Schall's most awesome poems

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Aug 17, 2008 11:15 PM #225670
Yeah. It's actually only one poem, actually.

Here's the German original:

Die Engel stehn, in ihrer kluft
doch einer fällt hoch aus der Luft
die Flügel reissen hart am Wind
es fällt zu tief, des Himmels Kind.

Es sieht sich um, doch sieht es nichts
der Himmel lässt es doch im Stich.
Die letzten Tränen fallem weich
die fall wird schneller, es fällt leicht.

Es landet ohne gleichgewicht
die Sonne scheint ihm ins Gesicht
Gebrochen, einsam liegt sie da
was einst ein stolzer Engel war.

Wandert unter Menschenseelen
nur die Flügel, die ihr fehlen
des Himmels antlitz wahrt sie stets
des Himmels Schönheit, wie sie geht.

Wo sie auch ist, ich kann sie spüren
Des Himmels Pracht kann ich berühren
Der Engel, er hat einen Namen
Du bist es - in meinen Armen

Sort of like Rammstein lyrics, ain't it? Here's the english translation:

A band of angels standing high
one shatters, tumbles from the sky
his wings are torn from winds too wild
it's falling deep, this heaven's child

It's looking round, but spotting none
heaven's guiding hand is gone
the final tears are floating way
it's falling faster down it's way.

It shatters, hitting mortal's space
the sun is shining in it's face
the world seems cold, so lost inside
the angel's found no place to hide.

Wandering under human kind
it's just the winds left far behind
heaven's face is still on her
heaven's beauty, everywhere.

Where she may be, I feel her still
I'm touching heaven's might at will
the angel, yes, it had a name
It's you - the love I still acclaim


For my girlfriend, yeah.





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Aug 17, 2008 11:44 PM #225703
Awesome. It rhymes in English and German.

I don't think I could ever write poems for a girl, but that's a pretty good one.
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Aug 18, 2008 12:13 AM #225739
I don't understand the German one, but I liked the translated version. Translating poems are often really hard without killing them. My girlfriend asked me to write her a really cheesy good bye poem, so I'm working on that..
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Aug 18, 2008 12:22 AM #225748
You're definitely getting some head for that poem ;)


It's pretty good. I'm surprised that it rhymed in english and german.
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Aug 18, 2008 12:30 AM #225755
Quote from Deadface.
Awesome. It rhymes in English and German.

I don't think I could ever write poems for a girl, but that's a pretty good one.


Thanks. Yeah, I didn't translate it too literally but I kept the meaning of it, still it was my goal to make it rhyme in both languages.

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I don't understand the German one, but I liked the translated version. Translating poems are often really hard without killing them. My girlfriend asked me to write her a really cheesy good bye poem, so I'm working on that..


Thanks.

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You're definitely getting some head for that poem ;).


It might get me a little closer to getting head while chatting on IRC.
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Aug 18, 2008 12:36 AM #225760
Getting head while doing anything on a computer or video game consol would be ****ing awesome.
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Aug 18, 2008 1:41 AM #225781
Dag, yo
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Aug 18, 2008 10:33 AM #225982
Nice poem. I like the German part being all German.
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Aug 18, 2008 12:59 PM #226056
aww you shouldn't have <3
yeah, its really godly, as someone said, i liked how the german seemed to rhym aswell, great flow.
good work.
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Aug 18, 2008 4:53 PM #226176
That's some pretty sweet poem there.
Rhymes in both languages, too. Good +10, that should get your girlfriend going....
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Aug 18, 2008 5:04 PM #226185
Wow, that's awesome. Best poem I've read in a while.

Will you compose the music for it too?
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Aug 18, 2008 5:07 PM #226187
Quote from Mantha
Wow, that's awesome. Best poem I've read in a while.

Will you compose the music for it too?


Thanks.

I'm not sure. It might be a little tricky to get a fitting musical background for it, so it's rather probable I'll just leave it as a poem the way it is.
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Aug 19, 2008 12:28 PM #227114
Wow, I really liked it. Especially the first paragraph.
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Aug 19, 2008 12:33 PM #227123
I'm stealing this k.
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Aug 19, 2008 12:38 PM #227128
Quote from Myself
I'm stealing this k.


no >:Ü .