. Maybe I subconsciously was inspired by Sephiroth though.... also, can i put you on my hitlist? I think our characters would make an interesting fight.
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Sep 11, 2015 2:57 AM #1403056
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How do i do that?


i use "
Spoiler (Click to Show)
" for spoilers without the quotes obviously. It's not bad to have a lot of info about your characters, but you should try add some colors, organize it to make it more pleasing for reading
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Sep 11, 2015 3:02 AM #1403057
I would agree with SuperTerry.

The character is very interesting and sounds like it would be fun to animate, however the page, quite frankly, is unappealing.

It's obvious you put in a lot of effort to the page, but people will be disinclined to read it all without proper organization. Having everything the same font in the same paragraph in big long sections makes me not want to read it at all. Quick lesson: The eye is attracted to things that stand out, such as larger letters, bolded text and coloured things. This is why newspapers enlarge the titles of important articles and why we highlight important parts in textbooks. Double spacing when changing sections is recommended, maybe changing the size, font and/or colour of your titles will really help stand out. You could even make or ask someone to create custom headers to really add personality. And of course, large branches of text should be put into spoilers. Your level of information is great, and like I said before, if you read through it it is obvious you put a lot of effort into it. Organization is just essential on pages you are wanting people to read.

P.S. in order to create a spoiler you need to write this BBCode: [*spoiler="insert name here"*] insert text here [*/spoiler*] (remove *)

example:
"dis is how do" (Click to Show)
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Sep 11, 2015 4:04 AM #1403066
I don't mind reading in the same font but it is unappealing and most people would turn around. Also, i have a problem with one of your weaknesses.

"While Xal's body is very blood efficent, having much more blood inside him than the average person, and Xal being able to lose 12 times as much blood as the average person before passing out, if Mr.Fluffykins gets too big based off only Xal's blood, Xal will pass out eventually."


Woah there, maybe lower the amount?
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Sep 11, 2015 6:12 AM #1403075
I second what drbrownca said. I literally don't even want to read through it when it's just that: "wall-o-texty". Keep in mind I'm not trying to be mean, I'm just suggesting better organization on the page so more people read it.

good luck!
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Sep 11, 2015 5:32 PM #1403113
I will battle you... one day... when I'm ready.
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Sep 11, 2015 8:57 PM #1403123
Quote from drbrownca
I would agree with SuperTerry.

The character is very interesting and sounds like it would be fun to animate, however the page, quite frankly, is unappealing.

It's obvious you put in a lot of effort to the page, but people will be disinclined to read it all without proper organization. Having everything the same font in the same paragraph in big long sections makes me not want to read it at all. Quick lesson: The eye is attracted to things that stand out, such as larger letters, bolded text and coloured things. This is why newspapers enlarge the titles of important articles and why we highlight important parts in textbooks. Double spacing when changing sections is recommended, maybe changing the size, font and/or colour of your titles will really help stand out. You could even make or ask someone to create custom headers to really add personality. And of course, large branches of text should be put into spoilers. Your level of information is great, and like I said before, if you read through it it is obvious you put a lot of effort into it. Organization is just essential on pages you are wanting people to read.

P.S. in order to create a spoiler you need to write this BBCode: [*spoiler="insert name here"*] insert text here [*/spoiler*] (remove *)

example:
"dis is how do" (Click to Show)


I added the spoilers, and I'm working on the text now.
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Sep 12, 2015 2:56 AM #1403159
pretty good idea. i like mr fluffykins xD. work on the demos tho, the sticks are getting resized a little to often.


you guys know you can do
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Sep 12, 2015 4:24 AM #1403171
Quote from ThePewdieOriginz
pretty good idea. i like mr fluffykins xD. work on the demos tho, the sticks are getting resized a little to often.


you guys know you can do
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I know. It's kinda a side-affect of my hands not being able to stay still for more than a few seconds.

Also, how do i change the color of the text? when i tried, nothing happened.

Quote from Tun3
I don't mind reading in the same font but it is unappealing and most people would turn around. Also, i have a problem with one of your weaknesses.

"While Xal's body is very blood efficent, having much more blood inside him than the average person, and Xal being able to lose 12 times as much blood as the average person before passing out, if Mr.Fluffykins gets too big based off only Xal's blood, Xal will pass out eventually."


Woah there, maybe lower the amount?


I changed it to six....in hindsight, twelve kinda makes him passing out from blood loss pretty much impossible XD
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Sep 12, 2015 3:16 PM #1403224
Good luck on your demos dude!!!
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Sep 12, 2015 3:21 PM #1403226
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Good luck on your demos dude!!!


Thanks! I can't believe I forgot to put you on my hit list though XD
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