Let's get this started. I just skimmed a few battles for something that I thought would be good advice for people.
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Today's topic is in the topic of narration and storytelling, and that is
the value of a paragraph.
In a nutshell, every paragraph (if not every sentence but this is less strict) should be used to accomplish something or further the story. Sometimes, I see writing where the writer/narrator enters a small tangent where he goes into detail on a topic that came up that's not very important to the moment at hand. Let me pull an example from the battle zone for clarity. Sorry to whoever I quote here :p
Well, the term “people” should be used loosely, since “people” like Fell were considered to be monsters. But, how could he blame them for thinking that? He knew that it was not normal for someone to be as tall as he was and he knew it was not normal for that same person to have light blue skin. So, instead of fighting that classification, he liked to use it to his advantage in his battle. The fact that there weren’t many monsters in the official RHG system made it easier for him to catch his opponents off guard for the most part. Of course, there would be a few people he would have to pass who didn’t react to him normally and he would be facing one of them that day. Before every battle, each opponent gets a little description of the person they would be facing. This description usually included physical stats that were acquired during the RHG’s rigorous physical testing, which were presented in neat little numbers and graphs. The file also included a little written background about the opponent, which came from the interview that every new gladiator has to do before they are allowed to participate in battles. The man he was fighting was an atheist, people who are able to throw aside the shock of seeing a “monster”. Fell felt that this could be an interesting battle indeed.
In here is a series of mini-tangents. They're actually interesting concepts that come up that the writer wants to mention, such as Fell's acceptance of his monsterhood, people's different reactions to it, a bit about how the "official" wRHG process works, etc. They're all interesting ideas. But presenting them like this has a whole bunch of negative drawbacks:
-Being compressed like this, every interesting topic loses its individual value when presented so casually and alongside so many other interesting topics.
-As an extension of this, so many different points together makes them forgetful. If the ideas are introduced like this, and the reader forgets them later, and then idea gets brought up again in the future as a point that's already been mentioned, they're going to be confused when they have no knowledge of what's being talked about.
-The topics are no longer new to the reader. By casually mentioning that Fell's opponent was an athiest who wouldn't be shocked by his monstrous appearance, it will no longer surprise the reader with how badass the opponent must be when he sees Fell and is entirely unimpressed. It's like holding a winning hand in Poker and showing off your hand before you can even raise the stakes.
-Without any prior introduction, the reader also may not care about many of these topics yet and get a bit bored.
In case anyone is thinking the words, "But Devour, how else am I to explain a bit about how wRHG works in such a short story? Or any other of these topics? I can't give everything its own section." The answer to that ties into the solution to this problem: "Focus on what you're writing on and the story you want to tell." Is your character already established in the wRHG system? Then he won't be explaining to himself how his opponent might know his stats, or how they're presented in neat numbers and graphs. The story is about the main focus of your story, whatever that may be. It needs to be locked onto that like a laser-guided missile. Every sentence on a topic that's irrelevant to that, could be a sentence used to make your story more tense, more interesting, or more moved-towards the moments that everyone really wants to see.
Another way to teach the readers these little interesting details, is how you choose to present them. This is really big for the topic of
Show, Don't Tell which is a whole 'nother thing that I won't go into here. How are you going to insert your idea, whatever it is, to the reader? Is it going to be as a passing thought in the narrator's words, or will it be in a way that makes the reader realize it themselves? Which way sounds more interesting?
If your character is extremely sensitive about a particular topic, don't just say it as an afterthought in narration. Make the topic get brought up in conversation, and show your character's response to it. Show the consequences of his reaction, and the reason the topic got brought up in the first place. This adds to the story in a meaningful way. It teaches the reader what you wanted to show, and it's entertaining while it does it. These topics and interesting ideas can be absolutely anything, and it's up to you to be creative with how you present it.
To wrap this up while it's still a coherent lesson, here is what you should think about when writing exposition at all times:
-What am I focusing on right now? How am I going to get there?
-Why does what I'm talking about right now matter?
-Could I reveal this information in a better way?
-Can I narrate this section in less words without losing any quality or entertainment value?
I'm probably missing some points that I could go into more detail on. If I've lost track, I'll elaborate more if anyone asks any questions.