Serena the Goddess of fireflies, lightning bugs, torch bugs, and serenity. She is also known as Lightbringer, Banisher of Darkness, and the Shadowbane.
Mhm, alright, nothing terrible here. Besides the fact that lightning bugs and fireflies are the same thing and torch bugs don't exist (then again, neither does a giant firefly goddess).
Serena is about twelve feet tall and weighs about six hundred pounds and all twelve of her eyes are blue. She has no mouth and nose on her head she has eight eyes that are in a circular pattern on her face though she only keeps the top two open. Four on the left and four on the right. On the lower half of her head she has four purple stripes, two on each side, that can open up and let out swarms of fireflies. She also has shoulder length red hair. Her skin is a dark blue and at night looks like it is full of stars. She wears no clothes except for a small piece of brass armor that looks like it made out of thousands of fireflies that covers her chest. Growing out of each shoulder is a snake like limb that is about ten feet long and each limb ends in a beak that also has two stalk like eyes above the beak. She only has two elongated fingers and an elongated thumb on each hand. Where her lower legs would be is the body of a firefly. She has six giant beetle legs and in total her lower body is about six eight feet long and has a giant bio-luminescent light on the underside of her body. There is also golden spirals and lines on the sides of her body and on the top of her carapace. Also her carapace opens up and she lets out her wings so she can fly. also she is about fifty thousand years old.
So... Serena is a humanoid being? There's just a lot going on here that, honestly, doesn't need to be going on. She could have easily been a giant woman with a big ol' light on her butt, but this looks like it was taken straight out of a remake of the Mummy (with Dwayne "The Rock" Johnson reprising his role as the CGI monster) with some extra bits. I would be ok with all the extra stuff if the extra stuff was, y'know, firefly related. Why does she have beak tentacles? Do fireflies have beak tentacles? I do not think so. Why does she have long red hair? I think fireflies have a little bit of fuzz on them, but I don't think that would equate to long, flowing locks. Why does she have so many eyes? Fireflies have two black dots on their heads which are, I think, made up of a bunch of eyes. Why doesn't she have the same thing instead of the holy ring of creepy eyes? I HAVE SO MANY QUESTIONS!
Serena is a kind and gentle soul that does not say much. She walks delicately so as to not harm a single creature in the forest where she has made her home. She is usually shy and so usually watches from a distance when a new person or creature enters her home. At nights in the summer and fall she will dance in the forests while fireflies glow around her seeking their mates. in the heat of battle Serena may open more of the eyes on her face depending on how the battle progresses. She also may close some if the fight starts going in her favor.
Yep, she's a big ol' nice insect over here. But, this just brings attention to another question I have: Why does she have her eyes closed? Is there an explanation for this odd handicap somewhere? I'm sure it would be much easier to win a fight if she could see completely from the start. Maybe this is all hidden firefly lore I don't know about.
Origin:
I'm skipping that one because it doesn't matter much. Basically, girl touches light, girl gets attacked by baddies, great power great responsibility, face bugs.
Abilities:
This one deserves its own spoiler within a spoiler.
"Talks using telepathy that makes it sound as if her voice is coming from nowhere and everywhere at once"
Fireflies don't have telepathy... you silly goose.
"Can communicate with fireflies
Uses fireflies to scout out areas"
Firefly goddess can control fireflies. Seems legit.
"To shoot fire out of her mouths
To shoot lighting from her fingers and twelve eyes"
.... just because they are called "fireflies" and "lightning bugs" doesn't mean that they can, y'know, control fire and lightning.
"The carapace of her lower half is able to stop the blows from almost all weapons except those harder than steel.
Able to lift a ton and her carapace can withstand up to 50 tons of pressure.
To light up an area with the light on the back end of her carapace.
The six feet of her lower half can cause earthquakes when they start pounding the ground rapidly"
Normal giant bug things are normal.
"Can create weapons from fire and lightning
can create a lightning shield that can block and reflect objects including bullets and bricks but not clumps of earth.
Can create a fire shield that only blocks things that can be burned and when said object hits the shield it is reduced to ashes.
lightning sword. can electrify metal and vaporize water on impact.
fire sword is made from solid fire and can be used to cut through metal or wood."
*rubs eyes* .... huh?
"Can look in multiple directions at once."
Why does this list switch from "Normal Bug Shit" and "Random Elemental Shit" constantly?
"Has two snake like limbs above her arms that end in beaks"
THESE FUCKING TENTACLE THINGS I SWEAR TO CHRIST
"Firefly swarm can be used to distract and blind an opponent
Can blind enemies temporarily with the light on her carapace"
Back to the normal bug shit.
"Can create rain clouds by shooting both fire and lighting up into the sky. Only does this to deal with fiery foes or to put out fires in the Forest of Light. It takes about three minutes to create a a good rain cloud capable of putting out a forest fire."
This is NOT how rain works. Shooting fire and lightning into the sky doesn't create rain clouds. You know what does? Hot water. Why doesn't she, just, shoot a body of water with her fire? It still wouldn't make a controllable cloud but
at least it would be more scientifically accurate.
"Can fire the lightning from her fingers together to create a ball of electricity that has four stages.
Stage one: fires small balls of electricity from a stage two electricity orb. can fire a small electrical ball at a rate of one a second. does not do much damage and takes ten seconds to charge set up. range twenty feet
Stage two: fires medium balls of electricity at a rate of one every ten seconds from a stage three electricity orb. Each ball can create a five inch crater in the ground. will take two or three hits to kill a normal person. takes thirty seconds to set up. range fifty feet
Stage three: fires large balls of electricity at a rate of one every thirty seconds from a stage four electricity orb. each ball will create a ten foot crater upon impact with the ground. takes a minute to set up. range one hundred feet.
Stage four: Fires the whole electricity orb which is a foot in diameter. This is a last ditch maneuver as when the orb strikes the ground or anything everything within a hundred feet will be vaporized. takes a minute to set up. range one mile."
Lightning bugs do not control lightning. She isn't the goddess of weather. Why can she control elements?
"Demon Mode"
Moving on.
Serena’s upper body is soft and not protect by the armor that her lower body has.
She may not always strike her opponent but try to disarm them or scare them away
She may accidentally blind herself when she flashes her own light to bright
She has a paralyzing fear of heights above thirty feet
She is a large target
She refuses to start a fight and will try to find a peaceful solution first.
May get distracted by her surroundings
The underside of her carapace is not as tough as the top and can be pieced by extremely sharp weapons
Her wings are easily burned or cut through
She cannot see out of the eyes that she is firing lightning through.
Most of this is expected of a giant bug. But, how is something that can fly possibly afraid of heights? I'm sure she would be used to flying after being alive for, what, 5000 years? Also, GOSH DIDDLY DARN IT LIGHTNING AGAIN.
And I don't comment on demos.
In the end, you should be able to see what is ok and what is not ok based on my reactions. I'd say toning down her appearance and getting rid of the elemental stuff would be a step in a good direction.
Of course, this character has been out for a while. So, I know it's hard to even think about changing anything at this point. So, I won't blame you if you're like "the fuck is this douchebag over here telling me how to make my Owl City character?!"
