1# I'm not sure how powerful his technopathy should be. I think his board is his main skill so his technopathy probably shouldn't be very strong if he has it.
2# Word of warning. Lead is not magnetic so that propulsion field is usually not going to have much of an effect on bullets. Then again you did say it was explicitly strong enough to affect bullets so I guess it's already. But just keep it in mind that it would have to be very strong indeed.
3# Most of his weaknesses are legit, but weakness 6 is more of a strength. "Only Dynamo can use it" is not a weakness.
4# Not really a critique, but I can't help but feel like this is copied from somewhere (knowingly or unknowingly).

1# First off, his short-ranged fighter weakness makes no sense. He fights primarily close ranged with his arm and if anything, his weakness would be to ranged opponents since he has little means to counter then. (Yes he has a magnetic field but lead does not have a strong reaction to magnets being non-magnetic and all:p)
2# Could you explain to me exactly how many things that arm can switch between? Some tools could be a pretty big deal (like an industrial grade nailgun) and I wouldn't want to miss details such as that.

The only question about Inky is in the story. Did he use his powers to shift to story characters to fight off intruders? Also, why did he go along with the man and help defend his library when he bought him as a boy and trapped his soul in a book?

1 The technopathy is there more as an excuse for how he built the hover board in a junkyard. But it isn't all that powerful. He can see what a machine does by touching it and how to improve it and thats about it

2 Oh right. Heh forgot that little fact. Well damn physics. Jk I'll need to fix that.

3 6 is just there as an idea I wrote down

4 probably. Tell me when you find the person I am copying so I can apologize.

Okay for this one I am going to need to change your perspective a little. Nah too hard. I originaly made Arrick to be a human railgun he would use his magnetic feild to manipulate objects and fire them at a high velocity.

But now that I think about it. Yah he would do great as a close quarters fighter.

1 this guy needs a new name

2 he was a BABY

3 it is an inkwell not a book

4 He defends the library because it is the only home he has

First off, by his gender being fluid, to you mean he sways between identifying as fe/male, or being made of ink, biologically sways between male and female?

With his appearance, is there any color to him? What I'm visualizing is something akin to a statue.



All one color, but details are made with outline/depth. Is this accurate, or does he manipulate multiple colors to take on a fleshy tone/give his eyes specific color? With that in mind, does he take on human behavior? We blink to keep our eyes moist, is this something he's picked up on (despite isolation) or does he stare like Hannibal Lector? Similarly, does he visually age? And how's that something he'd pick up? Clothing is another thing that raises questions. Does he make them out of ink, or if not, does he physically have some? Does his body stain it, or is there some sort of membrane that stops that? Like how you can touch the surface of water without getting your finger wet.

With his speaking, are the bubbles physically attached to him, or can he actually make the ink fly? I assume it's flat so you only have a good view from the one angle, but how legible is the writing? And we talking full words here?

Does the man who brought him there stay there? If so, what's the relationship there? Father/son, master/apprentice?

Either way, it sounds like a hell of a lot of isolation. Is Iris the lonely type? Does he create creatures just for the sake of playing with, and with reading those books, are they based on characters he's come across.

If he's not the lonely type, there has to be some crippling boredom going on at some point. With the perfect memory, I don't know how many times you can read the same story, and sure there's an entire library there, but if every book's already been read...

What's the deal with people trying to steal books from the back room? Has he read the books in the back room? (assuming yes because of one thing up) If so, does he realize what's so important about them? And how does he feel about this mission? Sure, it's still the beginning of eternity, but it's eternity in one spot.