It was a nice and rainy day, even if it was raining the streets were still full of people and vehicles moving around them. Ergos was inside an empty auditorium near the wRHG arena, looking straight to a piano that was in the middle of the stage. That old black piano was similar to the one that his mother had long time ago, he smiled then walked towards the piano watching its classic style.

He sat on the little black bench of the piano and started to play it with his eyes closed, little by little the sounds of the piano started to flow around the place as a clam river of elegance and grace. Without knowing he started to sing along the piano, when he noticed it smiled but not stopped singing the song that he heard thousands of times, that was the song that his mother sang when he was just a little boy, a song full of sadness and sorrow but at the same time full of joy and happiness.

As the song became more and more high. He got more and more excited, moving his feet and head as he continued playing the piano. His gloves were beginning to react to his euphoria about playing and singing that song of his childhood, glowing and letting out musical notes made of energy from the sapphires and scattering them all around the place.

Suddenly the doors of the auditorium opened slowly but Ergos wasn’t even paying attention to them, just the sound of his own voice along with the piano. A black haired woman watched him with her mouth slightly opened, when Ergos noticed her, he just opened his eye more and made the musical notes disappear.

“I was leaving, it wasn’t my intention to be here, I-I was just passing by and I saw the piano and y-you know I wanted to play a little” Ergos nearly shouting it as he got up

The woman was laughing silently as he said that, then started to sing lightly as an ethereal long haired warrior appeared behind her, the warrior bowed to her and she made a hand gesture for him to get up.

“Don’t worry about it, that song was wonderful, what it is name?” said the ghost looking to Ergos and pointing to her.

“Oh, eh, the song is named Anthem of the Decapitated Fox, my mom used to sing me a lot along her piano and I just learned the song looking to her” said looking to her confused

She frowned looking to the warrior then to the guy in the stage, when she got something in her head she just laughed again.

“Oh dear, I’m sorry for not introducing myself, my name is Serena Richards, the people know me as the Deathsinger, nice to meet you sir” said ghost again

“The Deathsinger!? The true Deathsinger!?” said Ergos amused as Serena nodded

“Oh, where are my manners, Nice to meet you too Serena. I am Nathan Kurogane also known as Ergos, the Energy priest” said getting down of the stage

“Yeah, I know, you were the one that defeated the rookie Najenda, am I right?” said her ghost as she sat in a seat of the auditorium

The guy just nodded as he was looking to the scar on her neck, she noticed and tried to hide it a little with her hair, the ghost looked to her worried but she just looked to him and he looked straightforward again.

“So, can you tell me about that song? The story of the song? Because I noticed that the song wasn’t in English” she said smiling and continuing singing the song that summoned the warrior

“Yeah, it wasn’t, the song is in Latin, that song tells the story of an old fox, that was abused by his master then he was deciding to suicide but he heard stories about what happened when foxes die” said him taking a seat near her and making little energy figures to make the story more interesting

“What happens?” said her watching the little light show

“Exist a legend that says that the foxes when die because they were abused, come back from the realm of the dead and torment humans for the eternity” he said making the figure of a humongous anthropomorphic fox eating humans

“Oh, such poor thing, what a tragic story” said her looking down

“But wait, that not ends here. The fox decided and suicided by falling of a mountain, a big sharp boulder decapitated him, making his wish true” said smiling weakly

“So, he became a monster?” said her making a horrified face
“not really, You see, he became a Kitsune, a fox spirit that likes to make pranks and tricks, when he became a Kitsune, he finally found the peace that he was searching for, and lived happy for the rest of his spiritual life” he made a human shape with a fox tail and ears

“Wow, what a beautiful story, so he found peace with something that he was terrified about” she said clapping and singing a bit louder

“Yeah, may I ask you, are you naturally mute? Like by birth?” said a bit curious

Serena shook her head and looked down to the floor. Ergos was worried and then had a brilliant idea, he got up and lent his hand for her to get up then they left the auditorium and went to the mall talking as they walked.

“So, your younger brothers were Kitsune by birth but not you? That is kind of sad, as you were older than them” said her looking to him

“Yeah, it’s sad, but I’m good as a human, it’s not really bad”

“But your parents were also humans, why your brothers had the blessing of being kitsune and you not? It’s not fair” said Serena looking to him

“I don’t know Serena, maybe it wasn’t part of my destiny to be a fox spirit, just a human, simple as that” said smiling

“Banshees are not like that, we don’t need blessings and we all have the same abilities, I can’t understand the kitsune at all”

“I know, but this pair of gloves makes me have some of their powers, but not all of them” he said looking to the gloves then to het smiling

“Mmm, Nathan, can you tell me a liitle about the abilities of a Kitsune?” said her clapping a liitle

“well, vary with their element, exist thirteen elements, Celestial, Void, Wind, Spirit, Fire, Earth, River, Ocean, Mountain, Forest, Thunder, Time and Sound, there are also kitsune that are born with two elements making a new element for them to use, but also exist the ones that are born without element, relying only on their physical capacities” said looking straight forward

“Ok, I guess that we talked a lot about you, you can also make me questions” she said punching his shoulder lightly

Without even notice, they were in front of the mall, they got in and went to the food area to eat something. Serena ordered some tacos and Ergos just a green salad with a strawberry smoothie, as they were eating Serena looked worried, she knew that when she was eating she couldn’t sing and keep the spiritual guardian at her side to speak for her. Ergos looked to her and she made some hand gestures to tell him what happened.

“Oh, so you can just summon the ghost when you sing eh? Well let’s try this” he made a quick hand gesture and an energy circle surrounded the guardian, she looked confused but he just smiled

“Don’t worry, when we were walking I memorized the song, that circle will just reproduce the song over and over using the energy of my gloves, so you don’t have to worry about the guardian now” he said with his mouth full of lettuce

“You’re not as bad as I thought, maybe we could be friends” she said eating the last bit of one of her tacos

“I’m glad I suppose, I would like to be your friend too”

“Yeah, we should hang out more and maybe you could meet Tanya, my girlfriend” she said smiling

“Cool! Good to know that you have someone that you love” he said happily then looked down

“What is it? Something’s wrong?”

“Well, I’m not good in relationships, thought I want to have someone to share my life with”

“You will have one, don’t worry buddy”
“Yeah, thank you Serena, you’re the best”

“I know that, Tanya says that I’m the best all the time”

That was how the Banshee and the Kitsune became friends that day.

Without knowing he started to sing along the piano, when he noticed it smiled but not stopped singing the song that he heard thousands of times

Without knowing he started to sing along the piano, when he noticed it he smiled but did not stop singing the song that he heard thousands of times

Alright, three things with this one. First of all, with timing type things (as while when) you need to specify both subjects with the actions even if it's the same person. When Mike was tripping, he swore. As he was counting on his fingers, he was doing math.

Next, we have not vs did not. Basically, if it's something that you do, you need the did or do before the not. He didn't go. Don't say goodbye.

Next up is tenses. Basically, whatever tense you're writing in has to be that way line by line, but during these lines, events happen when other ones did, if that makes any sense. Back when he smiled is when we're talking about, and during that time, he kept singing. She was wearing a beautiful gown. Here, 'was' puts us back in time, it's like a pause and we're discussing it's present. When she was, she didn't wore or that would set us back in the past again and break the sentence. She was wearing at the time. Basically, if the time is established, tenses are relative to that.

As the song became more and more high. He got more and more excited

As the song became higher and higher he got more and more excited

I really don't know why, but some words can end in -er or -est while others need things like more. Excited is right, but high has a higher. There's a lot like that and I don't know them all. Just something to watch out for/be aware of.
The other thing is when you use things that connect things, such as when or as, keep both actions in the same sentence. Periods are pauses that create a gap between the things happening together.

“Oh, eh, the song is named Anthem of the Decapitated Fox, my mom used to sing me a lot along her piano and I just learned the song looking to her”

“Oh, eh, the song is named Anthem of the Decapitated Fox, my mom used to sing to me a lot on her piano and I just learned the song looking to her”

This is a pain to put into words, but initially it sounds like 'My mom used to sing "Me~"'. Verbs do things, often times they do the things directly to other subjects. If it's indirect it has to be specified. Tim usually throws me when we play basketball. Tim usually throws to me when we play basketball. In one I'm being psychically thrown for some reason, maybe for a dunk(?) while in another I'm just getting the ball.

“Yeah, it wasn’t, the song is in Latin, that song tells the story of an old fox, that was abused by his master then he was deciding to suicide but he heard stories about what happened when foxes die”

“Yeah, it wasn’t, the song is in Latin, that song tells the story of an old fox, that was abused by his master then he was deciding to commit suicide but he heard stories about what happened when foxes die”
I really don't know why, but suicide is a noun, which makes it need a verb. It'd be like saying you Danieled, just doesn't work.

“Exist a legend that says that the foxes when die because they were abused, come back from the realm of the dead and torment humans for the eternity”

“A legend existsthat says when the foxes die because they were abused, they come back from the realm of the dead and torment humans for all eternity”

It can be tricky starting off with a verb, and since the legend is ongoing, it's present tense. After that, at what time does this happen? It happens when they die. Next, who comes back? They do. Don't know the deal with eternity though, it's another dumb word we make you jump through hoops for. All eternity or just eternity both work.

“So, he became a monster?” said her making a horrified face

“So, he became a monster?” She said making a horrified face

Basically, her shows possession, she is a subject. She has her hair in a bun. Who? She. Whose hair? Her.

“Ok, I guess that we talked a lot about you, you can also make me questions”

“Ok, I guess that we talked a lot about you, you can also ask me questions”

Make just doesn't work here for some reason.

Without even notice, they were in front of the mall

Without even noticing, they were in front of the mall

Here notice just needs a tense. It's the time in question, so it's present

I really hope at least some of this makes sense! If you have any questions please let me know, but it all does come easier as you work at it.