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Aug 5, 2008 12:11 AM #209226
here are some poems. say what you like/ don't like whatever.

First one:

But now it's gone!
The incessant werring might be done,
and let the mind rest in un-dulled feeling:
remembering; and only then-rejoicing.

And the always-ignoring tyranny,
unknowingly gives way to
less obstrusive sounds-
happy to be quiet.

Next one:

The room is pleasantly close,
from the inside lights
and the closed up outdoors

Sitting with time passing quickly by the wall-
too quick for monotony

But setting something in its distance;
some well imagined future:
waiting, to forget the waiting from before.
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Aug 5, 2008 5:04 PM #210089
BOO!
more adjectives, i couldnt picture any of them >: (
they were good, just need to go into more detail.
Very interesting though.
More please.
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Aug 6, 2008 1:23 AM #210720
moar comments.