( mwansa's view)

A little adorable sister who cares about her brother more than anything in the world and would be super happy by getting a pat on the head was a lie created by mangaka's for the protagonist of something like a manga. I actually doubt most mangaka's who wrote such preposterous stuff had any younger sister’s to begin with. However, I on the other hand, am not a manga protagonist and is fully aware of the absolute hell spawns that are younger sisters. Sure if the age gap is huge, it wouldn’t be so bad. However me and my sister’s age gap wasn't big at all: i was 16 and she was 14

Wait why am I having these thoughts? Oh The most adorable thing I have seen today was this adorable child standing right in front of me looking through the shop's window at a box of choclate displayed alongside other kinds of candies. Don't get me wrong, I have never been a fan of kids but this one felt straight out of an anime like one of those moe characters created specifically to tug at your heartstrings. In fact she was so adorable, I forgot about that hero who bumped into me at the train station earlier. Apparently seeing beings with superhuman powers running around has become pretty normal around here.

After a while, I went and stood next to the kid as I joined her looking through the shop's display window.

"So......I dont think its safe for you to be hanging around here alone."

‘What the hell was that! i sound just like dad!’

I thought to myself.

‘The first thing you give to a stranger is a lecture?’

The little kid gave me an annoyed look. She must have been 8 or so. She had long silver hairs that went down to her back and was wearing a orange hoodie with white dress underneath that went down to her knees. She was a caucasian with blue eyes. I know that the city of Gladius was a place where many races mixed… but white hairs?

"Hmph" was the only sound she made after looking at me before walking away. tsk..kids....i
had to admit my pride was a bit wounded stupid kid.

"Bzz" I suddenly felt a small shock of electricity at my neck hairs. I looked behind me only to find no one standing there but it was enough to remind me that I was going to be late for school, so i started running towards a bus.

I'm sorry, but I honestly can't understand anything. Can you work on your grammar?

thank you for your honest review ure the real mvp can you please point them out if you have time i really want to improve so my work can be easier to read

I'm no expert on writing, but here are my tips.
"Little adorable sister's who care about their brothers more than anything that would be super happy by getting a pat on the head, were a lie created by mangaka's for the protagonist of a manga or something i actually doubt most mangaka's who wrote such outrageous heresy's even had them to begin."
This is a run-on sentence. You can fix it by splitting very long sentences into shorter ones.

"I however am not a manga protagonist and is fully aware of the absolute hell spawns that are younger sisters, sure if the age gap is huge it isnt so bad, however me and my sisters age gap wasn't huge at all, i was 16 and she was 14."
You talk about hell spawns (no idea what that is) and then you start talking about age gap all of a sudden. Try to finish a topic before moving on.

"little girl standing right in front of me looking through a shops display window at the Box of chocolate displayed their along with other kinds of candy was pretty much the most adorable thing i had seen today and probably the cause i was thinking of my little sister, dont get me wrong i have never been a fan of kids over all but this one was like straight out of an anime like those one's they called moe charecters, charecters created specifically to tug at your heart strings."
You can capitalize the first sentence, and again, split the sentence.

I'll do the rest afterwards. But yeah, split the sentences, a lot of your sentences are very long and therefore hard to follow.