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Oct 16, 2017 4:19 AM #1484695
Burst

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- Abilities/Weapon/Power:

Bio-Nano Blade (With 3 Phase) : A Blade that was made from steel and has the effect of Bio-Nano Poison and cannot be broken so easily

Martial Arts : Burst has learn a couple of fighting style, such as Judo,Karate,Muay Thai,and some other Martial Arts.

Swordsmanship : He can use certain Swords as a weapon...just swords, nothing else...
If he suddenly uses other weapons than his mastery,he'll get panic so sudden.

Bio-Nano : A blue toxin that has an effect that can blister and rupture the skin, it can even destroy the bones, its just similar to an acid... If his opponent got hit by the effect of Bio-Nano, the Opponent will gets poisoned for amount of times, if the opponent cannot resist the Bio-Nano Effect, his skin will gets more Gross with the color of Blue Bio-Nano and then his opponent will be destroyed to pieces...Before the opponent died and devastated by the poison, there will be some chance that the opponent's speed will be reduced, their defense slightly decrease,and their vision starts bluring, only for some opponents that has some Special Powers or some Special Body but it will instantly kill Weak Opponents... The Bio-Nano Effect can infect the water.

Techno-Barrier : Sometimes he will use a Techno Barrier while approaching his opponent or when getting Danger... This Barrier can also be destroyed if its damaged for couple times

Nano Breaker : If he cannot escape from the opponent's barraging attack, he will use Nano Breaker to blow his opponent for a couple distance... But it will reduce his stamina and stability... This Breaker doesn't have the effect of Bio-Nano poison.

Nano Blitz : He can also conjure some Nano Blitz... A forced Ball of Nano as his range skill to shoot his opponents and also has the effect of Bio-Nano poison, it's possible to shoot it Barragely.

Shockwave : Drive the shockwave from the Bio-Nano Blade that can cut through stuffs, the Shockwave will dissappear if it didn't hit the target.

Berserk Nano : He can suppress more of his Nano Power... Change his body color into Black with glowing Blue, and increase the effect of his Bio-Nano poison, Speed, and Defense, but he must not use this Skill more than 25 seconds or else he will get weakened.

- Weaknesses:
- He can be defeated by getting damaged or attacked by Strong Force (Strong Attacks or Strong Impacts)
- His Bio-Nano Effect will get Weakened or Slowed if it against fire...
- If the victim has a strong or unique body, the effect of Nano will be very very slow to spread or not even spreading, then the only choice he got is to Battle without his Nano Effect but he can still use his sword to slash his opponents...
- If his opponent able to make Burst gets hit by his own Bio-Nano attacks, his movement will be Mobilized for 2.5 seconds...
- Making him keep using the Nano Breaker will reduces his Stamina and Stability...
- If his opponent able to hit his Bio-Nano logo, Burst will suddenly fainted for for few seconds, but after he's stabilized himself, His strengths also reduced... The Bio-Nano logo is the source of his Strengths...
- He has a Hidden Injury on his left shoulder... Attacking it will make him weakened too...

- About/Story:
Burst was a Good and Diligent boy, his parents died by an accident when he was 6 years old, and after that he lived with only his Siblings and Uncle in his House, Burst always does training since he was 5 years old, training about Martial Arts and Sword Arts, he train when he make a sword made out of wood, then he gets use to it... Then 13 years later, He was kidnapped as a Test Subject for a Bio-Nano Test on some Secret Facility... The group that kidnapped him said that he has a strong body to overcome and resist the Bio-Nano, When the Bio-Nano Serum was Injected into his body, His Body becomes Unstable and his early power called Crimson and Sparkle were replaced, This Bio-Nano is dangerous to Combustible Material, Nano smokes comes out from his head and there's some Combustible Materials that caused Flames and Explosions... Everybody left the bulding while he still sit on the chair unable to leave... Couple minutes have passed, and he begin to gain conciousness... He realize that his Blood,Body had changed and There's a Bio-Nano logo appeared on the top right side of his head... Before he goes to the exit, he found a room with a Bio-Nano effect weapon, the Bio-Nano Blade, it must not be touched with barehands, but He can Take it and made it as his own Weapon, some people can also touch his sword if they had a special power... Then he feels some power of Bio-Nano inside his body that keeps increasing his Strengths,Speed,Defense,and Agility from day to day (But the earlier version of Him were more powerful than the current one...) Then after few days, he bought a new house and he will Test his own strengths against some Fighters of RHGs while looking for bunch of group that had kidnapped him for revenge...

- Demo: https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=SpTA9-ZOrUk

- Battles: Not dueling yet

- Points: 0/0
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Oct 16, 2017 6:36 PM #1484708
How come it's never a normal sword? At this point, there are so many people in this community that have a character with a fancy "holy shit my sword can channel the energy of the might furry gods" sword. I just wanna see a regular guy with a regular sword. Is that too much to ask?

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his parents died by an accident when he was 6 years old, and after that he lived alone in his House, Burst always does training since he was 5 years old, training about Martial Arts and Sword Arts...


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This doesn't make sense. Firstly, who would let a 5 year old train with swords? Secondly, how did he live on his own when he was 6?? Lastly, was this spooky organization just watching this orphan boy thinking "Yessssss, we shall use him for our poison experiments!"???

I personally think you should work on the story more, is what I'm trying to say.
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Oct 16, 2017 10:31 PM #1484715
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How come it's never a normal sword? At this point, there are so many people in this community that have a character with a fancy "holy shit my sword can channel the energy of the might furry gods" sword. I just wanna see a regular guy with a regular sword. Is that too much to ask?


In defense of this, most people who use swords would eventually develop a technique or something that would allow them to incorporate their power into it (like Delsin from Infamous second son) for better melee combat.

That, and most people would probably think that a normal sword would be boring.
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Oct 17, 2017 12:41 AM #1484727
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In defense of this, most people who use swords would eventually develop a technique or something that would allow them to incorporate their power into it (like Delsin from Infamous second son) for better melee combat.

That, and most people would probably think that a normal sword would be boring.


Hey man, simple can work sometimes.

I once saw an RHG whose power was the ability to control coins... that was it.... just coins... and he was pretty sick
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Oct 17, 2017 12:59 AM #1484729
So what should i fix if i may ask ???
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Oct 17, 2017 1:03 AM #1484731
Oh yes... I forgot to tell you that he is kidnapped when he was old enough... Not when he's still 6 years old...
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Oct 17, 2017 1:18 AM #1484732
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So what should i fix if i may ask ???


You should change his story. Like, most people learn swordsmanship from someone else and they usually start when they are a bit older than 5 years old. Also, you should have him live with someone after his parents death. Like, he could live with his Aunt and Uncle and maybe his Uncle was really into swords and decided to teach Burst about it when he got older. Stuff like that.
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Oct 17, 2017 1:54 AM #1484733
Cool...
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Oct 17, 2017 2:25 AM #1484734
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Hey man, simple can work sometimes.

I once saw an RHG whose power was the ability to control coins... that was it.... just coins... and he was pretty sick

Yeah, that guy was pretty cool. I think his name was sky pirate or something.

I also want you to critique my RHG in general, but I’m not quite sure how to ask, or if here is the proper place to do so.
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Cool...


I can almost feel the dissapointment in his words.
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Oct 17, 2017 6:01 AM #1484742
Nawh, im fine with it man... Seriously...
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Oct 17, 2017 9:47 PM #1484763
Then why the ellipses? It’s like you’re trailing your words off like a pouting child that was just denied ice cream.
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Oct 20, 2017 9:41 AM #1484865
Welp... Thats how i talk, sir...
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Oct 21, 2017 2:30 PM #1484899
HEY man !
Nice RHG, I'll challenge when my new RHG post will appear !
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Oct 22, 2017 11:40 PM #1484976
That's cool, dude... Make your way... :D
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