Kishimaru

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Lagging..

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Nov 11, 2015 8:21 PM #1414989
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Age:16

Gender: Male

Can be found in:
Academy Of Stick
Highschool

About:
-Doesnt talk much
-Doesnt really care about friends
-Both his parents died when he
Was 6 years old and he was sent to a foster family.

Relationships:
None

Affiliation:
None

Abilities (Click to Show)


Weakness (Click to Show)


Hitlist:
None

Available:
Nah bruh

Battles:
None

Points:
0/0/0

Demo very short (Click to Show)


Weapon:
None

Lore:
Wake Up! Wake up! Says kishimaru's foster mom.
-kishimaru gets up- get dressed your late for school
Says foster mom. Okay im getting ready says kishimaru
-kishimaru goes downstairs for breakfast and hurries to the
School bus- After a while kishimaru had arrived at his highschool
. Another boring day at school says kishimaru. As kishimaru walks
Towards the front doors he is surprised as he sees some guys waiting
For him. What do they want? He asks himself. Kishimaru continues to walk
To the front doors. As soon as he opens the door he gets hit in his face by one
One of the guys. Ouch says kishimaru. Shut up and come with us says the first
Guy. Why replies kishimaru. If you dont we will beat you senseless says the first guy.
Okay im coming says kishimaru. They all walk in a group behind the school and then in
To a dark alley. Here drink this says the first guy. Why says kishimaru. Just do it says all
Of the bullies. Okay relax says kishimaru. -kishimaru drinks it-
Then kishimaru passes out. As kishimaru woke up he felt weird and realized that the
Bullies had ditched him. When he stood up he was frightened by a purple energy dust
In front of him. So he went home and after days he realized what he could do and he
Eventually signed up for RHG. He told his foster mom that she wasnt going to see him
Anymore and hes leaving his school and good grades behind. After that he packed up and went
To rhg.
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Nov 13, 2015 1:42 AM #1415420
After slowing down your demo, I can say your demo is pretty good. :)
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Nov 13, 2015 3:58 AM #1415453
I would suggest using the " symbol to help the reader tell the difference between dialogue and everything else in your story. Other than that this guy seems pretty cool.
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Nov 13, 2015 8:32 AM #1415485
Quote from Person McPerson
After slowing down your demo, I can say your demo is pretty good. :)

lol does that classified as sarcasm?
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Anyway your demonstration does not long enough
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Nov 13, 2015 10:20 AM #1415511
Quote from Lagging..
Can be found in:
Academy Of Stick Highschool

Where do I enrol?
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Nov 13, 2015 12:49 PM #1415561
Wait a second, Acadamy of Stick Highschool
ASH
Rhg/Pokemon anime crossover confirmed.
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Nov 13, 2015 3:10 PM #1415601
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Where do I enrol?


You wait for an invitation similar to how you get invited to Hogwarts.
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Nov 13, 2015 9:08 PM #1415672
Or we could fight our way in.